Recent Reviews for Steve E Ralph
The Promising Student (Short Story) - 6/9/2007 2:32:19 PM|
Wow!! I have to agree with APAX..... I'd love to see this on the big screen.
The Promising Student (Short Story) - 10/2/2006 6:31:37 AM
wow........would make a great movie
The Promising Student (Short Story) - 8/16/2006 7:04:06 AM
This is an excellent story. I think you should be able to get it published and I suggest that you try. Go to the latest Writer's Market to find the publications that might be interested. My only recomendation for improvement is to work on the format. I'm not sure if you did the single spacing between paragraphs of if it was the result of moving it in and out of a text format.
My Brother Jac (Poetry) - 12/6/2013 9:15:15 AM
So sad. My sister is kind of like that, but I think it's just mostly menopause. Her son, however, has been banished from the family for verbally abusing her and other bad behavior that he may not deserve because his mother was an instrument in his making.
Back to Jac. By reaching out in this poem, you may have reached him. I remember when my father and his brother came together at their mothers funeral and buried the hatchet. Once he gets over his depression and paranoia, if he is still alive, he may be the one seeking you out. Time has a way of healing old wounds.
It's probably not AD's editor, but your word processor. When you copy your document, make sure that you "paste it to match style" for "paste special" in a simpler format like text (.txt) or rich text format (.rtf) rather than the usual "document" because later versions have a lot of hidden formatting that the editor can't handle.
My Brother Jac (Poetry) - 12/5/2013 9:40:37 AM
It is sad but I appreciate the sincere tone that you express through your words here, Ralph. Love and peace to you,
My Brother Jac (Poetry) - 12/5/2013 9:39:44 AM
It can be read and understood. I like it. I think we all have a brother, son, daughter, etc who won't hear us.
My Brother Jac (Poetry) - 12/5/2013 3:14:39 AM
this is such a sad right for him and all of you
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 11/23/2013 7:40:02 AM
I like this. It makes you think and especially so if you are a senior.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 1) (Poetry) - 11/23/2013 7:35:38 AM
I lovvvvve it.
Catching Smoke In A Net (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 6:01:57 AM
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (part 5) (Poetry) - 8/9/2013 10:30:43 AM
I agree with Annabel...awesome!
Catching Smoke In A Net (Poetry) - 8/9/2013 10:29:13 AM
A beautiful tribute to your amazing and dear 'other half 'as always your poetry is top class work.
Love to and Sally always
from your old pal
Catching Smoke In A Net (Poetry) - 8/4/2013 12:36:51 PM
Excellent poetic analogies that pay tribute to your significant other.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (part 5) (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 4:54:30 AM
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (part 5) (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 11:24:13 AM
Yes, once again, a poem of epic proportions, true to the story of Robin Hood.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (part 5) (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 7:46:15 AM
Great write, Steve. Excellent in every way.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 4) (Poetry) - 7/6/2013 10:41:41 AM
It's been a while since I read the other installments, but this classic, epic poem is splendid in its detail and description. I especially found the battle scene to be quite realistic. Looking forward to Part 5.
The Prayer (Poetry) - 6/7/2013 4:21:02 AM
This is completely heart wrenching and so very well penned, Steve. I can't even imagine what those who protect us have to endure. Thank goodness they care enough to stand up against oppression. Truly enjoyed...
The Prayer (Poetry) - 6/5/2013 3:33:22 PM
Excellent write, Steve. Being an Army vet myself, this hit home.
The Prayer (Poetry) - 6/5/2013 11:50:10 AM
Perhaps not, but the symbolism and the realism is quite stunning in this description of the reality of war. Kudos for your diligence.
The Prayer (Poetry) - 6/5/2013 8:16:23 AM
As always, your poetry comes alive in the reader's eyes!
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 3) (Poetry) - 5/6/2013 5:03:03 AM
Awesome writing, Steve! Absolutely love the lyrical spin...
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 3) (Poetry) - 5/3/2013 3:21:23 PM
Ron said it very well and I must agree. Well done, my friend.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 3) (Poetry) - 5/3/2013 9:37:56 AM
You have the makings of a classic, epic poem. I have noticed that it has great meaning for our world today with its moral messages.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 2) (Poetry) - 4/25/2013 9:53:53 AM
Tough [though] it is, it sure looks like you have the fine makings of epic poem about Robin Hood. In spite of the dire consequences of part two, I enjoyed your phrases immensely.
Looking forward to the continuation…
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 2) (Poetry) - 4/25/2013 3:31:21 AM
Awesome! Love this story! Can't wait for part 3...
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 2) (Poetry) - 4/25/2013 1:24:12 AM
An excellent tale, Steve. Well done indeed.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 1) (Poetry) - 4/15/2013 9:16:54 AM
A nice medieval story set to rhyme. Enjoyed.
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 1) (Poetry) - 4/15/2013 7:49:40 AM
A great tale of an injustice
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 1) (Poetry) - 4/15/2013 4:45:26 AM
Awesome tale, Steve...loved the lyrical lilt to the story! Well done...
A Tale Of Oak And English Folk (Part 1) (Poetry) - 4/15/2013 2:31:14 AM
Great write, Steve. Could be a story of America's future, too.
Very well done, my friend.
Hamish (was a leprechaun) (Poetry) - 4/10/2013 11:02:39 PM
I am sorry that I have to admit...this poem is..100% perfect.
Hamish (was a leprechaun) (Poetry) - 4/7/2013 5:43:26 PM
Nice to read some blarney from you, Steve.
This was an entertaining ditty for St. Patrick's Day, and only a little late! (I suppose that's because of the long trip Hamish had to take)
Hamish (was a leprechaun) (Poetry) - 4/2/2013 5:28:54 AM
I'll definitely be reading this one to my grandson!!! Very well done and a delightful story, Steve!!!
Hamish (was a leprechaun) (Poetry) - 4/1/2013 7:41:16 AM
Yes, I second Budd on that! I'm not much for fairy tales, but this one is special.
Hamish (was a leprechaun) (Poetry) - 4/1/2013 3:38:25 AM
what a delightful write
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/29/2013 3:57:24 PM
beautiful...simply and emotionally moving...love your work and want to read more. rose colored glasses was so lovely...pmedlin
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/20/2013 5:52:39 AM
I also have thoughts of dying. I wonder but don't really want to know when that will be. A beautiful tribute to your loving wife, I hope she reads it and sees the depth of your love for her.
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/15/2013 12:08:54 AM
A beautiful poem Steve and I can indeed relate to it...I hope you do go first Steve (only so you don't have to feel such painful loss)but hopefully you will both die at the same time,painlessly,lovingly entwined in each others arms.
Senile Dementia (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 6:19:35 PM
I know this is a powerful agaony, Steve, I am sorry for your sometime loss of ur mom, but keep thinking of the times she is with you and altogether...they are the times for her & you that ur life has meaning as does hers...ur lucky to still have her, whether she is totally with you or not...e
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 6:15:53 PM
Re ur pic, you don't look at all old, but I guess age is in the way you think and see life or death in maybe the not so distant future...e
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 11:23:49 AM
You--old? Well, maybe a little older, but certainly still young enough!
Bill and I talk about who will go and who will be left also. I honestly believe, knowing him, that it would be harder for him to be left behind. I have other interests (i.e. writing) and a confident faith in God. It would be so, so hard, but knowing God will be with me through the heartache is a great comfort.
Your poem is very expressive and well-written. A sad subject indeed.
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 8:11:49 AM
These thoughts to come to me more frequently now since my brush with death in December. I try to keep them to a minimum because there's much left to do in this life as long as it lasts. Trying to discern who will go first is a rather useless exercise because we really never know until it happens.
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 6:32:01 AM
But just for today, be thankful you have been given the gift of another day and let tomorrow take care of itself. This is a very good poem.
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 5:08:11 AM
Wow! This is as good as poetry gets, Steve!!! How very beautiful and touching...
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 4:14:10 AM
So very true. Well done, Steve.
Inside An Old Man's Mind (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 3:44:29 AM
well done i found much truth here
Rose Coloured Glasses (Poetry) - 3/11/2013 11:08:30 PM
She is a luckly lady ...that is for sure...beautiful poetry...please finish your book for us all.I want to by a heap of them.
Best wishes always
Senile Dementia (Poetry) - 3/11/2013 11:04:17 PM
Painful...because its so real...awesome poetry steve!
Rose Coloured Glasses (Poetry) - 3/3/2013 9:56:07 AM
Love is blind and conquers all ills. You are so lucky to have such a love in your life.
Rose Coloured Glasses (Poetry) - 3/3/2013 8:28:06 AM
Very nicely done, Steve.
Senile Dementia (Poetry) - 2/27/2013 3:27:21 AM
Well written piece, my friend.
Senile Dementia (Poetry) - 2/25/2013 8:00:13 AM
Classically beautiful. You have so clearly defined the agony of loved ones when someone has dementia. I remember visiting my grandmother during the five years she had lapses until she finally just ate, slept, smiled and stared, the well read woman coherent no more.
Senile Dementia (Poetry) - 2/25/2013 5:54:50 AM
Beautifully penned and truly heartfelt writing, Steve. My husband and I went through this with his mother...there isn't any easy way to do it...
Senile Dementia (Poetry) - 2/24/2013 6:29:16 PM
Your a very good son to your mother.
I have a friend who does not visit her husband too often.
She says, "What's the use, he does not know me."
I replied, "We'll you certainly still know him."
The truth is we don't know how much they recall at the end of the day.
But still, it's a pleasure to visit the ones you love because they are still with us and that's significant.
I'll never forget my father in law who would walk out of the front door wanting to go to the bath room. I would steer him in the right direction by saying, "Hey dad, let me show you a short-cut."
Even though he even forgot where the bathroom was he was still a joy to be around. We had fun with dad until the end. That's what family is all about!
God Bless you,
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/20/2013 2:08:59 AM
If poetry could be judged 0nly by it's weight of wisdom and wit then yours would be called 'Mr Fatso' by me... this awesome poem of yours weighs heavy of amazing lines that weave the usual S E Ralph magic in and out of every verse and allow the likes of me to look through your looking glass and with total awe spy on my favorite poet...your work never disappoints me...thank you for sharing this top class poem with us all.
Best wishes always
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/19/2013 5:47:00 AM
When I see an overweight person...I see a human being suffering with emotional problems that manifest themselves in a complete lack of self-worth...so sad....Very well penned, Steve.
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/18/2013 6:08:12 AM
what a great write/read this is steve and i agree...it held me to the end then dropped me off that proverbial cliff.
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/16/2013 5:34:34 PM
Wow! Shocking ending to a very thought provoking poem. You are gifted. You hold the readers attention till the last verse. Excellent!
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/16/2013 11:59:26 AM
Interesting introspection. We are what we eat. Our physical fitness is dependent upon how fit we behave. Once we let ourselves go down that slippery path to obesity, it is hard to climb back up.
I think everyone that is suffering with obesity should be placed in a concentration camp for at least a year. They will be surprised what it does for their health after they are released and find that even eating a small meal will cause them to get sick. In the end they will find that they will live healthier (like Johðn McCain) and longer lives as a result.
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/16/2013 11:52:25 AM
I see me in that mirror...but I'm happy as can be.
The Fat Guy (Poetry) - 2/16/2013 9:58:34 AM
Very, very deep and thought provoking, my friend. Hang in there and God bless.
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/15/2013 6:08:42 AM
this gave me goose bumps!!
a wonderful write & excellent flowing
Heart Spun Memories & Parchment
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/11/2013 1:57:46 PM
Very tender and softly spoken, marvelous Steve!
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/6/2013 1:58:26 AM
An awesome poem Steve ,perfect work indeed.
Best wishes always
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/4/2013 6:19:27 PM
Great tale, Steve. An excellent write all around. Loved the rhyming, meter and verse. That's real poetry.
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/4/2013 1:07:33 PM
Ah you got me with this touching poem. A tear welled in my eyes.
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/4/2013 12:02:50 PM
You got Johnny's phrasing and vernacular quite well. I do believe he would want to sing it if you presented it to him today. It was a pleasure to have heard his booming voice and the details of ordinary lives that he told with his songs.
I Gave His Love To Rose (Poetry) - 2/4/2013 7:06:17 AM
Awesome!!! And you sure did a fine job of ending the saga...great idea to write this, Steve...
Rapist ? (Poetry) - 1/5/2013 9:17:02 AM
What an impact this poem makes and we rarely hear the other side. Well written.
Love and Dreams,
Inner Self (Poetry) - 1/1/2013 12:40:55 PM
The hardest one to ever fight is the inner self indeed but fight it we must and love it we must too for it is either friend or foe and we can only pray to understand it and let it free to grow and hopefully set it on the right path so it hurts few and hopefully helps many especially hope it comes to no harm and harms no one else.I think we are guilty of not listening to one's inner self and that in my opinion is because deep down we are all children who want our own way.You wise poem inspires and enlightens with it's profound meaning.As always perfect poetry sir Ralph.Love to you and yours and happy new year Steve...from Kay
But.... (Poetry) - 12/28/2012 4:21:59 PM
I know what you mean...'but' hurts so much .All your poems are perfect in my opinion and there is no 'but' ever on that view.Hugs to you and yours
Friendship (Poetry) - 12/22/2012 2:10:17 PM
All I can write ...from my heart...likewise my dear old mate!
Hugs and love to you and Sally
always from Kay
But.... (Poetry) - 12/22/2012 8:50:56 AM
Fine and whimsical, and all the more fun for being caustic at times! Blessings,
But.... (Poetry) - 12/19/2012 5:04:25 AM
But the word that can change all meaning stated before it
But.... (Poetry) - 12/19/2012 4:10:21 AM
Great job, Steve. I truly enjoyed this.......but..... ;-)
Inner Self (Poetry) - 12/13/2012 4:21:27 AM
Very powerful write, Steve....one gets a true feel of the anguish people must endure with addiction....sad....well penned!
Inner Self (Poetry) - 12/11/2012 9:10:43 AM
A powerful write, my friend. Praying that is all it is; just a writing and not what you're going through. Be well and may God bless you.
Friendship (Poetry) - 12/9/2012 5:10:58 PM
Completely wonderful, Steve!!! Love it!
Friendship (Poetry) - 12/8/2012 6:16:40 AM
Terrific tale, Steve.
World Peace (Poetry) - 11/12/2012 10:47:45 AM
Steve, I hear you! I have always wanted World Peace, ever since I was a little girl. In my high school yearbook, that was one of my ambitions.
Oh well, we can all dream right!
Much peace, love and light,
World Peace (Poetry) - 6/5/2012 5:03:22 AM
a beautiful dream. thanks for the share
World Peace (Poetry) - 5/30/2012 3:53:06 PM
Yes, it can be!
Your writing is exhilarating and yes there is hope ~
Golf (Poetry) - 5/30/2012 12:32:32 AM
World Peace (Poetry) - 5/30/2012 12:30:49 AM
To my dearest friend...steve...my dream is for the world to have 'world peace.'You are my favorite poet because..'you do truly care for this world.'
World Peace (Poetry) - 5/29/2012 2:45:07 PM
All too true and very well written, Steve,
World Peace (Poetry) - 5/29/2012 10:31:22 AM
I totally agree. Jon Lennon said well in his song “imagine.” And then some who religious fanatic killed him. I really do believe that time you are describing will come, perhaps as soon as fifty years, if we don't let our differences drag us into another conflict.
World Peace (Poetry) - 5/29/2012 4:59:40 AM
Sure would be a dream come true! But I don't think its in the cards for humans to behave like they were intended to. A world without hatred, famine, conflict...sigh......this was a fabulous write, Steve...loved the flow and the powerful message....
World Peace (Poetry) - 5/29/2012 2:32:04 AM
Hi Steve. World Peace is a interesting and wise read. Outstanding penship that nailed every key point. ~Valerie~
Golf (Poetry) - 4/12/2012 10:51:04 AM
Giggle....sounds like my game.....I guess I'm better at watching the pros play....Thanks for sharing this delightful trip on the greens...
Golf (Poetry) - 4/12/2012 3:58:23 AM
Very nicely told, Steve.
Golf (Poetry) - 4/11/2012 10:15:43 AM
A golfer's tale that flies in the face of reason, requiring endless patience.
Man-eater (Poetry) - 3/29/2012 12:29:46 PM
would make a great song :)
Holocaust (Poetry) - 3/29/2012 12:26:29 PM
'good men doing nothing' perfect, applicable ending for a great reminder piece of poetry.
you dealt with the questions i asked my german family when i was younger...'why didn't they do something' 'how could they not have known' ' why weren't we their children, allowed to speak german too'
thank you steve,,,so glad i found you or you found me ...whatever way it was. pmedlin
Feud (Poetry) - 3/28/2012 11:37:41 PM
This one left me with a smile (thank goodness I have teeth to smile and both eyes to read) awesome work Steve,truly awesome!
Old Soldier (Poetry) - 3/28/2012 11:33:16 PM
You never disappoint me...not ever....this awesome poem is surely one of your best...and as usual,I loved it!
Old Soldier (Poetry) - 3/24/2012 10:02:13 AM
I sure hope it's true. If the elderly new how to defend themselves there would be far fewer muggings. But then, you got me thinking about that Clint Eastwood movie, Gran Torino.
Old Soldier (Poetry) - 3/22/2012 4:58:16 AM
Awesome story, Steve! Loved the way it unfolded...and a marvelous lyrical lilt to boot!!! Well done!
Old Soldier (Poetry) - 3/22/2012 1:19:14 AM
Fantastic write, Steve. Very well done.
Old Soldier (Poetry) - 3/21/2012 1:57:50 PM
You had my heart racing here, Steve! What a story and written so wonderfully!
Covert Operations (Poetry) - 3/21/2012 6:33:54 AM
Well said Steve. Wish every US citizen were required to read this. Dick
Old Soldier (Poetry) - 3/21/2012 6:14:59 AM
This is one of those little items that make the hair on the back of your neck stand up as you read them.
Well done Steve. Thanks Dick
Respect (Poetry) - 3/15/2012 9:53:07 PM
Wonderfully written! You haven't lost your touch, Ralph. Nice to read you again.
Respect (Poetry) - 3/13/2012 8:13:50 AM
Wise words, a little bit slanted towards the United States point of view. While it's hard, one must also view the situation from the other shoes.
Respect (Poetry) - 3/13/2012 5:58:09 AM
This is simply AWESOME! You sure nailed it! If we respected each other and EVERYTHING that entails...the world would be a fine place to live...peace and harmony would reigh! Loved this!!!!!
Holocaust (Poetry) - 3/13/2012 2:30:56 AM
Deep...sad...tugged at my heart...the Jewish people had it bad there is no doubt of that I hope humans never let that sort of thing happen again.I know many good German people but you are right Steve
they still carry that 'Albatross Forever round our necks'...a great poem!
Brothers (Poetry) - 3/13/2012 2:21:29 AM
Another beauty full of the awesome Ralph humour and wit...I loved this one!
Respect (Poetry) - 3/13/2012 2:18:06 AM
A very wise and profound write which I totally agree with...great work again Steve!
Respect (Poetry) - 3/12/2012 4:08:47 PM
Excellent write, Steve.
Respect (Poetry) - 3/12/2012 3:21:46 PM
Filled with much emotion and much truth ~
Respect (Poetry) - 3/12/2012 12:14:32 PM
Nicely stated Steve. From your lips to the ears of all the various immigrants coming across our borders. And I would also ask that they get a job rather than expecting us to feed and clothe them.
Brothers (Poetry) - 3/5/2012 4:58:48 PM
Totally entertaining and clever!
I have four of them and no sis :)
Brothers (Poetry) - 2/27/2012 11:52:43 AM
LOL loved the ending :-) and it shows how close the brothers really are........they just don't like to admit it :-)
Brothers (Poetry) - 2/27/2012 5:32:15 AM
I grew up in a large family (6 siblings)...I totally get this! Thanks for the smiles, Steve...well done and so much fun!
Brothers (Poetry) - 2/25/2012 6:49:28 AM
Obviously you were the big brother. I wasn't. The memories are still there, but not as fondly recalled as yours. Still, it's a very familiar and entertaining read. Well done, Dick
Brothers (Poetry) - 2/24/2012 3:14:04 PM
Sisters do it, too, Steve. My wonderful sis and I fought like cats and dogs; then we'd make up and be best friends. Thanks for the laughs!
Brothers (Poetry) - 2/23/2012 3:39:00 PM
lol Much enjoyed. Good one, Steve.
Holocaust (Poetry) - 2/18/2012 12:57:08 PM
You captured history the way I know it. Back in the 1960s, I was fortunate to work for a man named Wilhelm Hemminghaus. in the German Navy at 17, Bill was the communication officer in the ship off Italy that was blown up and he ended up in the water, being strafed by US fighter pilots. Later, he was strafed by US fighter pilots while traveling between cities with his father. They hid in the bushes and survived.
Bill came first to Canada after the war because there was no work. He joined Honeywell in Minnesota and was the supervisor of about thirty in process quality control women inspectors at our GTE LenKurt plant in California.
Bill was kind and gentle with the women and very generous, mentoring me and offering to buy me a Mercedes in Germany during his vacation back home. I didn't realize his racist feelings until we were viewing a movie one time and he asked me to leave because he thought that a black man was going to have sex with a white woman. My great uncle felt the same way.
Holocaust (Poetry) - 2/18/2012 7:16:37 AM
informative &well written ...
Holocaust (Poetry) - 2/17/2012 6:23:10 AM
That last stanza makes a powerful statement, Steve! Such a horrible tragedy...we'll never forget. Still, if we look around the world today...what have we really learned?...so very sad....Very well done, Steve!
Holocaust (Poetry) - 2/17/2012 1:53:52 AM
"Proving there is good and bad, In every race and creed;
And good men doing nothing, Will help evil to succeed."
Amen! Those last four lines say it all. Nice job, Steve.
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 2/2/2012 5:22:39 PM
This is sensitive and sorrowful, amazingly written poetry!
Feud (Poetry) - 1/30/2012 8:33:33 AM
After readin yer den page I'd haf ta say thet I'm a thinkin thet yer imagination writ this here story. Sure wish my imagination worked thet dern good.
Really an enjoyable read, Steve. Thanks Dick
Jock (Poetry) - 1/30/2012 8:19:46 AM
Wouldn't it be nice if all the "Jocks" of the world could receive such a nice send off. Course, it would be much nicer if they could hear it before it was time for a "send off"
This was a truly enjoyable posting, Steve. I've been reading quite a bit of your stuff lately and it seems as though your talent is growing by leaps and bounds.
Good stuff. Thanks Dick
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 1/30/2012 5:32:25 AM
Great ballad of truth, Steve! So sad...
Feud (Poetry) - 1/30/2012 5:29:56 AM
Hahahaha! Right up to that last line...this was so much fun! Well done, Steve, and thanks for the chuckles! LOVED the last stanza!
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 1/30/2012 2:33:23 AM
Al too true, Steve. Well put.
Feud (Poetry) - 1/30/2012 2:31:41 AM
Enjoyed this true to life write, Steve. Well done, my friend.
On The 5th Of December (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 8:14:11 PM
Nicely told, nicely constructed. Maybe a rough edge or two, but if you are like me, a poem is never "FINISHED."
Every time I re-read one of my earlier pieces, I do so with a editor's eye and I'm constantly changing little things about older poems.
I agree with Joy, your talent is obvious and you apparently enjoy writing,,,,,, if you are paying any attention at all to what your work is saying and to what people are saying about your work, you can’t help but get better with time. But you know what? The great thing about what we do is ….. no body is grading you, you don’t pass or fail, ,,, if you are pleasing yourself and aren’t pissing off everybody else, you’re a success here on the Den, at least in my book.
Keep em comin, Dick
The Fire Brigade (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 7:51:10 PM
I'm on board with this one. I don't put them on a pedestal quite as high as our military, only because they are well paid union workers, but they are brave men doing a worthwhile job.
You’ve done them a service with this posting. Dick
The Horsemen's Laugh (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 7:32:20 PM
Wow! Another very interesting and entreating posting and it's ten years old???? guess you're not just some overnight success then, are you? I haven’t been keeping up with your stuff for a while, but this is great stuff Steve.
Well done. Dick
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 7:15:49 PM
Very entertaining and enjoyable reading, Steve. I like telling a story in rhyme, but it is especially difficult to maintain the flow of the story, continue a smooth rhythm and still uphold the rhyming at a high level. You handle all of that extremely well. Bravo!! Dick
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 8:36:15 AM
This white man is in love with the land. Not in love with development and making the land something it isn't, but in love with the way the red man saw it, as a land of plenty and a source of food and enjoyment–nothing more.
Your poem is an eloquent description of the atrocities Europeans inflicted on the native people of the North American continent. I grew up with cowboys and Indians and soon found how ridiculous and bigoted people can be. Casinos are small reparation and may be more destructive than good. I read where Buffalo are returning to native lands. That's a good sign.
Thanks for bearing truth for all those patriots out there who have such a warped sense of patriotism.
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 8:29:06 AM
well written scenario of a what unfortunately has become a universal theme ...
White Mans Lies (Poetry) - 1/29/2012 8:16:48 AM
Your poem reads like a diary entry from a time so long ago that has been forgotten..I too, write of this injustice, with my series Karena, Eagle Medicine woman..take a look and see what I have written over the years in poetry journal entry form..I loved your descriptive words, brought me right back to the time when Native Americans lived peacefully until the white man came and changed their world...
Thanks for wharing this wonderful poem...
Peace, love and light,
Colour (Poetry) - 1/27/2012 2:40:02 AM
A very wise insightful poem and also a rare one for you Steve in as much as it is short compared to most of your work but even though it is short it says an awful lot ...all of what your poem says is truth.
I loved it!
Jock (Poetry) - 1/24/2012 10:48:44 AM
A GREAT DEAL OF 'HEROES' THAT PASS THROUGH THIS WORLD...ARE ONLY KNOWN BY 'ONE'. AH...BUT THAT 'ONE'...? 'HE' IS THE MOST IMPORTANT 'ONE'! BEAUTIFUL WORK...WITH PHRASES, RHYME AND RHYTHM FLOWING TOGETHER SMOOTHLY, CREATING IMAGERY THAT IS SET IN A WONDERFUL STYLE. I WILL KEEP THIS. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS
Jock (Poetry) - 1/22/2012 11:25:15 AM
Thank you for sharing this touching and meaningful tribute, Steve. Love and peace to you,
Jock (Poetry) - 1/18/2012 10:25:39 AM
Those are the hero's that touch my heart :-) Thank you for introducing him to us.
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 1/17/2012 6:43:39 AM
To sweet the dreams of poetry 'n' prose..
well done `Steve` Lady Mary Ann
Jock (Poetry) - 1/17/2012 6:38:20 AM
A wonderful encounter of the man you came to know as Jock..
Splendid story of a hero ~Steve~ Lady Mary Ann
Covert Operations (Poetry) - 1/17/2012 12:06:21 AM
Jock (Poetry) - 1/17/2012 12:03:20 AM
It is a very great writer who can make the reader love the characters in their poems/stories...you made me love Jock and his life this poem touched me..I did not cry but I came very close to It...Jock would not have wanted tears.Put this one in your book please.
Best wishes always to you and Sally and family
On The 5th Of December (Poetry) - 1/16/2012 1:33:27 PM
You are much too humble; I think your poetry reveals real talent. I have found the more one writes, the better one becomes. Don't ever give up, keep writing and reviewing others work and you will learn so much! I enjoyed this poem and have become a new fan of yours!
Joy L. Hale
Covert Operations (Poetry) - 1/16/2012 9:01:15 AM
Amen....there are so many we need to be thankful for...they put themselves in harm's way so that we may be free....
Colour (Poetry) - 1/16/2012 8:59:53 AM
Truth!!! Well said!
The Law’s An Ass (Poetry) - 1/16/2012 8:59:11 AM
I totally concur with your observations, Steve...there's not much justice in this world! Except of course for the criminals...Very well penned!
Just Another Black (Poetry) - 1/13/2012 5:53:15 AM
Wonderful strands of empathy woven into this truly meaningful and far-reaching work!
Just Another Black (Poetry) - 1/13/2012 5:30:03 AM
So sad to be taken for granted and used, then discarded....My uncle was with the Canadian Armed Forces in Korea many years ago, and his best friend was an Aboriginal man from Australia who saved his life, and died in the process....HIs memory is absolute GOLD to my uncle. Great job on this, Steve!
Man-eater (Poetry) - 1/12/2012 8:20:39 PM
Super clever and I love the way you explore chinks in the heart and soul's armor!
Man-eater (Poetry) - 1/12/2012 5:23:31 PM
Wow....what more can I write...wow says it all!
Man-eater (Poetry) - 1/10/2012 10:51:15 AM
Man-eater (Poetry) - 1/10/2012 8:53:25 AM
My kind of poem. Like a country song, down and dirty, all day long.
Man-eater (Poetry) - 1/10/2012 7:35:46 AM
I guess this happens in life more than one would be able to imagine. There are some selfish people born to wander and break as many hearts as they can.I don't think they have a conscience...Very nicely penned, Steve!
Man-eater (Poetry) - 1/10/2012 5:46:59 AM
This makes me remember and old Faron Young song, "Your Time's Coming."
Missing From The Picture (Poetry) - 1/9/2012 2:51:15 PM
A very profound and beautiful work from you Steve but 'what's missing from' this comment is the wide eyed amazement on my face whenever I read your poems.Awesome poetry Steve!
Missing From The Picture (Poetry) - 1/9/2012 10:46:16 AM
This is classic! The story is so true and the rhyme makes it very powerful as each element of the story unfolds. It's good to see someone writing poetry here for a change.
Missing From The Picture (Poetry) - 1/9/2012 6:30:41 AM
Awesome!!!!!! What a tragic love story you have unravelled with your cleverly crafted phrasing, Steve! This is so true in life! Lies, cheating...lives destroyed....families torn apart.....I can relate to this!
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 12/20/2011 1:04:36 AM
It will happen one day dear friend...I have known it from the first reading of your work...indeed Steve....you are (in my view)there as AN EQUAL with them...I know it is true...I really do know it...you are my favorite poet because you are,indeed,THE BEST!
As for this poem...perfection...as always!
Love to you and Sally and A happy christmas
from...YOU FAN ALWAYS...Kay.
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 11/29/2011 6:11:01 AM
Wonderful, this sparkles! It is as enlightening as it is entertaining!
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 11/26/2011 9:21:25 PM
Yes! That was some sweet dream, Steve. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you,
The Dragons Lair (Poetry) - 11/25/2011 10:21:02 AM
Oh, your demise surprized me. Go again & slay the the dragon.
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 11/25/2011 10:17:04 AM
What a wonderful dream you write of Steve & to find the courage in such company... Both message & measure well done.
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 11/25/2011 5:56:27 AM
An absolute gem! The rhythm and lilt to this poem is awesome, Steve! Saving this to read again and again! Very well penned!!!!LOVED it!
Heavens Poetry Recital (Poetry) - 11/24/2011 9:29:35 AM
Yes. That was some dream, and so well described in your poem.
On The 5th Of December (Poetry) - 11/15/2011 11:07:43 PM
You are the best poet ever...I love this and all your poems...wow!
The Fancy Dress Steeplechase (Poetry) - 11/6/2011 9:15:51 AM
Love this, Steve. Great rhythm. Thanks for the laugh. -gene.
The Dragons Lair (Poetry) - 11/3/2011 12:07:09 AM
Ha ha ha ha...eaten by a dragon...a fitting ending for Sir Ralph...seriously though...this was (once again) a magical write which I loved.
The Horsemen's Laugh (Poetry) - 11/3/2011 12:00:28 AM
Wow again...yes,I too want to be deluded just as the innocent children are...I too 'believe.'
A truly awesome write with much insight and inspiration.
Ypour fan and friend
The Fancy Dress Steeplechase (Poetry) - 11/2/2011 11:56:20 PM
One of my favorites of yours...so glad you have reposted it Steve,
Best wishes always
The Dustmen Come Today (Poetry) - 11/2/2011 11:55:14 PM
Sad but beautiful too.
The Fire Brigade (Poetry) - 11/2/2011 11:53:05 PM
You must send this this to the local fire brigade surely they have a news letter and this should be in it...if you like I will send it as it needs to be out there.
Best wishes always
Unforgivable (Poetry) - 11/2/2011 11:49:05 PM
Another masterpiece...the people who survived the Bali Bombings would really relate to this steve...totally awesome insight and poetry!!!!!!!!
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 11/2/2011 11:45:41 PM
Oh wow...oh wow...oh wow...I love this so much and really want your permission to send it to the leader of the Green Party here in Australia I know they will love it too.
your number one fan
The Fire Brigade (Poetry) - 11/2/2011 3:57:02 PM
Unforgivable (Poetry) - 10/31/2011 8:10:25 AM
I don't think I could forgive either, Steve....hopefully this is not biographical...but if it is, my heart goes out to you....How could anyone forgive such cruel, senseless acts!
Unforgivable (Poetry) - 10/31/2011 7:29:42 AM
Powerfully and bravely explores suffering and loss.
Unforgivable (Poetry) - 10/29/2011 7:07:22 AM
Steve, this is a fantastic accounting of a tragic event. Since I've just recently come across your site, I don't know if it's biographical or not, but it sure made the hair on my neck stand up. Love your work. Thanks Dick
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/29/2011 6:57:23 AM
Great poem, compelling message, love the rhythm and rhyming. Not much wrong with this one, Steve. Standing O - Thanks Dick
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 11:19:12 AM
I am in complete agreement with the point of view that you have shared through your verses here, Steve. Thank you for this apt and timely "wake-up" call. Love and peace to you,
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 7:53:24 AM
I couldn't agree more. It's scary to try to imagine what will be left for future generations. Coal seam fracking, oil spills in the Gulf, mountain topping in W. Va, all concocted to provide 'profit', seemingly never to worry about the affect on our beautiful planet.
On My Way Home (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 7:04:36 AM
Very sad, but nicely done and yes, I could see it as a song. Dick
Writers Block (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 6:54:03 AM
Steve, I just stopped by your site after receiving your review of my poem. I haven't been here before, but I like what I've read. Got many more to go, but wanted to say how much I liked this one. Dick
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 6:52:58 AM
A convicting and compelling insight. I'm convinced humanity has gone past the rubicon. Seems the Earth has become fatally overwhelmed with, (what can only be construed as) birth pangs, as if something (prophesied) is about to be birthed. I'm also convinced that an intervention is in the offing.
Peace to you ... richard
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 5:05:18 AM
Wonderfully probing piece, serious and compelling...
I found this fascinating because I did not know all about this, and learned quite a bit in reading this. Thank you!
An Act Of Human Kindness (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 4:55:43 AM
Touching! Just when we think there are far too few acts of human kindness, someone comes along to remind us that we are wrong. These "little simple acts" speak volumes and have the strength to change lives. Hopefully there will be more. Beautifully written. ~Best, Elizabeth
The Surgeons Tears (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 4:51:47 AM
"And as he took his final breath, A teardrop left my eye Somehow this one got to me, Though I couldn’t tell you why" ... perhaps because this soldier's passing represents all those who had gone before him and all those who still fight but that we hope will survive. This is truly a moving piece, so appropriate to our time and broken hearts. A very poignant poem, well done. ~Best, Elizabeth
Writers Block (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 3:58:56 AM
Giggle....been there so many times....love your writing style...you have a new Canadian fan!!!
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/28/2011 3:57:56 AM
Amen, Steve....our precious Earth has been raped and ruthlessly exploited more in the past centure than ever before....where will it all end? Excellent write!!!
Coal Seam Fracking ??? (Poetry) - 10/27/2011 1:17:27 PM
Well-written thoughts. The problem is, the more removed technology makes us from our roots, the less we know about the source of our food and energy. That becomes the activity of businesspeople. As a former teacher in a graduate school of business, I found that the primary drive the businesspeople was profit and nothing else. The assumption that resources are inexhaustible and we only have to move to a new resource when we've exhausted one is a fallacy that many believe.
It is up to us, the dreamers and poets, to spell out to the unknowing what is happening to them as a result of the greed of big business.
In another life I lived in West Virginia and mourned the loss of trout in the acid, polluted streams. Now they talk of mountain topping as though it were a way to make West Virginia flat for farming–and, inhospitable for life–including human.
Special (Poetry) - 10/18/2011 2:24:17 AM
How true when they say 'easy come, easy go'. You have managed to portray a lifetime in this marvellous piece and you have done so with honesty and candour. That alone is to be applauded.
Writers Block (Poetry) - 10/12/2011 11:08:16 PM
I agree with both Sherri and Connie you have to carry a pen or pencil
with you (and paper) always so you can write down each and every line that pops into that poetic mind of yours .However,your frustration of 'not remembering' has delivered a cute and funny gem for your fans to read...only you could make a poem out of not being able to!!!you are amazing.
Hugs to you and Sally
Writers Block (Poetry) - 10/7/2011 1:28:26 PM
Time to start carrying pen and paper in your pocket! We can all empathize with your frustration, but this poem is the fruit of it,so "all's well that ends well."
Writers Block (Poetry) - 10/7/2011 12:15:41 PM
I have been there! This was a verse that I enjoyed reading and I could identify with! Thanks for sharing! Sherri
Father (Poetry) - 7/24/2011 2:39:28 PM
I am sitting here,tears streaming down my face,lump in my throat crying my eyes.... out such is the impact of your poem on me.
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/9/2011 10:12:07 PM
Everyone's dream for sure. Nicely done. Patrick
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/7/2011 8:33:17 PM
This is so close to perfect, it's scary!! (Message me if you want the typos). This is extremely well-written, and if you haven't submitted it somewhere, with the typos fixed, you should. One of the best poems I've read in awhile.
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/7/2011 5:01:00 PM
Absolutely magnificent! Enjoy the back and forth between non-reality and reality..
Be always safe,
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/7/2011 2:37:09 PM
absolutely intriging write...good job Sue
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/7/2011 2:29:29 PM
You have aptly described me everytime I check my numbers for the lottery...though my desires may not stretch to jets & yachts & visiting the world, I would dearly love to make enough to pay my bills for the rest of my life & just a little fun on the side...EXCELLENT write, sir.........Ed
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/7/2011 11:08:40 AM
ABSOLUTELY SCRUMPTUOUS! FROM BEGINNING TO END...I ATE LIKE A FAMISHED PET TASTING SOMETHING ENTIRELY RARE AND SO...ENJOYABLE! THANK YOU, SO MUCH, FOR SHARING. THIS IS A KEEPER. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS
Meanwhile....(Back home in the real world) (Poetry) - 7/7/2011 9:14:17 AM
You always know how to keep the reader interested.... great write as usual... Love your structure. Jenni
An Act Of Human Kindness (Poetry) - 6/8/2011 6:01:07 PM
As always you have written a touching profound poem in a way that only you can do,it is an awesome write that I loved reading...Steve,how about going to that market again for the next few times it is on,you may just find he has a regular stall there and take the poem with you to give him,or else... put it in the local newspaper 'Letters to the editor' as it is 'true' it will be refreshing local news (in verse) and that kind guy might just read it.
Best wishes always
your aussie pal