Reader Reviews for "The Diary (A Screenplay)"

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Reviewed by Mitzi Jackson	8/12/2004
yeah this is a good one it reminds me of the ring enjoyed this alot
Reviewed by Nickolaus Pacione	4/8/2003
HOLY CRAP!!!! This one is insane Ron -- good one as well. Strong write.
Reviewed by Jessica Stanfield	4/7/2003
I really liked this! I could see every scene like I was watching a movie. Good write. - J -
Reviewed by Clayton Umbach (Reader)	3/31/2003
Interesting twist. Very good dialogue. Might make a good teleplay (teleplay format is slightly different) as part of an anthology (this is about 13-15 mins of screen time). Good placement of the fade out to commercial. Couple of points: "Cut to's" are generally not used between scenes as the "cut" to a new locale is obvious. Lena's voice from off camera should be "OS" (off screen) vice "VO." Most directors frown on (or ignore) specific camera direction. In scene setting, the time of day should come last: INT. Leana's Bedroom. Night.
Reviewed by m j hollingshead	3/30/2003
good one