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Once Upon A Time in LA Screenplay Excerpt
By Phillip E Hardy
Monday, February 10, 2014

Rated "PG13" by the Author.

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This is the first 25 pages of Gold Medal Winning Script "Once Upon A Time In LA"

TEXT ON SCREEN
“The danger to be feared the most is never the danger we are most afraid of.”
~Andrew Lang
INT. - WHITE CONVERTIBLE - ARIZONA - DAY
On a Sunny June afternoon, LINDA CHURCH (32) and her boyfriend NEIL WALSH (35), are on Highway 65 driving towards the north rim of the Grand Canyon. 
CUT TO:
INT. - APARTMENT - NORTHERN CALIFORNIA - DAY
RACHEL CHURCH (27), a tall, pretty brunette rapidly types on her Mac computer, while looking out the second story window of her cozy Santa Cruz Apartment.
Rachel picks up her phone and punches in a number.
CUT TO:
WHITE CONVERTABLE
LINDA CHURCH
(into phone)
Hello little sister.
RACHEL CHURCH (V.O.)
(over phone, filtered)
Hey, where are you?
LINDA CHURCH
We just took the Williams turnoff to the Grand Canyon.
RACHEL CHURCH (V.O.)
It’s a long ass drive from Santa Cruz.
LINDA CHURCH
We stopped in Laughlin last night to play roulette but never left the room. Hint, hint.
RACHEL CHURCH (V.O.)
Oh my God, definitely too much information.
LINDA CHURCH
Jealous?
RACHEL CHURCH
At least one of us is getting laid.
LINDA CHURCH
You outta try it sometime. It’s highly therapeutic.
RACHEL CHURCH (V.O.)
Yes, I’m trying to recollect what a penis looks like. I seem to remember a banana shape.
LAUGHTER
INTERCUT TO RACHEL’S APARTMENT
LINDA CHURCH (V.O.)
(over phone, filtered)
So where’s the enfant terrible?
RACHEL CHURCH
(into phone)
He rode his skateboard to the Boardwalk with his knucklehead friend.
LINDA CHURCH (V.O.)
Jerry?
RACHEL CHURCH
Yes, the unholy duo.
LINDA CHURCH (V.O.)
I hope Andy’s not cramping your style.
RACHEL CHURCH
What style? Until my thesis is complete, it’s the nun’s life for me.
LINDA CHURCH (V.O.)
I’m imagining you as Audrey Hepburn.
RACHEL CHURCH
Yeah, I wish.
LINDA CHURCH (V.O.)
Come on, I know. If you don’t already know it, you’re beautiful sweetie.
RACHEL CHURCH
Thanks for being my biggest cheerleader.
LINDA CHURCH (V.O.)
It’s my job. I love you.
RACHEL CHURCH
I love you too.
INTERCUT TO CONVERTABLE
Linda looks up to see an oncoming car.
LINDA CHURCH
(into phone)
Oh shit!
INTERCUT TO RACHEL’S APARTMENT
RACHEL CHURCH
(into)
What’s the matter babe?
Rachel abruptly gets a dial tone.
RACHEL CHURCH (CONT’D)
Linda... Linda?
Rachel punches in her sister’s number and gets a busy signal.
CUT TO:
INT. - CATHOLIC CHURCH - DAY
A sanctuary is packed people attending a funeral service. Rachel Church walks up to the podium.
RACHEL CHURCH
Today, is the hardest day of my life, as I am delivering a eulogy for my beloved sister Linda. It is no small wonder the church is packed. Linda was loved by many, as she always gave so much of herself to everyone who was lucky enough to know her.
(pauses)
She was my surrogate mom, my best friend and my confidant, and speaking for her son Andrew and myself, we are feeling an incomprehensible loss; but we also take comfort in knowing that in spite of her brief life, she has left a powerful imprint upon us. I was on the phone with her, when she and Neil perished; and it is appropriately ironic that Linda’s last words were “oh shit.”
Uncomfortable laughter in the church.
RACHEL CHURCH (CONT’D)
Appropriate because Linda was not prepared to leave this earth; and we were not prepared to lose her.
CUT TO:
INT. - APARTMENT - NORTHERN CALIFORNIA - NIGHT
Rachel sits in a small living room with her nephew ANDREW (13), a tall teenage boy with blonde hair.
ANDREW CHURCH
So am I going to a foster home?
RACHEL CHURCH
Is that what you want?
ANDREW CHURCH
I know you got your own life to live and may not want me along as a boat anchor.
RACHEL CHURCH
A pain in the ass is more like it. At least a boat anchor is useful.
ANDREW CHURCH
(chuckles)
Alright, I deserve that.
RACHEL CHURCH
I want you to come live with me until you’re eighteen. You’re my sister’s son and you belong with family. Not in damn foster care.
ANDREW CHURCH
Thank god. Because I don’t want to live with strangers.
Rachel musses up Andrew’s hair.
RACHEL CHURCH
And I don’t want to inflict you on some poor unsuspecting family.
ANDREW CHURCH
Can I have my own room?
RACHEL CHURCH
Yeah, you need that. So we’ll have to get a bigger place. But you’ll have to sleep on the sofa for a while.
ANDREW CHURCH
It beats being homeless. What about LA?
RACHEL CHURCH
What about it?
ANDREW CHURCH
You said you want to live there after you graduate.
RACHEL CHURCH
And I still do. Will I be able to separate you from Jerry and your precious hangouts on Main Street?
ANDREW CHURCH
Yeah, Jerry and I can Skype I guess. Besides, Santa Cruz is snoozeville. I’m ready for a little more excitement.
Rachel extend her arm to shake hands.
RACHEL CHURCH
Alright then. Looks like you and me are roommates. 
ANDREW CHURCH
I could do worse.
RACHEL CHURCH
That’s a comfort.
CUT TO:
INT. - RACHEL AND ANDREW’S APARTMENT - DAY
TITLE CARD: VENICE, CA - SIX MONTHS LATER.
Rachel and Andrew unpack boxes at a spacious loft in an urban area.
RACHEL CHURCH
Well, what do think? Aunt Rach didn’t do too bad.
ANDREW CHURCH
It’s great; but can we afford it?
RACHEL CHURCH
I’m gonna give it to you straight. The only good thing to come out of your mom’s passing, was she left you and I a considerable amount of money.
ANDREW CHURCH
Are we rich then?
RACHEL CHURCH
No, but we’re comfortable. And if I get that job tomorrow, I’ll be able to afford this place and you have money for college.
ANDREW CHURCH
College? I’m just getting into high school.
RACHEL CHURCH
I know, but you better start thinking about it now loser.
ANDREW CHURCH
(indignant)
I’m not a loser.
RACHEL CHURCH
Easy there delicate Daisy. I’m teasing you.
ANDREW CHURCH
Alright, I get it.
RACHEL CHURCH
You better. I don’t you to wind up playing guitar at the promenade for pass the hat change.
ANDREW CHURCH
I thought you liked my guitar playing.
RACHEL CHURCH
I do, but being a youtube sensation isn’t a good career path.
ANDREW CHURCH
Yes, Doctor Rachel.
RACHEL CHURCH
I’m just saying.
ANDREW CHURCH
It’ll get me the chicks.
RACHEL CHURCH
Chicks? You sound like the Fonz.
ANDREW CHURCH
Who’s the Fonz?
RACHEL CHURCH
He was a character on a TV show.
Andrew looks at Rachel likes she’s from another planet.
RACHEL CHURCH (CONT’D)
Never mind. What do you think you want to be?
ANDREW CHURCH
I have no idea.
RACHEL CHURCH
Well, I guess you got a few years to think about it. Let’s consider your immediate future.
ANDREW CHURCH
What do you mean?
RACHEL CHURCH
I’ll make it simple. What do you want to do for dinner tonight?
ANDREW CHURCH
Let’s try out that barbecue on our rooftop deck.
RACHEL CHURCH
That sounds great. And after dinner, we can walk to that Gelato place down the street.
ANDREW CHURCH
Lady, you got a date.
CUT TO:
INT. - OFFICE - DAY
Rachel sits in a small, empty lobby waiting for a job interview. She is smartly dressed in a simple, grey pantsuit.
MILLIE ABRAHAM (40), a Santa Monica therapist walks out of her office. She’s a handsome woman wearing bohemian chic attire and lace up leather boots.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
(smiles)
You must be Rachel.
Millie and Rachel shake hands.
RACHEL CHURCH
It’s a pleasure to meet you.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
Let’s chat in my office for a few.
Millie motions Rachel over to an open door.
MILLIE ABRAHAM (CONT’D)
You have a strong handshake. I like that.
RACHEL CHURCH
Hey, I’m a small town girl.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
Santa Cruz right?
RACHEL CHURCH
Yes.
Rachel and Millie walk inside the casual looking office decorated with local modern art and comfy leather chairs.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
(points)
Have a seat. I love Northern California.
RACHEL CHURCH
It has it’s charms.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
So what brought you to LA?
RACHEL CHURCH
I was ready for a change.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
You told me on the phone you live in Venice now.
RACHEL CHURCH
That’s right. Me and my nephew just moved into a loft near the cute part of town.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
Venice and Santa Cruz have similar sensibilities.
RACHEL CHURCH
We’ll see.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
How old’s your nephew?
RACHEL CHURCH
He just turned fourteen.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
That can be a challenging age.
RACHEL CHURCH
He’s a pretty normal kid.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
Where’s his parents?
RACHEL CHURCH
His father, whereabouts unknown.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
And his mother?
RACHEL CHURCH
She was killed in a car wreck six months ago.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
I’m so sorry. So he’s dealing with a loss issue.
RACHEL CHURCH
Yes, he was very close with his mom.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
And what about you? Were you close?
RACHEL CHURCH
She was everything to me.
(chokes up a bit)
It’s still pretty hard to talk about.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
I can’t imagine the loss you must be feeling.
RACHEL CHURCH
Hey, this seems more like a counseling session than an interview.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
I like to get to know the people I’m going to hire.
RACHEL CHURCH
You’re giving me the job? You haven’t asked me anything about my qualifications.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
You’ve got your MFCC and enough hours under your belt. Are you good with people?
RACHEL CHURCH
Yes, I love working with people, especially kids.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
That’s all I need for today. I’m going to hire you based on your resume. The next three months will be your interview.
RACHEL CHURCH
You won’t be disappointed.
MILLIE ABRAHAM
So when can you start?
RACHEL CHURCH
Ready when you need me?
MILLIE ABRAHAM
We’ll see you Monday morning at 9:00 AM then.
RACHEL CHURCH
What’s the dress code?
MILLIE ABRAHAM
Casual honey, casual.
CUT TO:
INT. - KARATE STUDIO - DAY
Several TEENAGE STUDENTS are sparring on the mats while the INSTRUCTOR walks around observing.
Rachel comes in, sits down on the bench and watches.
A SIZABLE TEEN throws a roundhouse kick.
Andrew catches him off balance, grabs his leg and takes him down on the mat. He comes down with his closed fist on his opponent’s chest.
INSTRUCTOR
Very good.
Andrew and his opponent get up and bow to each other.
INSTRUCTOR (CONT’D)
All right guys, that’s it for today.
CUT TO:
EXT. - ABBOT KINNEY BOULEVARD - EVENING
Still dressed in his white Gi and brown belt, Andrew leisurely strolls with Rachel down the street.
RACHEL CHURCH
Did you have a good lesson?
ANDREW CHURCH
Yeah, it was alright.
RACHEL CHURCH
You like the new instructor? Mister Woo right?
ANDREW CHURCH
Yeah, he’s cool and guys in class are all laid back.
RACHEL CHURCH
I watched you drop that big dude. I didn’t know you were such a bad ass.
ANDREW CHURCH
Mom started me off when I was young.
RACHEL CHURCH
Yeah, you’re so old now.
ANDREW CHURCH
You know what I mean. I’ve been doing this since I was eight.
RACHEL CHURCH
That is a while. So what’s the most important thing in self defense?
ANDREW CHURCH
I look for my opponent’s weakness and try to exploit it.
RACHEL CHURCH
What if he doesn’t have any?
ANDREW CHURCH
Have any what?
RACHEL CHURCH
Weaknesses genius.
ANDREW CHURCH
Then run like hell.
RACHEL CHURCH
Now that’s smart thinking.
ANDREW CHURCH
So how’d it go today?
RACHEL CHURCH
With what?
ANDREW CHURCH
Your job interview, genius.
Rachel steps in and lightly punches Andrew in the arm.
RACHEL CHURCH
I knew that’s what you meant. I got the job!
ANDREW CHURCH
When do you start?
RACHEL CHURCH
Monday kiddo. It’s all coming together.
ANDREW CHURCH
What’s coming together?
RACHEL CHURCH
My plan for world domination.
ANDREW CHURCH
Why stop there?
(sinister voice)
Why not, the universe!
RACHEL CHURCH
You’re right. I’m thinking too small. Let’s talk about it over dinner.
ANDREW CHURCH
We’ll celebrate your new job. Where we going?
Rachel stops in front of a Sushi restaurant and gives Andrew the once over.
RACHEL CHURCH
I say we eat here. Who knows, with that getup they might offer you a job.
ANDREW CHURCH
I think that would be very nice.
Andrew bows and takes Rachel by her arm and walks her into the front door.
CUT TO:
INT. - RACHEL AND ANDREW’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
Rachel and Andrew sit on a giant, fluffy sofa watching television while eating ice cream out of pint containers.
The television screen reveals a local NEWS ANCHOR.
NEWS ANCHOR
Good evening, I’m Jim Walker and welcome to the ten o’clock news. Our top story, murder in Santa Monica. For the latest, we take you live to the crime scene with Cheryl Cleveland.
The television reveals a an ATTRACTIVE WOMAN (30) standing with a microphone in front of an apartment building.
In the background, we see the coroner’s van and attendants wheeling out a gurney with a body.
CHERYL CLEVELAND
I’m here on Michigan Avenue where earlier this evening, a  neighbor made a grisly discovery.
The television reveals an MISTER HARPER, an old man talking to the reporter.
CHERYL CLEVELAND (CONT’D)
Mister Harper, tell us what happened here.
MISTER HARPER
Mimsy and I were coming back from our nightly walk and we noticed our neighbor’s door was open, which was unusual.
CHERYL CLEVELAND
What happened then?
MISTER HARPER
I went inside to look in on her. What I saw next was awful, just awful. So I called the police.
CHERYL CLEVELAND
You knew the victim then?
MISTER HARPER
I knew her. But the detectives told me I can’t say anything else.
The television cuts back live to Cheryl Cleveland.
CHERYL CLEVELAND
We have one deceased victim, just removed by the coroner moments ago. And Santa Monica PD has ruled her death a homicide. Out of respect for the family, the victim’s identity is being withheld pending notification. Back to you Jim.
The television reveals the News Anchor.
NEWS ANCHOR
So, we have a murdered woman in Santa Monica. But right now, we don’t know much else. But we’ll keep you updated with breaking information on this developing story. In other news, the Mayor talked about tax hikes for local businesses.
Rachel grabs the remote and shuts off the television.
Andrew gets on the laptop and google’s something.
ANDREW CHURCH
Michigan Avenue’s only a couple of miles away.
RACHEL CHURCH
I know, I drove past it earlier today.
ANDREW CHURCH
Isn’t your new job in Santa Monica?
RACHEL CHURCH
Nothing gets past you Sherlock.
ANDREW CHURCH
Doesn’t that creep you out?
RACHEL CHURCH
No, it’s a big city and it was probably the boyfriend.
ANDREW CHURCH
You think?
RACHEL CHURCH
In cases of domestic violence, it’s always the husband or an ex-boyfriend.
ANDREW CHURCH
That poor old man and his poodle probably got a shock, huh?
RACHEL CHURCH
Yeah, lucky Mimsy didn’t have a heart attack.
Andrew and Rachel start GIGGLING.
ANDREW CHURCH
Maybe we should get a dog.
Rachel LAUGHS some more.
RACHEL CHURCH
How’d we make that leap?
ANDREW CHURCH
Dogs are good for home protection. Not a poodle though.
RACHEL CHURCH
(nods)
I’ll take it under advisement.
INT. - VOLKSWAGON CONVERTABLE - DAY
Rachel is driving on her way home from work and notices a sign for rescue dogs. She quickly pulls the car over and parks. 
CUT TO:
INT. - RACHEL AND ANDREW’S APARTMENT
Andrew is sitting on the living room sofa watching television and eating cereal.
Rachel walks in with a fluffy WHITE DOG on a leash.
ANDREW CHURCH
Oh my God, what the hell is that?
RACHEL CHURCH
Andrew, meet Clayton.
Rachel lets go of Clayton, who runs over, jumps on Andrew and begins kissing his face.
ANDREW CHURCH
Look at those brown eyes you have. What kind of dog is this?
RACHEL CHURCH
He’s a Soft Coated Wheaton Terrier.
ANDREW CHURCH
So he’s Clayton, the Wheaton.
RACHEL CHURCH
Yeah and he’s a rescue dog. How cool is that?
Clayton lays down on the sofa by Andrew.
ANDREW CHURCH
He’s a good sized pooch. How old is he?
RACHEL CHURCH
The lady at the shelter said he’s three.
(beat)
You know you’re going to have to walk him and feed him right?
ANDREW CHURCH
I’m cool with that.
RACHEL CHURCH
I hope so. You’re the one who wanted a dog. Now, he’s your responsibility.
ANDREW CHURCH
(pets dog)
Clayton, you’re our new killer watch dog.
Clayton jumps up, puts his paws on Andrew’s shoulders and starts licking his face.
RACHEL CHURCH
Yep, he’s a killer alright. I feel safer already.
CUT TO:
INT. - OFFICE - DAY
Rachel walks into the lobby of her new workplace to see AMY BERGER (27), a impish young woman with long curly hair. She is drinking coffee, while sitting at the front desk typing on the office computer.
RACHEL CHURCH
Hi, I’m Rachel Church.
AMY BERGER
I’m Amy Berger, the other headshrinker you’ll be working with.
RACHEL CHURCH
Nice to meet you and looking forward to working with you.
AMY BERGER
You need some coffee? I just made a fresh pot.
RACHEL CHURCH
No, I’m good.
AMY BERGER
Well let’s get started then. Millie’s at a conference and won’t be in this morning.
RACHEL CHURCH
(nods)
Alright.
AMY BERGER
I was just checking the schedule and she wants me to hand you off some new patients.
RACHEL CHURCH
That sounds great.
AMY BERGER
Your first client is a difficult case involving a boy with Asperger’s Syndrome. Do you have any experience with that?
RACHEL CHURCH
Only what I read in textbooks.
AMY BERGER
Well, you have a half hour to brush up on the internet. The clients are Bill and Joyce Wexler and their son’s name is Emile.
RACHEL CHURCH
I’ll do that; and use my other best asset.
AMY BERGER
Oh, and what’s that?
RACHEL CHURCH
Being a good listener.
AMY BERGER
That’ll work. And you have two other appointments before lunch.
RACHEL CHURCH
Thanks.
CUT TO:
INT. - RACHEL’S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS
Rachel sits at her desk reading the computer monitor.
Amy knocks, open’s the door and pokes her head in.
AMY BERGER
The Wexler’s are here.
Rachel quickly gets up and walks into the lobby.
LOBBY
Stern looking BILL WEXLER (35) and his pensive wife JOYCE (34) stand waiting with a beautiful boy EMILE (12).
RACHEL CHURCH
Hello, I’m Rachel Church.
BILL WEXLER
Hello, Bill Wexler and this is my wife Joyce.
Joyce walks up behind her son and puts her hands on his shoulders.
JOYCE WEXLER
And this is our son Emile.
RACHEL CHURCH
(smiles)
Hello Emile, nice to meet you.
JOYCE WEXLER
What do you say Emile?
EMILE WEXLER
(monotone)
Nice to meet you.
Bill pats his son’s shoulder.
BILL WEXLER
You wait here in the lobby son and play your computer game while we speak with the nice lady.
Emile quickly sits and begins tinkering with his iPad.
Rachel motions her clients towards her office.
RACHEL CHURCH
Right this way folks.
The Wexler’s follow her inside.
RACHEL’S OFFICE
The Wexler’s take the two guest chairs and Rachel sits behind her desk.
RACHEL CHURCH (CONT’D)
So, tell me about Emile.
JOYCE WEXLER
Our son has Asperger’s Syndrome.
RACHEL CHURCH
Yes.
BILL WEXLER
He’s a high functioning case though.
RACHEL CHURCH
What does he like to do?
BILL WEXLER
He’s good with his computer; but he’s also somewhat old school.
RACHEL CHURCH
How so?
BILL WEXLER
Emile has an extensive baseball card collection. He spends hours organizing and cataloguing them.
JOYCE WEXLER
He’s quite remarkable and can tell you all the information about each player.
RACHEL CHURCH
What else does he like?
BILL WEXLER
Like any other kid his age, he likes computer games.
JOYCE WEXLER
He’s good in math and especially music, which is the reason why we’re here.
RACHEL CHURCH
Okay.
BILL WEXLER
Our son is currently one of the top ten violinists in the country for his age.
RACHEL CHURCH
That fits the profile. Being obsessive is a major symptom.
BILL WEXLER
Yes, his obsession has made him great; but we have other concerns. External pressures.
RACHEL CHURCH
And what would those be?
JOYCE WEXLER
Emile will be competing in the Sibelius competition next year.
RACHEL CHURCH
Sibelius competition?
BILL WEXLER
It’s an international violin championship in Helsinki.
RACHEL CHURCH
How can I help?
JOYCE WEXLER
We’re hoping you can work on his social skills and coping mechanisms.
BILL WEXLER
We need you to help him focus on what’s important and sharpen his interaction skills.
RACHEL CHURCH
And what do you think is most important?
BILL WEXLER
Practicing his instrument. He needs to win the Helsinki Championship.
RACHEL CHURCH
Well, we can certainly try out some counseling to see if there’s any benefit.
JOYCE WEXLER
We can’t ask for more than that.
BILL WEXLER
(nods)
I agree.
CUT TO:
INT. - RACHEL’S OFFICE - DAY
NICKY ST. JEAN (15), a hard barked, pretty, teenage girl with a world weary quality sits in a big leather chair across from Rachel.
NICKY ST. JEAN
Where’s Millie? She’s the one I’ve been seeing the past few times.
RACHEL CHURCH
Millie thought you might be more comfortable with someone younger. I reviewed her notes. Is that alright?
NICKY ST. JEAN
I guess. But you look like you just fell off the turnip truck.
RACHEL CHURCH
Actually, I jumped off, of my own free will.
NICKY ST. JEAN
So you’re gonna help me fix my problems?
RACHEL CHURCH
I’m not a fixer.
NICKY ST. JEAN
Isn’t that your gig?
RACHEL CHURCH
I’m here to listen. But we can talk about whatever you want; and see what happens.
NICKY ST. JEAN
Can I talk about the guy I fucked last night?
RACHEL CHURCH
Like I said, whatever you want.
NICKY ST. JEAN
You’re not a dyke are you?
RACHEL CHURCH
No, but would it matter if I was?
NICKY ST. JEAN
I just wouldn’t want you trying anything.
RACHEL CHURCH
I think I can restrain myself. So, who’s this guy you’re talking about?
NICKY ST. JEAN
Living vicariously eh?
RACHEL CHURCH
I see you have an impressive vocabulary.
NICKY ST. JEAN
Why, do I look retarded?
RACHEL CHURCH
Of course not.
NICKY ST. JEAN
So, when’s the last time someone banged your brains out?
RACHEL CHURCH
Is that important to you?
NICKY ST. JEAN
Yeah, I want to know who I’m opening up to.
RACHEL CHURCH
Alright. The last guy I was with was about sixteen months ago in Santa Cruz.
NICKY ST. JEAN
Damn girl, that’s a long time.
RACHEL CHURCH
It’s been a stretch.
NICKY ST. JEAN
Was he a one night stand?
RACHEL CHURCH
No, he was my boyfriend.
NICKY ST. JEAN
What happened to him?
RACHEL CHURCH
He was cheating on me. So I kicked his lying ass to the curb.
NICKY ST. JEAN
There you go. I like your honesty.
RACHEL CHURCH
Good. Can we talk about you now.
NICKY ST. JEAN
(pauses)
Alright.
CUT TO:
 

 

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Reviewed by Ronald Hull 2/11/2014
I looked it up, and there are only two other references to that title. I was worried that it had been used before. I can see all the references to current situations that people would be interested in. I believe the murder fits in later as well.

Reminded me of the wonderful weekends I spent in Santa Cruz and the time I rented a motel room for six dollars in Venice… Those were the days.

I can see why you won an award. The plot thickens…

Ron


A Deadly Class Reunion by Bill Flynn

A deranged, but clever garage dweller mercilessly and methodically wreaks terror on past classmates at their reunion...  
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Until Next Time by Linda Alexander

Perry Conners, Arizona tycoon and soon-to-be politician, can't sleep or make love anymore, and he's losing all sense of reality. Is it the Devil's fault?..  
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