This is my very first short story.
So it may not impress noone, i would value your feedback gratefully. Any pointers you have to improve my writing would be great.
So read, enjoy, and feel free to critique!
Sarah was an ordinary middle aged woman, who had the perfect 'so called' life. She was a newly wed; things couldnít of been better between her and her husband.
Sarah was driving home one day from work, she was on a high way doing 60 m/ph.
Suddenly is was pitch black and it all became bright. The light was so bright that Sarah had to put her hands over her eyes like a shield. Then just as it came the bright light turned off, one would of thought of it to be a light switch.
Sarah stood there in complete darkness. Where am I? Was the only thought going through her mind. How did I get here? Why am I here? Worried and scared.
"Baby, are you ok?" said a voice familiar to Sarah.
"Adam! I'm here, help me!" shouted Sarah, looking around hoping to see who it was.
The voice she just heard was her husband, Adam's, voice.
"Baby I'm okay" said a voice.
This voice however did not belong to Sarah or Adam's, it belonged to another female. This female and her husband seemed to be having a conversation. Sarah was stunned when she heard this other voice, the conversation between Adam, her husband, and this other lady continued becoming more and more intimate. Like a conversation between a man and women deeply in love. Could this be possible, was she hearing right?
"But Adam you have a wife" said the lady voice.
"Oh donít worry Kerry she will never find out" replied Adam.
"Are you sure?" said the lady
"Trust me, I know my wife to well" said Adam
Sarah dropped to her knees she couldnít believe what she was hearing. Kerry? Who was Kerry? How could he do this? Wasnít everything fine between them? Was this really her husband? Was this some kind of a dream?
The two voices she could hear seemed to be having an intimate relationship. Sarah started to cry blocking out the conversation she seemed to be over hearing.
Crying, Sarah was shocked by a loud boom that seemed to echo around her. Then she heard a deep old male voice.
"I miss her so much, yet she doesnít seem to realize. I wish she would visit me more, I'd like that a lot. I remember when she used to visit she would stay with me and we would chat about the good old days. Oh how I miss that. Ever since she got married to that Adam she seemed to cut all contact. I donít get to see her anymore."
"Father! Father! Can you hear me?" shouted Sarah as she scrambled to her feet.
But the voice seemed to continue, unaware of Sarah.
Sarah stood in silence once again. Why was she hearing these voices? Why her husband and her father's? Was there a reason for her to hear these voices?
The bright light came again; she could see it reaching towards her from the distance. She covered her eyes once again, but this time darken did not come. She started to see objects, then a person standing over her. She seemed to be lying down on a bed. She tried to lift her head up but it hurt. The person gently pushed her back to rest her head on the pillow.
"Baby are you okay?" said the person.
Sarah realized it was her husband. She didnít reply just looked at him. Was it all a dream?
"Your in hospital, you had a car crash, thank god your okay," said the her husband again
I had a crash? Sarah didnít know what he was talking about but didnít care right now, her head was hurting.
"Can you get me a glass of water?" said Sarah faintly.
"Sure, I'll be right back," replied her husband.
Sarah with all her strength reached out to where Adams jacket was, she put her hand in her pocket and to her surprise she found a piece of paper with a phone number and the name Kerry beside it. Sarah wanted to burst into tears but didnít want to show Adam she was weak. Sarah heard Adam coming back up the stairs she quickly laid back on the bed.
"Here you go," said Adam
Sarah took the glass of water, not looking him in the eye. "Do you trust me?" asked Sarah.
"Yes, darling, course I do" said Adam easily.
"Who's Kerry" questioned Sarah
Adam face became very serious," I donít know, why you asking?"
Sarah showed him the little paper that was scrambled up in her hand.
"Get out" said Sarah sternly
"Baby I can explainÖ." Stuttered Adam
Sarah by now had already touched the emergency button, a nurse came rushing over and she asked for Adam to be removed from her presence.
Later that evening when Sarah checked out from hospital she went straight to her father's house. He opened the door and when he saw Sarah a big smile spread across his face.
"Sarah, you came to see me!" said her father in a surprised but happy voice.
"Yeah, I'm sorry dad for not visiting you" said Sarah
She had a wonderful time catching up on everything, she never knew how much he missed her, but what really surprised her was how much she missed him.
Sarah explained everything to her father and they decided she stay with her father until she got her life back in order again.
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