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Wishin' 'n Prayin'
By Dawn Anderson
Friday, January 25, 2008

Rated "PG" by the Author.

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Wishing doesn't always make it so!


It was a sweltering hot July afternoon in Argo Alabama, and Ben had just about all he could take of Irma running her mouth.

 “Damn!”  He muttered under his breath as he opened his eyes and continued to hear the drone of her voice.  It didn’ work, he thought.  Maybe I’m jus’ not tryin’ hard nuff.

That had to be it.  After all, hadn’t his daddy always told him since he was a youngun that anything was possible if he just believed strong enough?

He closed his eyes and commenced to thinking, this time even more bound and determined.

Ben, when ya fixin’ ta call the mechanic ‘bout that dang car?”  Irma egged on, toting a basket of clothes in from the washline.

He shut his eyes even tighter, trying to pay her no mind.

Ben!  Did you hear me?”

He could tell from the sound of her voice that she was getting ill as a hornet.

“An’ I’ve been waitin’ on ya all day to run the garbage out.  All ya been doin’ is piddlin’ round all afternoon.”  She paused long enough to take a breath.  Ben, what the hell are ya doin’ sittin’ there like a fool with yer eyes closed like that?”

She was beginning to make him feel swimmy- headed, but he just kept sitting there, not bothering to open his eyes, making out like he didn’t hear her.  For some reason, his mind went back to his Sunday school days and what he learned from his teacher about Jesus.  Something about having faith like that of a mustard seed, but Irma was picking at him so bad, he wasn’t able to remember the exact passage of scripture.  But it didn’t matter…he just had to believe…to have faith…that was the important thing!

Then it happened!  Silence…nothing but beautiful silence.  A slow smile came across his face as he slowly opened his eyes, believing he had finally gone and done it.  But the first thing he saw was Irma – standing before him with her hand on her hip.

“Well?”  She looked at him like he was plumb crazy.

“Shit,” he mumbled, the smile fading from his face.  He shook his head as he rose from the chair.  There were some things his daddy just didn’t know nothin’ about.



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Reviewed by JMS Bell 6/22/2010
Reviewed by Sheila Roy 10/1/2009
Great story, Dawn. These characters come to life.
Reviewed by Cryssa C 9/5/2008
Your story made me laugh...
Reviewed by John Domino 9/2/2008
Well done!

I agree - wishing does not cut it.
Praying results in miracles.


John Michael
Reviewed by Mary Coe 4/17/2008
Really enjoyed this story. Very interesting reading.
Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper 4/3/2008
Loved your story. Probably mirrors the minds of many young people trying to tune out their mother's voice as she directs them to do their chores. Nice job.
Reviewed by Gwendolyn Thomas Gath 2/24/2008

Oh I totally enjoyed this Dawn very well penned indeed.
The imageries the language all tied together in one squared away presentation. The characters in the narrative are so realistic and befitting of images that you shared. Wow and then what really got me was the way Irma silenced and tricked him real good with that. Heeeheee he really thought that his wishin' and prayin' had came through, however your conclusion was also right on the money too.

Blessings and take care,

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton 1/25/2008
What a hoot!!!!! Something a bit different from my friend and I like it, You got the dialogue down perfect, you played the reader, making him wonder what the hell ole Ben was up to and then you let the ending play out just as it would have when you are foolish to think that wishing will solve anything . . . Fantastic piece . . . Why don't you ever put these things on you blog at Myspace? . . .
Reviewed by Kathy Armijo 1/25/2008
All I can say is "poor guy!"

God bless you. Kathy
Reviewed by m j hollingshead 1/25/2008
well said
Reviewed by Ed J. 1/25/2008
LOL, I enjoyed it, a southern gentleman obviously, not! sounds like the south though, very well written, I like the way you develope characters. Thanks for sharing.

Stay well and keep writing.

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado 1/25/2008
Excellent story, Dawn; well penned~ BRAVA!

(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D

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