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The Long Walk Home
By Amy Potts
Tuesday, February 02, 2010

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This is a story about a girl that has a awakening!

The Long Walk Home

Rene' hated walking home from babysitting but with dad working late she had no choice at the moment. Rene' had no car so she had to walk home . She loved babysitting the Dawson twins and did it every friday night and she made an easy 40 dollars and hey she needed the money with dads job being part time. she loved the dawson twins too so it all worked out. the dawsons couldn’t take her home because they had no car she was stuck walking the long mile home. it was very late when the dawsons got back about 1 a.m. and they paid her cash and she was on her way. she thought of calling a cab but they would charge her 10 dollars and she didn’t want to part with the money so she walked as she always did. the street was normally lit but tonight it was quite dark, the street lights were flickering and it made it a bit creepy. she walked fast and tried not to think about being scared of the dark even though the darkness terrified her. She kept walking and a car drove by and then another and then another and then a big black hertz drove up to Rene' and she noticed the man driving the car was dressed in black and had sunken in cheeks and stopped by Rene'. Rene kept walking. the hertz drove up to rene again and stopped and rolled down the window and said hello. rene kept walking and then the car did a quick turn blocking renes path. this was a quite deserted road with no houses in sight at the moment. she figured she had walked possibly half of the way already. she tried to go around the hertz but it was such a long car she couldnt get around it. the man that was driving the hertz got out of the car and approached rene. "hello there rene he said" she looked at him. how did he know her name she wondered. she looked for her cell phone to dial 911. drat where is my phone she said aloud. he looked at her and told her 'your phone will not work' she found her phone and tried to dial 911 but she got no dial tone. oh no she thought how am i going to get out of this? rene started to cry but felt no tears. what am i going to do? he looked at her and said to her.."you must go with me" "you have no other choice" she tried to go around him, she tried to go around the hertz but her feet wouldnt move. she felt stuck in the road . oh no she thought what can i do? he looked at her. she looked at him. he was quite tall with a black suit on and he looked like he was wearing a tux and was that tails on the back of the tux? she couldnt tell. she felt hopeless and scared. she looked at him, he didnt look that scary rather didnt look like much, he had a pale long face, very little hair and he was quite long and lanky. he looked at her and told her once again..'you must come with me now' she told him she wanted to go home. he told her that was not possible . she went to try and escape from him again but her feet would not move. she stood there feeling hopeless. he took her by the hand and she followed him with no problems. he told her she could ride with him up front if she wished. she agreed to ride with him because she felt what else could she do? he opened the door for her and she got in and sat down next to him. he looked at her. he had a blank look on his face showing no emotion or feeling. she looked to the back of the hertz and saw a curtain shielding the back where she wondered if there was anything in the back such as a casket. he looked at her reading her thoughts as he started up the car. he told her..'why yes there is someone in the back inside , would you like to see them?' she shook her head no and told him..'i just want to go home now, can you please take me home and not hurt me?' oh no dear i will not hurt you he replied, my job is to simply take you to where you are suppossed to be. she said well 'i am suppossed to be home!'start here!!!!! she wantedto cry but noticed that as hard as she tried she couldn't cry. he introduced himself to her..'well dear rene my name is michael and my job is to take you somewhere and then my job will be done . ' so you just relax ok? they passed her house just then and he raced past the house so fast that she almost didnt see the house at all. she cried out..'wait! there is my house, i need to tell my dad where i am!' michael looked at her and told her'that is not possible' and they kept driving and then the road seemed to open up and they drove into the road. how is thio happening she wondered. she put her head in her hands and tried to cry again to no avail, it was effortless to even cry, she was so alone and so so scared. they started driving faster and faster and it was getting darker and darker and all of a sudden the hertz came to a sudden stop. the driver michael got out of the hertz and helped rene out of the car. rene looked around and only saw darkness. he led her into a door and then he disappeared. rene looked and saw something in the distance. it was foreboding and dark and seemed to be on fire. she heard screaming, the most terrifying screaming she had ever heard even more terrifying than any scream she had ever heard in any horror movie she had been to. there was a tall being that stood by her. this being was dark with spikes all over him. he touched her and she shreked in pain as if she was stuck with a needle. she cried again to no avail having no tears and feeling no better only worse. she ran away from him running faster and faster not knowing where she was going in the dark not being able to see anything or anyone. she started to pray to a god that she didnt know but now wanted to know with all of her heart. she prayed please god i want to know you i want you to rescue me from this terror, please god forgive me for whatever i have done please god give me another chance to serve you with all my heart! rene fell . she scraped her knees but felt no pain. she bowed to the god she didnt know. she shook in terror at the darkness and the screaming that seemed to be all around her. she heard a loud thumping coming closer and closer to her. she could smell something burning that was a odd smell that she could not identify. she looked to see a huge pit right in front of her that seemed to have no bottom. she could see hands reaching out to her, screaming out to her..'help me please' get me out of here' so many begging screaming shreaking voices . she yelled for them to stop. please god make them stop, please god rescue me now! she looked up to see something climbing out of the pit, something so huge and horrible with scales and ooze dripping off of him and flames flickering from him . it looked like nothing human but she had no idea what it was but she felt like it was some force from hell itself. please god she prayed again, please allow me to serve you and love you, please god..please god..the huge being looked at her telling her..'it is too late for you to serve him' 'it is too late for you' 'you have to serve me now forever in this pit you will be tortured .' 'the torture will never end. ' he then began to laugh the most horrible screaming laugh she had ever heard . rene tried to run away but felt something pulling on her but she kept praying to the god she didnt know and then she saw a very faint light in the distance. she felt like she had a chance and fought whatever was pulling at her and pulled away from the darkness toward the light and felt warm love coming toward her from the light. she started running faster and faster and the light made her feel safe and she couldnt hear the screams anymore. she felt a warm hand on her forehead. she heard hushed voices. rene slowly opened her eyes to see a nurse standing over her praying. she was praying.."lord please save this girl and let her know you ' she smiled at the nurse praying this for her and said to her..'i want to know god, i want to know him. can you help me?' the nurse smiled and they prayed together and rene accepted god into her heart that very minute. her dad walked in a few seconds later. he had learned of rene being hit by a car and rushed to her side thankful to know she was not only ok but actually accepting god into her heart. this was a prayer he had prayed for years ever since his wife passed away after giving birth to her. rene looked at her dad with a new peace inside her heart. she hugged him and they cried together. She felt good to feel the tears on her face. She now knew God. Rene' and her dad prayed together for the first time. She forgave God for her mothers death. She did not understand why she had to lose her mother but she now knew the God her father knew and for that she would be forever thankful.

The End


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