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Crayon Message
By Odin Roark
Posted: Friday, June 22, 2012
Last edited: Friday, June 22, 2012
This short story is rated "PG" by the Author.

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New York affords the meeting of all kinds of characters. Some real. Some…

Crayon Message


Early Last Night

thinking got heavy
uncomfortable feelings crept in
the mix was...
i don't know...

how much?
how much was one person supposed to carry?
how strong this body thin?

have i not hammered enough nails?
untangled enough twisted synaptic vines?
when will it be finished
this lean-to in the forest of high-rise expectancies
these mindscapes where insomniacs of abandoned conscience
meet persistent awareness aflame

is there only sitting alone on empty subway cars
careening through express stops
where ghosts of ancient ether float suspended
waving their giddy hands as the blur passes
where the burning midnight oil insistence
searches for better light
illuminated dream signs
visions that never cease?

that was before i reached the last stop
climbed the stairs into midnight darkness
listened to my cacophony of silence
pushed through that familiar door
straddled my stool at O'Riley's
made my pencil write
while five and dime glassware
became faceted crystal of my dreams
sloshing memories about
elbowing their way into napkin after napkin
crossed out words after crossed out words
caramel river after caramel river
finding my liver oh so accommodating

Later last night

i found my perch atop the familiar railing
you know
the same one as before
and before
and before
studying the arc

did you know water runs deepest
when you know it's time?
they keep telling me
200 feet allows plenty of gravity to collect


they've got me in this awful green room again
took my pencil
gave me a crayon
purple this time
words don't care
curls and lines
just the same

Late last night

they said i had to stay awhile
you know
‘til i convinced them
i'm all here
all together
just a little lonely
no harm

you know
i'm thinkin'
there's gotta be another way
you know
better than making you up all the time
maybe we could meet
you and me
nothing fancy

maybe early
tomorrow night
before my thinkin' gets heavy again



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Reviewed by Diana Legun (Reader) 7/6/2012
Several places shout to me: "how much was one person supposed to carry?/how strong this body thin?" - "...forest of high-rise expectancies", "while five and dime glassware/became faceted crystal of my dreams", "elbowing their way into napkin after napkin" "just a little lonely/no harm" . . desperation in the eyes of a stray dog. Loaded. ~~ Diana
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton 6/22/2012
Heavy duty thinking going round and round and ending up right back where he started. Reminds me of some of the fifties beat poetry, a la Ginsberg except you don't curdle your stuff with filth as did the so-called master of beat, sorry Kerouac, Miller, et al at the Naked Lunch counter where it is cool to be wired a little nutso.

This guy and his reality -- for there is some reality within the lunacy -- He knows what he wants, but eventually gets off track and begins to wander down unfamiliar paths. No wonder they gave him a purple crayon, I'm surprised they didn't give him invisible ink, that would really warp him out.

And yes. New York is the place to meet all kinds of characters, even the one staring back at you in that mirror.
Reviewed by Ronald Hull 6/22/2012
The little tour devolved into a mind game in a cuckoo's nest. Not my cup of tea, but I'm sure others may find it enthralling.


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