||June 10, 2007
The Heart of an Angel
Leslie's Book Store
This is a story about a young woman whose world is turned upside down after meeting the most out of place characters of her time.
Mayla flees from a hardened stepfather only to come face to face with death. Fate takes a strange turn when a lone knight rescues her for reasons he himself is unaware of. Complications abound as her life is in constant peril and this man, Damian, must protect her. His ways are unlike anything she has ever known and she finds herself drawn to him, all the while afraid he could mistreat her and her insecurities follow. Then there is the secret she is guarding. She cannot imagine who would want the illegitimate daughter of a long deceased king.
Damian finally has his life together after the betrayal of his affianced three years prior but the woman he is sent to rescue sends him into a whirlwind of familiar emotions he can hardly endure. All he knows is she has to be rescued and brought back to the castle. He has no idea just how valuable she is until he learns that not only is he to wed her but as the only remaining heir he must help her reclaim her dowry from the men bent on killing her and keeping it for themselves. Fighting these thieving men is difficult enough without warring against a woman who threatens to take his heart.
She attempted to steady her breathing that was now coming in short and shallow, and to keep her body from trembling any further. Anything that could give her away would only mean her death. She heard the sound of metal slicing through air then felt the soft petals and leaves as they gently floated atop her head. She covered her mouth to stifle her gasp.
It is only a matter of time! Her racing mind screamed as she fought to keep still.
Her body was aching to run but after a brief moment she viewed it as a foolish idea for she was absolutely certain he could outrun her. Her heart drummed wildly in her ears as she struggled to listen, to hear his footsteps, but the beating in her chest was all she could hear. It seemed even the birds had hushed their songs, knowing danger was near.
Oh, god no. Please no! She cried out frantically in her mind. Do not let him find me! However, her prayers were not to be answered as he sliced through the foliage and towered over her, casting a shadow that seemed to drag on forever. She turned and began to crawl away, urgently, in a desperate attempt at escape. He grabbed her hair, wrapping it around a large hand and with a jerk, pulled her to her feet.
She choked on the scream that threatened to break loose as pain seared every inch of her head. She felt the welling of tears burning her eyes that she refused to allow to surface. After all, any sign of weakness was sheer pleasure to his wicked and crazed mind, one she would not allow. He leaned over her shoulder and the drumming in her ears nearly drowned out all sound.
"So you thought to run from me?" he whispered in her ear. His words were like poison as his hot breath grazed her ear.
She stood silent, frozen in fear.
"Answer me!" he shouted as he tightened his grip, pulling savagely.
She remained soundless. Not a second later an infuriated grunt arose from his throat. It was then she had become aware of the sharp pain in her left side. Looking down she saw the blood that oozed from the wound his blade had delivered seeping into her dress, causing flesh and fabric to stick.
Oh god, he is really going to kill me! She thought wildly and heard the sound of his dagger being raised, the metal slicing through the air. She could see the lethal instrument in his hand above her, red and dripping.
"It will be my pleasure to be the one to rid the world of you!" he hissed as he was about to strike.
She closed her eyes and held her breath, her insides shaking, her pulse racing wildly as she awaited the final blow, which seemed to drag on endlessly. After a moment she could feel his hold loosen and her hair tumble down. She heard the weapon hit the ground and opened her eyes then, drawing a breath, turned quickly. She watched as he fell back, dumbfounded, staring blankly at her.
She stood transfixed as his body collapsed, back arching. Mayla was unsure if she should laugh or cry, or both. She had never seen anyone reach such a horrid end before and it frightened her, yet the relief of surviving his wrath was overwhelming to her senses. She was still looking upon the limp form as she collapsed to her knees.
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Reader Reviews for "The Heart of an Angel"
|Reviewed by Richard Doiron
|I read the article in the local paper this morning, so I checked out your work posted on this site. I wish to first congratulate you for your strong efforts. This said, however, writing books is not just about volume or numbers but about art also.
I will quote a short excerpt from this work of yours, as presented here:
"Her stepfather’s husky frame had just appeared some
distance downhill and she coward lower. Even in his
plain white shirt and blue tights he cut a frightening
shadow. Surely he’ll not find me she prayed and
peered up again. Her eyes widened as she noticed
the dagger sheathed in his leather belt."
The word coward should be cowered. Also, while a person may know what they wish to say, conveying it is something altogether different. I notice that you switch tenses in some of your work, and that does not work. In short, I see an exuberance here that is commendable but to use an analogy, if one were to put a young colt out in a field and let it run, it might run at random, but if one wanted for such a creature to run races, one would need to teach it about running round an oval.
I think you have a remarkable imagination, and creativity goes beyond book learning. That said, however, there is a lot to be said about merging the creative with the technical. I wish you well with
your future endeavours. You have a good start to things. The thing to bear in mind, though, is that you are now a "professional" writer, and that word needs giving credence to.
|Reviewed by Gracie McKeever
|Sounds like and intriguing and emotional read!
I wish you all the best with it and much success in all of your writing endeavors :)