||Jun 26, 2007
My Rainbow Family tells the story of Drake, a child with a black mother and a white father. Drake takes us into his world and shares about his unique family. He is the youngest in a family of five children that includes a brother and three sisters all of which are of varying races. His brother is C herokee, and one of his sisters is Hispanic and the other two sisters are African. Growing up in their unique multicultural environment, Drake learns to speak Spanish from his eldest sister. Drake and his siblings grow up with a positive attitude about differences in themselves and the people around them. When children at school ask Drake how it is possible for him to have a black mother, his response is, “families come in all colors”. The story also touches on single motherhood and co-parenting as Drake talks of his father who does not live with the family, but is involved in Drake’s life. My Rainbow Family is based on the life of author, K. R. Vance, and her five children.
MY RAINBOW FAMILY
"My name is Drake and I'm four years old. I am the youngest in my family. I have one brother and three sisters. My favorite color is blue and my favorite toys are my red fire truck and my big, stuffed panda bear, "Bamboo". I have black, curly hair, dark brown eyes and my skin is very light. My mommy is black and my daddy is white.
My mommy has pretty brown skin, dark brown eyes and long, black hair. When mommy took me to school one day, some of the kids didn't know she was my real mommy. Keegan, a boy in my class, asked my mommy, "How can Drake be your son? You are not the same color." Mommy smiled and said, "families come in all colors." I laughed and mommy gave me a big hug."
My Rainbow Family Review
Critique Section - This information will be provided by the Critic: Lynda
The Current Title - How catchy is it? How well does it convey the information in the manuscript?
My Rainbow Family is a catchy title that will certainly grab the attention of an interested reader.
The Current Synopsis - How catch is it? Does it intrigue?
Overall synopsis is good.
The Current Length of the Work - Is it appropriate for the target market?
The current length of the work is appropriate for the target market.
What is the power of the opening 3-5 sentences?
I think this works well to instantly engage the reader and make them want to learn more about the story and Drake.
Dialogue (if any) - Describe and comment.
It is clear what dialogue is related to what character and you allow the reader to see that dialogue is coming up.
Mechanics - Grammar:
Your grammar choices look good to me.
Mechanics - Spelling:
I did not notice any spelling errors.
Mechanics - Punctuation:
The punctuation looks good overall.
Other / Conclusion
This is a delightful story that readers will enjoy and that is well chosen (in terms of topic) for the current reading market. Good Luck!
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