THE MAN ON THE PILLOW (poem) by A PAX on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on October 25, 2006

Made me smile...

Chrissy

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

an interesting twist of circumstances to say the least ... at least they weren't in the wrong hospital ;) very clever, Pax ...

Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

NOW THIS was real genious..
YOU are incredibly witty, intelligent and just plain brilliant!..wow!! What a write..YAY!!

saved this one!!

vesna...)

Reviewed by Miss Pandora (Reader)

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

LOL!...powerful message in a great whimsical piece...nice twist. Panda:)

Reviewed by Paul Williams

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

You so & so, had me going there Lol...Love the twist Anita. Top write.

Paul;-)

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

You got me sitting up here,,,thinking how bloody greedy and Wham you got me again!!

Love Tinka :)

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

You blighter. Had me!

Reviewed by Edwin Larson

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

I didn't expect that twist Anita...LOL...You bait the reader with this one...then end on a high note...I just feel bad for the other man down the hall... ;) Good write !! Enjoyed this morning read.

Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

Lovely twist at the end. Such situations are not uncommon alas. I believe Moliere wrote a play on such avarice. Great poem, Victor

Reviewed by Ch'erie de Perrot

Reviewed on October 21, 2006

Oh totally creepy, yeah...
I like Dai's response, bit O Scot nonsense there, hehe.
Wot a tale, wot a scare loved it.
You gotta have medical POA lol, thats power of attorney.
Bit like the old bellringers, oooh that makes me shudder.
;)Ch'erie

Reviewed by Brett Moore

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Anita, this hits so close to home. Your depiction of human nature is so right on. Sooner or later, most of us will be on that pillow.

Reviewed by Regina Pounds

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

While you hit upon something despicable and all too common, you do it with irony and a great sense of humor...punishing those who need it...great story telling, great poem.

Gina

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Anita, this can really happen, as I'm sure you know. Having worked in hospitals I've seen versions of it. We can laugh but it isn't really funny it is horror! Superb poem on the topic!

ET

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Wonderfully witty but still sending a strong message of love versus greed.

Fee

Reviewed by Rusty Daily

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

You got me. I'm feeling all bad about this poor soul as I read that and getting real mad at the three. Well done and funny hilarious kinda funny.
Rusty

Reviewed by CJ Heck

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Outstanding poem, Anita! Your rhyme and meter, perfect -- A wonderful surprise ending. Again, outstanding.
Love,
CJ

Reviewed by Approximately Naive

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Reminded me of the dying Scotsman who upon hearing the undertaker tell his weeping wife the price of the funeral, jumped up out of bed and lived another 20 years.

Reviewed by Lew Duffey

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

I was right there with Richard. Can you imagine my laughter when the punchline came?

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL!
GREAT!
God Bless,
Lew

Reviewed by Richard Cederberg

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Anita conchita, queen of the celestial sphere ...

You had me going on this one. You really did.

What a bloody foopah the avaricious foolish three made. This was delightfully humorous and at the same time sobering - that kind of crapola really happens in hospitals.

Richard Lloyd Cederberg

Reviewed by Peter Paton

Reviewed on October 20, 2006

Anita

A chilling and gruesome write that makes the hackles stand on the back of your neck..

And what a twist in the tail at the end..

You are a sublime storyteller Queen A

Peter