Real, Man (poem) by Tami C Ryan on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on September 20, 2006

Powerful and poignant words here, Tami. You have a way of telling your story in a very matter-of-fact way that draws the reader down the page and leaves him begging for more. Great work!

Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G

Reviewed on August 30, 2006

Love it Tam! Love it My friend~ YOu spoke the truth in every REAL line~!!! I love how you wrote this through from 1 convers. to the other... REAL is not easy for many! and YOu handled your part of the convers. REAL WEll! Good luck and Always Listen to your heart! Remember... YOu dealt with your Inner pain, *( nomatter how many times it creeps up on ya') I know - I had been hurt by my DAD for WEeks straight, I was my mother's replacement and his hobby - It went on for years till I went to the police on my own. My own birth mom, watched it happen and turned a death ear! That pain hurt dble... She wasn't there for me! I am stronger and Wiser knowing, I got through it with my inner solitude and strength! WE are strong! Let it not bring you down with the reminders in your mind. YOU deserve to be Happy! and YOu can TAke it and enjoy it! Love ya' Tam- are mold has been broken Sweetie~ Let us yell it to the stars~ Release the pain forever, to help us Grow on and help others! Why? Becuz, WE care and We been there! Warm -Tender-HuGs! Love, Sheeeoxo * By the way-Cape Fear- was Unbelievable with the REAL characters in it, in the 1st one... Wow, what a deep intense movie, that was! I was pissed watching it! It brought out so much from within, and that's a good thing. Self Therapy, now, it's my Writing, Creative Cooking, REading, Gardening-etc... Stay SAFE and STAy Strong!

Reviewed by Debbie Lynn Steele (Reader)

Reviewed on August 25, 2006

Reviewed by Taylor Ryan

Reviewed on August 19, 2006

You've got it going on Tami...this was just the perfect , but overdue, read this morning...I knw it;s out there , just never experienced it...and this is as frightening real as it just hillarious...I see a lot of WOWs below me...and I have to add a few more! Awesome way to see through the bullshit, Tami...I loved it!
Taylor

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on August 11, 2006

This says it hard, stark and true! Way to go, Tami. Love and peace to you,

Regis

Reviewed by Michelle Mills

Reviewed on August 9, 2006

How in heck did I miss this one? I LOVED IT. Of course you never write anything I don't love, but WOW. I can't add anything else to what Phyllis (Pea) said other than maybe another WOW!!!!!!

Reviewed by Phyllis Jean Green

Reviewed on August 7, 2006

F A N D A M N T A S T I C !!!!!!!!!! Like, WOW, Tami. . .where
would I start? Made your point in spades and created an award-worthy
poem at the same time. Contrary to what some people think, that
is hard to do. Please insert VERY.~~Pea Hoo Admirezya Tothemax....
PS: Kinda see why Bozo wants to make u Barbie...yer a dish!

Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)

Reviewed on August 4, 2006

Reminds me of an obscene phone call I got one time. I kept asking the fellow to repeat himself, that I couldn't hear him. After about five tries, instead of a breathy voice he was screaming and finally hung up on me. That's the best way to discourage them...having them to repeat. ROFL

Reviewed by Miss Pandora (Reader)

Reviewed on July 22, 2006

Tami - I think we wrote the same poem in different guises but about similar guys. Strong, powerful and damn right. Glad I found this. Panda :)

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

So you like my photo, eh? <-----not bad

Awww…

You make me blush <------------ it's so small you'll laugh..

Hunh? You wanna chat? <--------try n stop me

Sure, we could do that <---------Deal

What?

When’s the last time I had sex? <------C'mon be honest, I love eggs.

Well, hello to you too! <----------No I'm the only one

What say you?

You want to fondle my breasts? <---------- Didn't think you'd ask that but they do look lonely

Yeah,

You would say that

Would you say that

If you knew

My father fondled ‘em too? <-----------Bastard

Yep,

I’ve got issues <--------- life is so very short, but I understand..

Plenty of ‘em

I’m as real as it gets

Wanna hear about ‘em? <---------ok

Nah, didn’t think so… <-------- I said ok

You’re too busy for that <-----I am?

Busy,

Pretending I’m Barbie <--------Hello Bab's

And you’re Ken <---------I am?

Or Superman <------------Been called worse. But I fly like Ichurus

Imagining you’re gonna

Save me

Save me from myself

Ha!

That’s funny… <---- I love a good laugh...

You. Superman <-----Well That's just me pants...

Flying about in some metaphorical cape

Cape Fear <----------------------Fear of being called superman

Fear of men likeYou

That’s where I live

Why don’t ‘cha come visit me sometime <------The life in yer men, aye?

Here <---------------------------------I say pardon

Here, where I live <-------------------I thought you said that

In the land of the disenchanted <--------Better than disinfranchised

In the land of the disillusioned <---------Never like magicians

In the land of fairytales <------You yeah I like a good story. The wolf who cried boy...

“Fairytales can come true <----I know, the wolf ate the boy, got fed up of getting blamed all the time.. ,

it can happen to you…” <------ We don't have wolves here

Yeah, right <------No we shot the lot

Bullshit <--------Loads

Bullshit, <---------Tullys farm

Bullshit < ------yup bout a mile away, by the saxon church. Cow pats too

You’ve stepped on my last nerve, <----Sorry I thought it was a bug

Damn it <--------- yeah damn all bugs

Call me when you’re real <--------Real what? Superman. No that's just a story. Like spiderman....Father Christmas is real, I give him all my money... Seya

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

it's so hard to find "real" people ...

Reviewed by Amor Sabor

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

Powerful and realistic view, Tami. You have put emphasis on your strengths and the BS back onto the fools who fail to respect a woman for what she can potentially be. Well done.
Amor

Reviewed by Edwin Larson

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

Good one Tami...lol

Reviewed by Cliff Chandler

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

Tami, you've done it again. Powerful,sad, beautiful work,scary, when one wonders where you are today. If it helps you've killed the monster. Great poem.

Cliff

Reviewed by Kerry Compton Star Girl

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

Ain't it the truth!

Reviewed by Chanti Niven

Reviewed on July 21, 2006

I remember reading this poem before. I'm not sure if you've edited but the gist and the mood of the poem remains. Some may see it as an emotional poem, I see it as empowering and strong. You've been dealt many blows in your life but you've become a stronger, more resilient person. Yes, those scars remain but there ain't nobody gonna mess wid you. I'm proud of you precious friend.
Love Chanti

Reviewed by Susan Gilson

Reviewed on July 20, 2006

Angry exudes from this poem and rightfully so ~ It's a frightening reality ~

After reading this poem, I was drawn to read it again and again ~
Raw emotions and scars from the past echo throughout.
Not only could I feel her needs and disappointment but also her anger ~

He hovered pretentiously ~ human flesh
She ached for a tender reality that was not there (something he was incapable to give)
Anger, underlying pain, and a flicker of Hope.

The two lines that hit home ~
"I’m as real as it gets...
Fear of men like You"

This is very powerful Tami ~ you have captured a sad reality!
Well done!

Susan

Reviewed by Suzie Palmer

Reviewed on July 20, 2006

Dearest Tami
Powerfully sad potent and necessary write!
Well done!
Thank you for sharing.
Love, Suzie :-(

Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater

Reviewed on July 20, 2006

Noticing the year of copyright, things haven't changed much, have they? Real write, Tami...

Sage

Reviewed by A PAX

Reviewed on July 20, 2006

Wow..........
this is powerful...........
you never know whats under the surface.........
liked the way you wrote this, in conversational form......
makes it VERY real
pax A