Ethereal Empirical Cries Of Humanity
Whence haste dew lily pads dost drop thy wind flicker flutter heart
Pitter patter thy misty eyes, my liege, I await sunflowers wrought seeds
Petal dye hues, dew sway a-lisp tither thee larking bird trail lit feather
Honey dewdrop swirl bliss water colors, aloft wild flowers whorl winds
Dance my liege amid thy meadow tilling the flower’s songbird twill
Tra La La thy ballet prance’s, mastery tip toes, amid life’s spring of tulips
Long stemmed roses sway adrift melodic harmony pastel love veldt strokes
Chorus bee I am rhymed rhythm, Iambic pentameter aloud dye elocution
Thy bard awaits WordsWorth upon nocturnal stage of Shakesperean wench.
Viola fingered rasp hasp closet of Juliet HeArt in Macbeth Cordelia tragedy.
Feminine vixen, femme fatale flame vamp, poetess enlightened thy woman
Whose nurtured womb birthing chord, wails –
Ethereal Empirical Cries Of Humanity
Second version
Humanity Ethereal Empirical Wail Matron Cry Quatrain
Whence haste dew lily pads dost drop thy wind flicker flutter heart sow seedlings
Pitter patter thy misty eyes, my liege, I await sunflowers wrought seeds
Petal dye hues, dew sway a-lisp tither thee larking bird trail lit feather
Honey dewdrop swirl bliss water colors, aloft wild flowers whorl weather,
Dance my liege amid thy meadow tilling the flower’s songbird twill julep
Tra La La thy ballet prance’s, mastery tip toes, mid life’s spring of tulips
Long stem roses sway adrift melodic harmony pastel love lotions
Chorus bee rhyme rhythm, Iambic pentameter dyed elocution
Thy bard awaits WordsWorth upon nocturnal stage of Shakesperean wench.
Viola fingered harp, hasp Juliet HeArt, Macbeth Cordelia retrenched.
Feminine femme fatale flame vamp, poet enlightened femininity
Births nurtured wombs – Ethereal Empirical Cries Of Humanity
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Jane
Not being a poem aficionado, I couldn't see any difference between the first version and the second, all using the same or similar words. That doesn't mean there wasn't a difference, it's just that the overwhelming number of adjectives in every line makes understanding unclear.
Ron