Two bodies becoming one. I am starting to work with love poems a little. Don't know if I did real well or not. Would like some feedback.
The stars are all around, shining for you and me, my love.
My Ethereal body quakes with the sight of you.
Hold me close, Don't let me go. Hear my heart beat faster as we dance among the stars tonight.
Written May 22nd,2004 10pm CST All rights reserved
by Becca and might be used with Peter Paton, don't know yet.
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Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on May 24, 2004
I think you did a great job with this romantic poem. I like the way you used the stars and sky, it is how you feel when you are in love, like you can touch the stars. Great work!
Hi Becca,
Very short, but very sweet and beautiful.
I think you did a great job and didn't need a lot of wasted words to get your message across.
You know me, I am long winded with my poetry. lol
Keep up the good work my dear.
Blessings,
Judith
Blending Southern Gothic mystery romance, fantasy, theater, dance, music, and flashes of humor, tells the story of a pair of lovers in two separate time periods who find themselves battling an evil fifty years apart.
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~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in burleson, karen lynn. :D
it's sweet
I love it
A wonderful and unique offering , which touches the soul .
Short is oftentimes the sweetest .
Congratulations .
~Nikki~
Very short, but very sweet and beautiful.
I think you did a great job and didn't need a lot of wasted words to get your message across.
You know me, I am long winded with my poetry. lol
Keep up the good work my dear.
Blessings,
Judith