This poem is a dance of words. Beautifully written!
CarolHawks

It's most difficult to describe action like this. You've done it beautifully. Well done!
Sheila

So many subtle sounds that make this work. "Slowly sensuously, her silver breast shimmies"... all those "s" sounds at work-- a sensual sound, yet snake like (just like her movements). Here's another line: "Wrists twisting, finger cymbals set the beat" inner-line sound-echoing, and again with the "s" sounds. And my favorite, "Veil flying free, as freely as she" That "ee" echoed over and over again, in "ing" and "free" and "freely" and "she". And the "f" alliterating the whole of it. And not many know this, but "v" is "f's" twin-- shaped the same, just voiced instead of voiceless, so to the mind, when reading this line out loud, you lips find a familiar path, and they like it... a lot! Either you're a lot more "kinet" than you let on about poetry, or else you're a natural with stuff.

You should read some of David Hightower's poetry. His poetry is a study in alliteration-- each line echoes something, and I love reading it out loud. And it's mostly intuitive, he tells me. But honestly, when it's done too much on purpose, it's not nearly as good.

This is good. Those sound-echoes make the picture pop-out alive.

--Charlie

You certainly covered and uncovered all of the seven veils in beautiful poetic dance, well done! Jasmin Horst

A fine description of a wonderful art form; thank you for sharing it, Glenda. Love and best wishes to you,

Regis