Firecrackers, (haiku) (Poetry) - 8/5/2009 9:29:40 PM
Yup, alcohol creates lots of unnecessary fireworks that can really screw up lives.
Georgia on my eyes (Poetry) - 8/5/2009 9:28:38 PM
Your lines really punch, and there is a dark seduction to your choice of descriptive words that is uniquely your own- I hope you keep writing and adding more soon :) PS_ thanks for your comments, they mean alot. Michelle
Firecrackers, (haiku) (Poetry) - 8/4/2009 10:00:26 AM
Fair warning, Will; and you are certainly very right about alcohol leading to bad decisions. Love and peace,
Regis
Georgia on my eyes (Poetry) - 8/4/2009 9:59:19 AM
I like the way this flows and the mood that is expressed with the images and feelings brought to mind via your verses, Will. Thanks for sharing. Love and peace,
Regis
At least you looked good (haiku) (Poetry) - 7/19/2009 12:34:47 PM
Had to look up zouaves. Interesting and timeless. Just ask a Roman. Patrick
Firecrackers, (haiku) (Poetry) - 7/2/2009 8:43:15 AM
YOUR POINT IS CLEAR AND SADLY...TRUE. THANKS FOR SHARING AND GOD BLESS. JOYCE
Mount Hope Sematary (Poetry) - 6/28/2009 1:12:51 AM
A well written and good poem,take care
EDWIN
Baseball past time (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 10:04:08 PM
WOW- ok, new favorite....better stop reading for the night before I say that again :) As a lover of classic films and history, this poem touches the part of me that wants to escape to the past and not come back-you really hit it on the head with the descriptions in this, and the almost agressive style of repetition is so sports-anyone who's a fan would get this- I personally loved the grandfather reference as it made me think of my grandfather and mom and their love of the Brooklyn Dodgers. Thanks for the memories.
30 minute lunch (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 9:59:57 PM
This is the best of yours I have read so far, great writing (couple of misspelled things in the beginning), but I could see this one being submitted to a magazine.
A narrow view (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 9:57:57 PM
The best part about knowing you have a narrow view is that means it has already widened- you write some good stuff :)
THE WIRED (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 9:56:32 PM
:) Love it- as a tennis fan, this is right up my alley.
know some one (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 9:54:44 PM
I love how this reads backwards, very very cool.
TRIBUTE (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 9:51:54 PM
If you combined all the deaths in all the wars mentioned, maybe man would see, but most likely not, seeing as absolute power corrupts absolutely, and there is always someone after it. WW1, often forgotten, had so many deaths, and there is a great book/film on the subject called, "Regeneration" by Pat Barker and the films are "Regeneration" (UK version) and "Behind the Lines" (american version of the same film) and it shows not only the way they treated shell shock victims back then, as it is set in an Edinburgh Mental Health facility, but it also shows how it affected some of the greatest WW1 poets, Sigfried Sassoon, Robert Graves, and my favorite poet ever, Wilfred Owen- and that's just mentioning a few.The same could be said of the Civil War, not to mention Korea, as you did- Thanks for drawing attention to this-it is sad that so often the individual soldier gets forgotten.
Mount Hope Sematary (Poetry) - 6/27/2009 9:41:41 PM
You've written such a wonderful ghost story of Crapsey and his wife! With his poetic fairy tales, I am sure he would love this otherworldly poem of yours.
Mount Hope Sematary (Poetry) - 6/25/2009 5:56:20 PM
Sounds like a macabre dance of two loving souls, yet moves gracefully....
Be always safe,
Karen
Baseball past time (Poetry) - 6/13/2009 4:16:06 AM
Will, Great write that brought me back in time. Enjoyed very much.
...Michael
TRIBUTE (Poetry) - 6/5/2009 4:31:08 PM
We may not always agree with the motives of a government. We will always remember and salute the sacrifice and courage of men and women. We are young and we remember them. This is the least we can do. -Michael
TRIBUTE (Poetry) - 6/5/2009 12:21:38 PM
All gave some, some gave all - you honor their memory with this sobering write - as the daughter, sister, niece and cousin of Veterans, as well as a USAF Veteran, myself, I will remember.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Anything for the kids (Poetry) - 6/5/2009 2:04:19 AM
Great poem,I enjoy reading it,take care
EDWIN
THE WIRED (Poetry) - 5/30/2009 4:56:18 PM
Hi Will, very clever indeed! Never knew how romantic sports could be, other than football... the tackle part... LOL.... thank you for sharing...
In Spirit,
Bear
THE WIRED (Poetry) - 5/30/2009 4:01:17 PM
Will,
Good to see you back and with a sharp poem.
John
THE WIRED (Poetry) - 5/30/2009 2:02:37 PM
Very clever!;-)...ET
Charlotte's web flu (Poetry) - 5/3/2009 8:45:44 AM
A fun flu, Will. I mean, I think. Chimney Flu. -gene.
Charlotte's web flu (Poetry) - 4/30/2009 5:26:40 PM
Will,
I love "Martin Sheen flu" and "Dick flu" (no thank you very much!) you wicked, quirky man.
John
Charlotte's web flu (Poetry) - 4/30/2009 4:18:50 PM
Hmmmmmmm, did you say flu????
Be always safe,
Karen
Charlotte's web flu (Poetry) - 4/30/2009 3:03:29 PM
Review flu rampantly running a high fever...e
A narrow view (Poetry) - 4/29/2009 4:01:07 PM
Will,
Strong, in-focus, precise images and the picture adds an appropriate dimension. And by the way, welcome to the club...at my relatively advanced age I, too, am growing up.
John
A narrow view (Poetry) - 4/29/2009 1:54:41 PM
As long as you leave room for growth, otherwise one grows stale ....
Be always safe,
Karen
30 minute lunch (Poetry) - 4/26/2009 9:14:57 AM
Great poem.I enjoy reading it,take care
Edwin
30 minute lunch (Poetry) - 4/23/2009 4:44:15 PM
Will,
Fine capture of atmosphere, highly evocative, and great fluency in the expression.
John
30 minute lunch (Poetry) - 4/23/2009 2:14:06 PM
How beautifully this just lingers on.....
Be always safe,
Karen
30 minute lunch (Poetry) - 4/23/2009 12:55:08 PM
I love this, Will (sort of recalls my Poster on the Wall).
Depending on which way the wind is blowing, a 30-minute lunch
can last an instant or a lifetime. -gene.
All figured out ? (Poetry) - 4/23/2009 1:49:58 AM
Simple, but powerful! I think you've got a good handle on this writing thing!!!
Baseball past time (Poetry) - 4/22/2009 1:22:15 PM
So many wonderful memories you bring back to life, if only, if only it a split second of time....
Be always safe,
Karen
Baseball past time (Poetry) - 4/22/2009 12:35:49 PM
Great write, Will. But I've always wondered what was so good
about the good old days? -gene.
Baseball past time (Poetry) - 4/22/2009 11:49:53 AM
Sometimes everyone gets lonely for the "good ol' days" You've captured the feeling well.
Mary
Kid's under construction (Poetry) - 4/13/2009 6:59:42 PM
Will,
I caught the great use of language in the first half of this poem but not the import of your words quite; the second half I found much more meaningful and worthwhile...and the final lines striking, literally and metaphorically.
John
Kid's under construction (Poetry) - 4/13/2009 6:46:09 PM
I don't think my "construction" has been completed yet, and I am like older than I thought I would ever live...Peace thru the Write, Ed
Kid's under construction (Poetry) - 4/13/2009 6:24:51 PM
Expressive life of teenage years, perhaps from today, but it could also be applied to years past. Never easy growing up in this world, trying to find a niche. A piece well written....
Be always safe,
Karen
I'm falling in love ( bobbi's challenge) (Poetry) - 4/11/2009 6:15:17 PM
I'm with you. I've never thought of myself as a "poet." Others have labeled me thus. Thank you. Love and peace,
Regis
Border and limitation (Poetry) - 4/11/2009 6:14:22 PM
Makes me think... ...and read again. Love and peace,
Regis
I'm falling in love ( bobbi's challenge) (Poetry) - 4/9/2009 6:32:07 AM
Whoa! I think your writing will be a success, keep playing your cards right! and my turn to deal lol
Keep em' coming Will!
and WELCOME to this most articulated beautiful area of the den!
SPILL YOUR GUTS and LET THE WORLD SEE/HEAR what your words want to declare!
WRITE ON!
Warmest Blessings, PEACE and Inspiration, Warrior Purple Lady SHEExooo
P.S. I write all genres and the passion is rising...Come by anytime! and bless my page once more...
Myopic Me (Poetry) - 4/8/2009 7:36:02 PM
You have a fine, distinctive voice here Will. Keep it up. J'nia
I'm falling in love ( bobbi's challenge) (Poetry) - 4/8/2009 7:33:53 PM
Yep, you will go far. You have an innate talent for the word. Welcome to the den. Do have a wonderful time here. J'nia
Drag the lake (Poetry) - 4/8/2009 12:41:26 PM
Yes, we can be at times where the depth of life drags us down and we get the bends and have to go back down. Very good poem.
Tommy
All figured out ? (Poetry) - 4/8/2009 12:39:28 PM
Bravo! So true will. Beautiful Poem.
Tommy
Border and limitation (Poetry) - 4/7/2009 11:33:27 PM
Think you have captured it well...
Be always safe,
Karen
Suburban sidewalk (Poetry) - 4/3/2009 10:16:27 AM
Very good. Time, age, place and the strings of life makes for reflections and the end or beginning of a day.
Drag the lake (Poetry) - 4/3/2009 3:46:17 AM
This is very good,interesting to read,take care
Edwin
Suburban sidewalk (Poetry) - 4/3/2009 3:45:08 AM
A well written poem,excellent work,take care
Edwin
Drag the lake (Poetry) - 4/1/2009 3:57:14 AM
Interesting indeed dear man..stay safe and well..Hugsss
Kiss (Poetry) - 3/31/2009 7:13:20 PM
This is a really nice poem...I read it 3 times.
Drag the lake (Poetry) - 3/31/2009 5:43:27 PM
Will,
I like the idea here and I see the metaphor but something bothers me, the end comes too fast; sorry, I don't mean to be negative or overcritical because I do like your writing. I know you'll understand.
John
Myopic Me (Poetry) - 3/29/2009 7:14:15 PM
nicely organized prosaic chronology of event & idea ...
Myopic Me (Poetry) - 3/29/2009 5:47:32 PM
Will,
A wonderful tumble of images running seamlessly into one another gives this poem energy and meaning; there's nothing myopic here. Very fine distinct voice indeed.
John
All figured out ? (Poetry) - 3/29/2009 5:44:04 PM
Well said, Sir!
John
Amanda May (Poetry) - 3/27/2009 8:06:56 PM
Very cool
Raaahchester, New York (Poetry) - 3/26/2009 7:42:29 AM
Right back at ya....Seriously dug it!
All figured out ? (Poetry) - 3/26/2009 5:28:59 AM
Will,
Short, sweet, truthful and to the point.
Mary
Amanda May (Poetry) - 3/24/2009 12:03:33 PM
Well described with emotions of someone remembered....
Be always safe,
Karen
Amanda May (Poetry) - 3/23/2009 7:34:12 PM
Will, I don't know Amanda, but I think I'd like too. -gene.
Raaahchester, New York (Poetry) - 3/18/2009 7:02:01 PM
A place I know well, but the winters are just too darn cold. You inspire many memories....
Be always safe,
Karen
Kiss (Poetry) - 3/18/2009 2:39:47 PM
If she has swelled eyes and tears in the springtime, it is most likely allergies...;-) Ed
Raaahchester, New York (Poetry) - 3/18/2009 2:37:45 PM
Wait a minute, don't tell me, but you're from Syracuse, right? LOL, Enjoyed this look at your home town...Ed & Rufuz [w00f]
Welcome to the Den, hope you enjoy your stay...
Kiss (Poetry) - 3/17/2009 3:13:50 PM
Sweet yet with a bit of longing lying beneath...
Be always safe,
Karen
Kiss (Poetry) - 3/17/2009 5:51:00 AM
Keep smiling.....things always get better.....great writing dear man...have a wonderful and safe day..Hugsss..oh by the way I love to dance in the rain ...(sighhhhhhhhhh)....
