Open The Gate (Short Story) - 8/22/2018 7:38:58 AM
Pure fantasy. But given the public love for comic book characters with superpowers, I'm sure that a scene from a movie depicting this would be sufficiently scary to get people to shell out money to see it. The story seems to and with a beginning, like those annoying episodes on overly long TV series. Stay tuned for the next episode: Titans versus Serpents. Let's call in Predator next.
Ron
Turn Off The Lights (Short Story) - 8/15/2018 7:03:56 AM
Quite a story. Emphasizes how pathetic much of our earthly emotional behavior is in the scheme of the universe. Very intuitive and original. Should help make those tied up in temples and churches think a bit about their belief in the basic, unknown that they tend to call, God.
Could use a little editing to make it communicate better. But then, it could be the language of an adolescent, experimenting with life as he knows it.
Ron
The Encounter (Short Story) - 12/14/2015 7:06:29 AM
Yes, a very intriguing story that left me with a lot of questions. I must congratulate you on writing this kind of story with such emotion on the part of the characters. However, I'm not happy with a story that seems not to have any conclusion. Perhaps it is because this is only one chapter in a larger work, like a novel.
I don't know if you've been to New Jersey or have experienced ice and snow. Also, if Hindi is your primary language, then I commend you for trying to write English in a way that would be universal to all English reading readers. While your narrative is vivid and as a very good vocabulary, an editor could correct the minor errors in English that occur, as well as some of the incorrect language related to snow and New Jersey.
Finally, unless this entity that you call Maebiana is more clearly defined, I'm afraid that the fantasy has too many fallacies for it to hold together.
Ron
The Encounter (Short Story) - 12/14/2015 1:32:24 AM
A most fascinating story of a champion who met his unlikely match outside the ring from the realm of magic!
