Sequoia Trail-Ch. 1 (Short Story) - 10/28/2015 6:52:14 AM
Aside from the formatting problem that results from using the latest versions of MS Word and pasting your text directly into the AD editor, the writing is also very dense and filled with vocabulary and nuances that seem to lead nowhere in this mighty quest of Bo's for David. And then, when you get to the descriptive parts, they seem rather flat and non descriptive. All of the quoted words and hyphenated words get in the way of reading, as well.
I'm sorry but my overall impression is not about the story, that may be good, but about the overwriting that you seem to be doing to impress the reader (or perhaps some literary critic) with your vocabulary and writing style.
If you want the format to be better, try using an older version of Microsoft Word, pasting your document from a saved rich text format (.rtf) or text (.txt) or turning off the AD editor before pasting.
Good luck with your writing…
Ron
