Whispers in the Wake (Book) - 4/28/2015 5:26:09 PM
A collection of wonderfully diverse writings, piercingly dark and beautiful. I think this collection is all the better for being autobiographical in many places, and clearly from the heart. A few of my favorites in the poetry sections are "Paint of Me a Picture Dark" and "Hysteria." But the short stories are strong and passionate as well.
Whispers in the Wake (Book) - 1/27/2015 6:15:25 AM
La Belle, thank you so much for your kind review. I also love your romantic writing - you have a classic flair for steamy romance. I miss our collaborations! Wishing you the best of everything life has to offer!
Whispers in the Wake (Book) - 1/12/2015 5:38:47 AM
Jeff this will be a well know volume someday I'm sure. You are a real poet.
On Mortality and The Butterfly Effect (Article) - 10/1/2008 3:28:44 PM
Time travel is pure fantasy, but we have great history and human selective memory to make it seem better in the past. Whatever the effects of small events, we all begin and end our life in the present.
Interesting write. Reminds of What Dreams May Come (Robin Williams).
Ron
On Mortality and The Butterfly Effect (Article) - 9/28/2008 6:05:20 AM
Awww ... poor little butterfly. I stepped on a honey bee once when I was a child, and I never forget it because it stange me in it's final words. Interesting article, Jeff.
a nation bonded beyond its differences (Poetry) - 8/13/2024 9:56:28 AM
Jeff, this is a noble poem. Well written as always. We are too polarized now, it will take a miracle but God still works miracles. I forgot who said, "Those who ignore history are doomed to repeat it."
a nation bonded beyond its differences (Poetry) - 6/23/2024 11:35:43 AM
A very well written story of who we are. And the references to the Civil War should teach us something about what happens when we let our beliefs overcome the truth. I often think about the difference between the Battle Hymn of the Republic, "and the truth goes marching on." And Dixie, "old times there are not forgotten." Signifying the genteel days of white suppressors using slaves for that lifestyle.
I certainly hope the lessons from the past will never bring us to a civil war like that one. The key like your poem, is to be civil rather than angry and revengeful
Politically I am at odds with my siblings. But we all have agreed to get along together and keep politics, like religion, from ruining our lives as brothers and sisters.
Ron
Beringia (Poetry) - 8/28/2023 9:33:15 AM
I thoroughly enjoyed this, it was very well written,
thank you for sharing it.
Steve
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 12/1/2021 7:19:26 AM
An ode written in eloquent sweetness and heartfelt
resolve, the likes of which I am not likely to ever
discover again.
pensive remembrance - Thomas Horton tribute (Poetry) - 5/15/2021 7:07:01 AM
Thank you for this impassioned form about your friend, Thomas Horton. I read the obituary and was amazed at what this man achieved in his short life, certainly one-of-a-kind.
Ron
pensive remembrance - Thomas Horton tribute (Poetry) - 5/14/2021 4:23:26 AM
Jeff.... A wistful remembrance. Your choice of words adds well to the spirit of the piece. Loss is never easy, and I can empathize. My father passed this year in Feb. 96 years old. In one moment, the Patriarch torch was passed to me. Sobering. So, he who has gone, we will cherish the memory that abides with us, at times even more potent than the living man. Regards.... rlc
needful things (Poetry) - 7/15/2018 10:15:38 PM
Positively riveting, can't stop reading. I don't like pain, but something healing about reading your writing.
-ZACH
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 7/15/2018 10:07:54 PM
I rarely say this but this one is a masterpiece, there's so much in this poem, and my heart ached as the felt words roll over me; I feel like I have felt like this before. You have an amazing way with words, I don't see this skill...mt heart goes out to you, to have loved someone like this is a real gift, so precious!
-ZACH
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 12/3/2017 10:53:07 PM
lovely tribute
I am sorry for your loss, it is so difficult to lose anyone dear
happy she was able to the tribute before her passing
never stop writing!
m
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 12/2/2017 4:18:03 PM
Clarifying: Nita did read this back when I first wrote it, and she loved it! I guess I should have made that known. Also, I gave her a copy of my book "Whispers in the Wake" and it's published in there as well. --Jeff
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 12/2/2017 12:40:32 PM
From this outpouring of your very soul, it is obvious how deeply affected you have become of her untimely passing at such a young age. If only she could read your words.
Ron
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 12/2/2017 11:15:54 AM
I can see how happy you two were in the photo and that happiness must have extended into every feature of your lives together. What you have written is a beautiful tribute to that love and happiness. 'Enjoyed!
Love ya!
Jane
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 11/30/2017 8:20:09 AM
Jeff... I am so sorry for your loss. Yours is an open-soul in these deeply heartfelt words. Choice imagery. Good to read you again. All the best... r
i am (the brink of life you breathe)... (Poetry) - 11/29/2017 8:39:37 PM
The picture is me and Nita in 1977 in Springfield, Tennessee - we were SO happy - can you tell?
needful things (Poetry) - 11/20/2016 7:32:15 AM
This sounds more like a lover's lament than a paean to a lost friend. I seldom read through long poems but I did with this one. It reminds me of experiences in the past. Keep on writing and keep on keeping on.
needful things (Poetry) - 5/12/2015 8:29:04 AM
Heartbreaking but beautifully written. Your heart bleeds through every aching word.
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/11/2015 4:58:29 AM
~Jeff~
Beautiful the hues etched in whispers of love.
Lady Mary Ann
needful things (Poetry) - 5/9/2015 8:39:56 PM
5-9-2015
Now You Should Just Turn Walk Away And
Do Not Never Look Back!
Sometimes You Just don't Know How
Lucky You Are-Huh!
Forgiveness Is Crutch You Hang (Crawl) On-
It Can Will Come Back To Haunt You!
A True Friend In Need
Is True Friend In Deed!
TRASK...
needful things (Poetry) - 5/8/2015 6:28:27 AM
"Everyone says forgiveness is a lovely idea until they have something to forgive," said C.S. Lewis.
well written, Jeff ...
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 10:37:01 AM
This is very Shakespearean in its presentation. Something that I cannot do, alas.
I find that the "knife that does not kill" is probably the tongue. From what has been said, let "out of the bag" so to speak, can never be retrieved and that's why forgiveness is not forthcoming.
As I said before, I certainly hope this is not about you. For if it is, you are "surely yoked forever, stilled and bound."
Ron
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 9:46:45 AM
This is utterly beautiful writing, at the end of your frayed hope.
Remember, even forgiveness and love unreturned holds every freedom's gift for your heart and every color of the rainbow.
It will flow back to you from somewhere else if not from her, but you have got to try to let it go, this overwhelming grief.
Blessings,
Christine
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 8:44:07 AM
"Needful Things" made me immediately think of Stephen King's novel with such a title. But I can relate to the theme of your poem; in fact, I just sent an email to my sister much along those lines. Thank you for sharing, Jeff. Love and peace,
Regis
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 7:53:20 AM
where once there shone a glimpse of alabaster recompense
beneath a cauldron born of iron
upon a wasted spell, I savored all the shades
of every step, step, step of Hell.
Can feel the ball and chain in every syllable of these strong lines, Jeff. This is cathartic writing that wriggles and writhes in sawdust and ashes. But Phoenix-like, you'll rise again. No one has the right to keep another so imprisoned but the key may be in your own hands. True freedom is to be found in self-forgiving; once you understand that reason and truth and right-standing rests with the one who has sincerely offered apology, then you can walk free. Palpable and agonising poetry which has long-meditated with this hot coal. xx
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 6:04:23 AM
This is a very deep and touching write. You have dug to the very core of your heart and soul.
Love ya!
Jane
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 5:50:33 AM
A moving classical dedication and plea, where choice of words and phrasing arrest in the reader both empathy and admiration for the creator who has found such contrasts in an deeply moving emotional experience. Kudos.
needful things (Poetry) - 5/7/2015 4:55:52 AM
Ahhh . . . In your notes ahead of the poem you say, "Isn't there a point where true friendship should trump any stupidity on either friend's part?" This is absolute truth, and I have found that in my particular case it has been applied, I am grateful to say. The poem was from your heart and it was applying itself to the quote from your notes in a very precise manner.
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/6/2015 7:56:02 AM
It's wonderful when you meet someone who you can talk to as if to your very own soul, Jeff. This reads almost like a soliloquy and is how I imagine Romeo speaks to both himself and to Juliet. A most heartfelt and romantic way to say 'I love you!' - the most precious three words on the face of the planet. May you both be blessed. Kate xx
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/6/2015 4:16:25 AM
Well and truly loved up...!
What better way to be ?
Diana...
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/5/2015 9:40:41 AM
loved it. good write. jk roseline
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/5/2015 7:17:13 AM
You certainly have a way of translating how you feel about love and your relationship in a most pleasing and direct way that gets to the heart of the matter and the many shades of its color.
Ron
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/5/2015 6:20:35 AM
a contrapuntal, moving poem, both poetry and music, and just the most lovely movement throughout ~
Blessings,
Christine
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/5/2015 4:36:13 AM
What deep emotion runs here. Lovely!
Love ya!
Jane
Etched in Hues (Poetry) - 5/5/2015 3:19:23 AM
I think she has probably gotten the message.
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/26/2015 4:14:47 PM
You seem to hold an artist's palette, and have painted this with the colors of romance and beauty and love.
How lovely you write!
Blessings,
Christine
loss of modality (Poetry) - 4/25/2015 7:21:15 AM
You, dear friend, deserve your love and your kindness and affection now, as much as anybody else in the whole world.
We do ourselves a favor when we let go of those who damage our spirit.
Blessings and always know you are loved as you are,
Christine
loss of modality (Poetry) - 4/23/2015 3:39:24 PM
so touching indeed...Hugsss
loss of modality (Poetry) - 4/21/2015 7:40:19 AM
Such a strong pull on the heart. Sadly I know how this feels. You have expressed yourself in a powerful and meaningful way. I hope that the pain lessens so the lessons remain.
loss of modality (Poetry) - 4/21/2015 7:18:58 AM
I love martinis, they are a delight to the taste buds. Since I drink only one or two I've never experienced hangovers that are so legendary. But, you are right about hanging on and that life doesn't rhyme like a beautiful song.
I sense a sense of asking for forgiveness now that you are, "hanging on." Don't let go too soon. I like your poetry.
Ron
loss of modality (Poetry) - 4/20/2015 12:24:04 PM
Whoah! My, man!!! Don't go feeling like that!!!! That's nuts!!
Love ya!
Jane
loss of modality (Poetry) - 4/20/2015 9:09:35 AM
A meaninful poem that expresses a theme to which I can completely relate. Thanks for sharing, Jeff. Love and peace,
Regis
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/19/2015 12:10:43 PM
To know another soul before even saying.....hello
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/19/2015 10:06:25 AM
nice writing..Hugss
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/19/2015 10:02:21 AM
What a completely captivating piece of writing.
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/19/2015 8:50:42 AM
I would say, without a doubt, that you have touched on the essence of communicating to women what they would like to hear in a poem. If you recited this poem before a large crowd of women, you would have them swooning in the aisles… Trust me.
Ron
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/19/2015 8:11:56 AM
Although I have expressed them differently, I have nonetheless shared these feelings, meanings, and thoughts because I am familiar with them and to me, they "speak" of true love in a relationship. Thank you for sharing, Jeff. Love and peace,
Regis
Soulspeak (Poetry) - 4/18/2015 6:36:01 PM
Oh, honey!
Love ya!
Jane
Purgatory (Poetry) - 3/31/2015 6:49:38 AM
Excellent...
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/21/2015 4:55:20 PM
I can relate to this...stay safe and well.
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/15/2015 2:40:43 PM
I can relate to this poem, possibly not quite in the way that you intended.
I recently spent eight months in hospital two of which was on a life support machine after a minor hernia operation went seriously wrong and I was infected with MRSA, which quickly spread throughout my body eating holes in my intestines, I was literally dying.
After four major operations to remove the damaged areas, I went from a super fit person to a living skeleton, slipping in and out consciousness for months.
During that period, I could not move, and my mental state possibly due to the effects of the morphine was such that I honestly thought I was being processed for Hell, where the nurses tending me were speaking Polish.
You poem brought that intense feeling of inadequacy back to me.
I think the nurses even despaired on me ever recovering.
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/12/2015 5:33:04 PM
Beautiful in the extreme! The memories need to be released and you are doing that so exquisitely. We do weave our spirits into our beloveds, I know.
Blessings, Christine xo
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/12/2015 5:10:58 PM
I think this is brilliantly crafted ~
Blessings,
Christine xo
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/12/2015 5:35:45 AM
"trapped within my own custom-crafted Hell"... Indeed, many fall victim to this, Jeff. They just don't know it's a hell until it has sapped every bit of verve and resilience from them and they see themselves one day in the mirror hobbling and emaciated. There is much emotion grafted into the guts of this transparent and moving piece. Brought tears to my eyes. Look up! Hope is standing at the door. Peace to you...
rlc
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/11/2015 2:09:27 PM
i enjoyed this personal rendition of a universal state of being ...
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/11/2015 7:04:00 AM
Reminds me of why like your poetry so much. Your loss is so elegantly portrayed and your failure to find any worthwhile "fish" in the endless sea, is so evident as to be heartbreaking. Reads like something that I have experienced… And that's a good thing.
Ron
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/10/2015 4:51:33 PM
There is truly nothing worse than feeling stuck. In any situation, but in particular, love.
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/10/2015 1:23:46 PM
I think most of us can relate to a point to this strong bit of writing. We we are in that almost Catatonia state of mind, rescue seems to be forever in coming.
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/10/2015 12:42:29 PM
An achingly painful read and yet there is hope and aspiration within it, Jeff. It's agonising if we allow another to control our being - either physical, mental, emotional or spiritual. In the end we have to be honest with ourselves; do we actually wish ourselves free of that which binds us? As you say, the strength to turn that key is in your hands. A custom-crafted Hell the subject matter may be, but a deftly-crafted work of art this undoubtedly is; great rhyme and metre in the final lines. xx
Catatonia (Poetry) - 3/10/2015 12:23:44 PM
You may or may not believe this but I can completely relate to what you express through your verses here, Jeff. Although love is wonderful (romantic love too, of course), sometimes, life's circumstances in this world make the experience a most bittersweetly painful one. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/8/2015 2:28:05 PM
THE IMAGERY HERE IS FINE IN THIS WORK THAT GIVES CREDIT FOR THE ENDURING GOD-GIVEN STRENGTH, WISDOM AND COURAGE OF MAN AND BEAST...WITH RESPECT TO HOW IT WAS AND HOW IT IS. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/7/2015 10:42:19 AM
Jeff this is so wonderfully realistic. Well done and much enjoyed.
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/4/2015 8:26:12 AM
Hitch 'em up and lets go.
Michael D.
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/3/2015 1:41:20 PM
Great poem, reminds me of Shackleton's voyage. Those dogs are amazing!
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/3/2015 1:27:23 PM
This race, so full of drama and difficulty, is only a reenactment of what people did for thousands of years just to survive in the Arctic region. Dogs have always been a respected part of that lifestyle since they were domesticated. I often wonder if today's adventurers with all of the motor driven support they rely on, could be as tough as those, who had no motor vehicles, no firearms, and no access to food any further south than where they lived. To write about them, like Jane's relatives below, is to write about those, truly heroic.
Ron
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/3/2015 1:27:05 PM
...a persuasive analogy of tundra...that's encouraging the "few fearless souls"
to "resist respecting frozen crust"...and "write its vibrant stories...unrestrained
by mortal fears"....
Taking your analogy to a higher ground...the knowledge of the hushed tundra
...the hush reality of life... obstruct grossly the real view of real beauty and in
the culture of fear...with an inclination of morally vulnerable people to easy
panic...one can easily become lost.....
Thank you for sharing your thought-provoking writing.
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/3/2015 12:52:51 PM
One must give the people who survive these conditions the utmost respect. I have relatives who live above the Arctic Circle in Finland where the Sami travel their reindeer herds. You have penned the dangers they face but yet somehow survive if they observe the "ways". I enjoyed this very much. Thank you.
Love ya!
Jane
Beringia (Poetry) - 3/3/2015 12:50:37 PM
Jeff, when first viewing the title, I thought that you might be writing about the ancient Beringia land bridge. I relate to this. And whether you put it there purposely or not; I perceive (in its guts) a spiritual gem. "There is an ecstasy that marks the summit of life, and beyond which life cannot rise. And such is the paradox of living, this ecstasy comes when one is most alive, and it comes as a complete forgetfulness that one is alive." Jack London. A thoughtful, philosophical write, with undercurrents about the sobering revelation anyone can experience when they see themselves as they really are through the eyes of our Creator.
Enjoyed. Peace to you...
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/25/2015 1:10:52 PM
This held me like a vice, Jeff. It's stark and reasoned clarity resonates as down those infernal interminable halls and the sensible tone is chilling. There seems to be no hyperbole here; the experiences are meant and felt. You've certainly given me cause to consider how infinitely to be feared this place you describe is - and we scarcely give a thought to it, caught, as we are, between our twin fixations of the polarities of Heaven and Hell. In a deeply spiritual experience I had once, I felt as if cast out into the deepest, darkest, blackest space in the whole universe. The pain I felt was loneliness above everything else - and this from a person who loves physical aloneness and can happily spend much time on my own. What strikes me above all is how it's the self-flagellation that is the terror and the torture here. To be not able to get away from the perpetual persecutor must be torment. It's the self that needs to be both forgiving and forgiven and that can be the hardest thing on earth. I pray God that you are no longer trapped in this heart-rending in-between and that you have been able to move to a place of restoration and resolution. Very powerfully written, Jeff. xx
Birth of a Song (Poetry) - 2/16/2015 3:41:01 PM
Inspiration usually comes out of thin air for some or others have a favorite desk and/or spot where they create. Have to say my muse likes to remain a mystery. ;).
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 2/16/2015 3:35:36 PM
This flows so nicely, a beautiful piece. It seems you wrote this with others in mind . however , I do get the sense this would not be far from your experiences either.
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 2/12/2015 7:56:31 PM
The pain felt here would go well with some heavy guitar. I can hear a singer belting out these lyrics. I love it!
Love ya!
Jane
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/12/2015 12:41:26 PM
"for thou hast pierced
all layers this heart long hath built"
These lines blew my mind. Write on!
Love ya!
Jane
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/12/2015 12:39:00 PM
I have a friend who insists that this existence is hell. I can see now that I will be reading more of your material.
Love ya!
Jane
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/11/2015 1:59:56 PM
I could take this poem and steal your words and it would fit how I used to be to a T. Oh yes, we can be such fools in the name of love. Love, I have come to believe that more heartache and misery come from the "other" four-letter word . . . Love than anything thing else in the world..
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/11/2015 1:51:30 PM
Ahhh . . . Purgatory indeed, Jeff Mason. For the last few days I have been reading the modern translation of "The Divine Comedy." Just have barely open the first book, "Inferno." You write very deep and very dark. there was a time when I was into the dark, poetical and otherwise. Yep, I still write dark, but not with as much passion as I used to.
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/11/2015 12:04:05 PM
It's beautiful to see such a much-needed and timeless message couched within breath-taking and classic lines. This oozes with personal sentiment and yet touches the heart, I'm sure, of all who read of its vulnerability, humility and grace. Love the honesty and openness of this contrite heart. Well done, Jeff. And welcome back! :) xx
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/11/2015 11:51:16 AM
I've read this three times, each time I feel the pain more deeply. Sounds more like pure hell than purgatory Jeff. Wonderfully penned from the soul.
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/11/2015 11:50:26 AM
What a stunning and heartfelt poem Jeff.
Before You Let Me Go (song?) (Poetry) - 2/8/2015 4:49:42 PM
I wonder if you have put these to song yet? They are certainly inspired and catchy and oh what potential for growth these painful experiences contain! Blessings, Christine
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/8/2015 4:40:18 PM
Thank you, everyone, for your reviews, thoughts and comments. It means a lot to me.
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/8/2015 4:22:37 PM
In my experience, forgiveness has always been the better course of action... ...and yes, it has mattered a great deal. Love and peace to you, Jeff.
Regis
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/8/2015 2:43:44 PM
A deeply heartfelt request that surely would be both accepted and appreciated. Composed with sincerity.
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 2:04:46 PM
Written with truest measure of kindness, compassion and love.
The inspiration of a loving spirit is manifest in these lines!
Blessings,
Christine
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 9:31:10 AM
Very honest lines and emotions. I hope the person you are seeking forgiveness will forgive you. Forgiveness is a beautiful thing where one can set oneself free of any rusty emotions.
Sandie
Blurring Lines... (Acrostic) (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 8:32:07 AM
Acrostic, I have not reached there yet, I regularly do erotic haiku on facebook and it is fun..lot of comments and men go ga ga
Jk roseline
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 8:28:34 AM
O l,It is just beautiful, the rhythm and the words just as it is in the beating of the rain ... running from the pain.
Jk roseline
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/5/2015 2:30:43 PM
...being human's...inevitable...to hurt others..even unintentionally...appreciate
your honest-humble and impressively genuine words...seeking forgiveness
and asking the person you've wronged for compassionate looking at the shadowy
corners of your human interaction...of being only human....
I'm egually struck by your poetic vulnerability in sharing words;..."any harm I've done
to thee, is but a fatal wound...to me"....trying to forgive oneself for being fallible seems
the hardest act...to follow....it's only human.....
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/5/2015 11:58:11 AM
Written in a older style, almost Elizabethan, you have shown the torment of needing forgiveness for acts unkind.
Ron
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/4/2015 12:07:23 PM
~Jeff~
Wonderfully penned. Reflective grace and spirit of the heart.
Lady Mary Ann
Reparations (Poetry) - 2/4/2015 11:37:08 AM
Amen! Deeply felt emotion diffuses from this. Great imaging, Jeff, and you hit some classic rhyme-schemes throughout as well. It's cool how you spirited classic parlance with a universal message. Very creative. Enjoyed this. Peace...
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/4/2015 7:34:23 AM
Great poetry excellently composed though grim
and profound in its texture.... May you find peace within
William
Frames (Poetry) - 2/3/2015 4:01:12 PM
Sorry I was too late getting here to read your poem. Sounds like it was good. :)
Zach
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/3/2015 8:51:25 AM
Truly a dark persecution of the soul but with such eloquence in its signature.
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/3/2015 7:21:18 AM
Very thrilling poetry. Raw and honest, and a far-reaching ending ~
Darling, every day's a new day with no mistakes in it, and anyone who doesn't get that has a problem.
Blessings,
Christine
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/2/2015 9:01:40 PM
2-02-2015:
Do Not Fear Death
Fear Where You Are Going...
Only You Alone Can Save Yourself
So, Write More Of IT The Truth....
TRASK...
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/2/2015 8:03:25 AM
Chanti, Carol, Sandie, richard, Ronald, Duke, Regis, thank you so much for your reviews. And, Chanti, I have missed your work as well!
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/1/2015 7:36:07 PM
I have missed your work Jeff. Your brilliance shines through the darkness of this write. I sincerely hoping you weren't talking from your own personal perspective.
Best line: "Thus I remain...for now, unforgiven; a lifeless, anguished shadow...trapped...in this infernal forlorn in-between."
It perfectly summed up the rest of the poem.
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/1/2015 2:40:48 PM
This is a profound description of deep despair, and loss. There are a few golden rules in life and one is that the past is past, the future is unknown, and the present moment is all that matters. And another golden rule is that to believe in dreams is to give wings to the imagination thereby creating a materialization! But of course Poet, you know this.
With respect and admiration,
Carol Phelan Aebby
Purgatory (Poetry) - 2/1/2015 6:27:32 AM
I'm a believer in spirits. I feel that some souls are lost because they know not where they should belong, as it is written in this unique poem. Sometimes the souls need direction in order to go towards the light.
Sandie
Purgatory (Poetry) - 1/31/2015 5:02:50 PM
I haven't seen your name in the global community for years, Jeff. Your work always was, and is, a welcome stimulation. You've created a fine atmosphere in this piece. "no breath can thrive in darkness so profound and so complete." Amen! Peace... rlc
Purgatory (Poetry) - 1/31/2015 3:14:51 PM
sometimes the spirit must be persuaded to advance and assimilate, not to linger or relinquish ... it's all about perspective ...
you should post more Jeff ...
Purgatory (Poetry) - 1/31/2015 11:56:07 AM
In your bio, you state that you often write "very dark poetry." That is an understatement. From what I read here, this person is under great torment from self-inflicted wounds. Very heavy, to say the least.
Ron
Purgatory (Poetry) - 1/31/2015 11:51:44 AM
Wow! "The flames of Hades would be recompense...." Rather like doing a cannonball into the Fiery Lake...and "...your own flagellation" brings to mind my piece "Twisted Trail"; "I keep beatin' myself up for things way back in the past; I will flog myself forever to my core; I will beat and beat and beat 'till I can beat no more...." -- this is some very fine writing. ~ duke
Purgatory (Poetry) - 1/31/2015 10:48:12 AM
Truly a thought-provoking and engaging piece of writing, Jeff. I wish you love and peace.
Regis
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 9/27/2009 5:23:19 PM
Jeff,
This is outstanding work. I could feel your pain in each verse. From now on I'm tracking you.
Blessings & Peace,
~Linda
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 5/10/2009 2:35:56 PM
I love your work! I think there is more meaning behind your words than people realize. I can almost feel your life and I admire you a great deal.--Ray
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 9:46:13 PM
Well Jeff, I reckon that is as good as any other Crooners love song you'll hear on the airwaves. I enjoyed that, even though it is essentially sad.
Kudo's matey.
Thanks for stopping by my den too
:) Ch'erie
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 2:41:44 PM
very heartfelt, I enjoyed your voice as well as the words you sang. I remember my love of music and singing when I was younger. I have not sang publically in many years, now. I used to sing in choirs and solos at my churches. Now, I just sing in the shower. hahaha. But I admire your courage to sing acappella, especially. I thoroughly enjoyed it, Cuz.
Just Wondering (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 2:37:22 PM
yep, sounds like me. guess a lot of us feel that way at one time or another. We give, give, give, and no one seems to appreciate or care..yep.
Letter to my Soul Mate (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 2:35:13 PM
that is absolutely the most beautiful piece. I have always wished for a love like that.
Indelible Kiss (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 2:32:19 PM
Beautiful and very romantic, Jeff.
It All Fades in Time Anyway - redux (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 2:16:44 PM
So touching, very true. It fades but never completetly disappears. Sometimes there is still a hint of a whisper of memory like a fine mist, that lingers still in one's mind...Sometimes...
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/3/2008 12:19:18 PM
This is stunning work Jeff, ty for sharing.
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/2/2008 5:24:37 PM
Wow you really poured your heart into this, excellent piece and wish you much luck getting this recorded. Just brilliant...
Be always safe,
Karen
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/2/2008 4:45:55 PM
It played in Quicktime, but I got no sound. That's a shame, because it looks good as written.
Ron
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/2/2008 12:33:18 PM
It's wonderful. I do hope someone records it. I wish you great success Jeff. You deserve it. And, your singing isn't bad, quite good in fact.
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/2/2008 10:27:45 AM
Polish this up a little and you have a sure fire Country Western hit which Glen Campbell sure could use and do it justice. Hope you find someone who will love it and make it a great success for you.
George
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/2/2008 9:15:09 AM
Thank you, Jeff! I played the audio as I read -- and I sincerely loved this heartfelt song! I'm wishing you lots of success with it!
Running from the Rain (Poetry) - 12/2/2008 8:07:11 AM
So Beautiful Jeff and I could hear in being sung as I read. Absolutely lovely, Would love to hear it when it's put to music. Love and hugs, Bonnie
Concentric Convergence (Poetry) - 10/19/2008 2:53:12 AM
A very good poem.I enjoy reading it,take care
Edwin
Concentric Convergence (Poetry) - 10/13/2008 3:33:29 PM
Women will love this. However, I will take the lesser path and stick my tongue in fine wine. ;-)
Ron
Concentric Convergence (Poetry) - 10/13/2008 12:38:51 PM
Shakespearian Rapture! This would be a masterpiece of a script for any playwrite to adapt into a modern-day Romeo & Juliet on stage...these lines are fit for Montague's and Capulet's! I would love to hear these lines reverberating in a theatre full of Renaissance-dressed-coiffed fans who paid a week's wages and entered a night in the Concentric Convergence, the first play of Mason's Millenium! Great write fit for theatrical dialogue, Jeff...
Warmly,
Sage
Concentric Convergence (Poetry) - 10/13/2008 3:57:46 AM
beautiful and so full of longing and passion
Young and Foolish, Old and Wise (Poetry) - 10/8/2008 12:16:15 PM
I remember this one. Did I forget to tell you? I think it's so cool.
Phoenix Reborn (Poetry) - 9/28/2008 12:39:46 PM
Very strong and passionate lines. I'm moved by the way
profound gratefulness and consuming anger blend together
showing the multifaceted experience of human feelings.
Axilea
Phoenix Reborn (Poetry) - 9/22/2008 4:26:33 PM
Jeff,
The flame she brought to you opened your soul, for life is short lived, but yet eternity awaits us, we are here to touch others and I know Deanna did this for you, she has given you a lasting gift, though brief, she will always remain, use it wisely and with god-given wisdom, I loved this write as I love all of your poems and songs, Take care Blessings' Valerie
Phoenix Reborn (Poetry) - 9/22/2008 1:27:20 PM
"for I am flight of flame; wings unfolded... to immeasurable breadth... because of you;
I am risen in your memory..."
Surely little more perfect has been or can be written than the agonising throes of soul and spirit that you pen here, Jeff. This is tribute, elegy and catharsis, all so seamlessly interwoven and with such balance and control amidst the pain. This precious lady has given you life in your inner being and to the depth of your core and its full impact has yet to be seen, experienced and lived. You have been blessed beyond measure and nothing will be able to take from you what will ultimately be gained. I am broken by your tragic loss and yet in awe of the preciousness of the gift which few will ever be able to hope for, let alone attain. I'm awed. Thank you for the privilege of being able to share this with you. May you continue this unsought journey knowing that eventually there will be beauty from the ashes. With love, Kate xx
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 9/22/2008 4:59:42 AM
Just magnificent! Such a friendship is a treasure; its value increases as ripples on a pond, reaching ever farther and touching hearts through the impact she made. Her touch on your life will continue to energize your love for others.
Connie
Phoenix Reborn (Poetry) - 9/20/2008 4:06:08 AM
That is soooo beautifully written - as it should be - for such beautiful thoughts and feelings need such a pen - great poetry, Nicky xx
It All Fades in Time Anyway - redux (Poetry) - 9/18/2008 11:01:54 PM
So sad sometimes when we live with those reminders of what once was...and now what is. Touches the heart.
It All Fades in Time Anyway - redux (Poetry) - 9/17/2008 12:01:56 PM
Graceful pondering on what once was and what is left...
Be always safe,
Karen
It All Fades in Time Anyway - redux (Poetry) - 9/16/2008 1:36:46 PM
Put It To Music Really Romantic Stuff...
Etal: Only He Is As You Alone Is Ever Free...
TRASK
It All Fades in Time Anyway - redux (Poetry) - 9/16/2008 11:02:02 AM
Jeff,
So touching the words to this song, I wish you could get some of these on CD, you capture love within this verse, Take care Blessing's valerie
It All Fades in Time Anyway - redux (Poetry) - 9/16/2008 11:00:18 AM
Dear Jeff, How nice to read you again. This poem could be used as lyrics as it is very meaningful. It seems to contain nostalgia from the past. Nothing in life is lost as everything stays in us, sometimes in the open and sometimes hidden deep within.
Love Emile
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 9/15/2008 1:53:11 PM
Jeff, I'm in awe. The reverence, the beauty, the soulfire. The pain. I am saddened beyond words for such a loss, both to you and to Deanna's little daughters and close family. I can only pray that your depth of love - tangible and supernatural - may remain with you to heal you of your sorrow and minister into your pain, so that in some way it might be metamorphosed into an enduring strength and glory in your heart and soul. Your loss is so great... and yet, what you have been blessed with is even more bountiful, even more majestic than our minds can comprehend. Rare indeed is the gift and legacy of such a deep and intimately-connected friendship. Forgive the "shallow" comparison, but my most iconic, well-loved film is City of Angels with Nick Cage and Meg Ryan: a ministering angel assumes human form to be with the woman he has fallen in love with; shortly after, she is tragically killed. He cannot understand the hand of the God he has so faithfully served and yet says: "I would rather have lived just one moment with one breath of her hair, one touch of her skin, than to have lived a whole eternity without it". I believe this is the precious soul-territory you speak of here, the most wholly divine and profound relationship we can experience while still walking this earth... And you have held it in your hands and will carry it forever in the fabric of your soul. Forgive my emotional ramblings, but I am touched. The beauty of this song and tribute transcends mere words: this write is immortal. In this most profound gift of love you have touched the face of God and felt His heart. My prayers are with you. Go placidly and pursue peace. Love Kate xx
Suffocation (Poetry) - 9/2/2008 1:43:44 PM
OMG, so dark and sad Jeff!
But your images I could see!
I've been here and still miss a great friend, I see daily at work (another Sch. Bus driver) but I wish her the best as I wave! and my heart stays kind!
The way you expressed your emotions is mind boggling in the heart, any way it's looked at.
We must go on - Forward!
WRITE-ON!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Soulful SHEExooo
STay Positive!
Beneath the Twilight Stars (Valerie Pearson collab) (Poetry) - 9/2/2008 4:07:37 AM
WOW! I am touched! Glad I didn't miss this Beautiful heartfelt Collab!
You both have a heart of gold Poets!!!
I feel for your/etc. pain (at these sad times still) Deanna Love and her girls/etc.
My heart is with you in spirit!
I'm amazed writing comes this beautiful and easy for you, it's what is DEEP in the heart that survives in words/feelings (as our pen relays)
STay Strong!
Stay Positive!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Passion Soulful Sheexooo
P.S. You need some Pink Floyd :) (Shine on you Crazy Diamond) - Comfortably Numb Etc. ( I too feel that inner peace, with The Floyd! to soften your pain/tears/etc.
Have a GOOD Day!
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 9/1/2008 11:32:46 PM
JEFF~
My heart sank when I read this WONDERFUL BLESSING of a rare friendship/Love you have/had. Your heart was so deeply touched by a precious soul, that now has touched ours Jeff! I feel such a deep loss for the friendship you shared, and will miss. Tears are not enough from this beautiful heart rendering piece, "I hear sung by angels"! A moving creation by a loving and appreciative friend!
WRITE-ON!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Soulful SHEExoooo
Stay Positive and Strong!
My heart is with you, and her daughters and family! R.I.P. Deanna! * As your spirit WILL leave on!!! YOU are loved! God Bless! P.S. Hope to hear this song sang with intensity and conviction, as she touched your heart that same way in friendship! JUST BEAUTIFULLY TOUCHING! I am saddened for you all, and feel your deep pain!
paint of me a picture dark (Poetry) - 8/31/2008 7:32:38 PM
Jeff, just as the right music can invoke an emotional response so does your writing in this piece and several of your others I had the pleasure of enjoying today. Dave
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/31/2008 5:34:43 PM
No one can understand a friendship like what was expressed in this beautiful Love Offering you created for your friend, unless they have experienced the love of a true friend! I looked my whole life to find the missing piece of me and then oneday GOD placed Susan in my life and her friendship and love made me whole. I mourn the loss of your best friend and can understand the pain you feel. SC
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/31/2008 4:50:00 PM
Jeff I know what it is to loose a friend, I lost three, and one that was as close to me as any sister in the past eighteen months, it is hard, and Deanna was so young, I'll be praying for her family and for you
In Christs Love
Michelle~
Beneath the Twilight Stars (Valerie Pearson collab) (Poetry) - 8/31/2008 3:26:30 PM
Alex, you need to learn to read more properly - "morning tends my eye" is referring to the 'widower' - the person who is still alive. And thieves often torment those from whom they steel, if not directly, then by the stinging torment that is felt by the thing(s) being taken away. Please go back to Homer, do not pass Plato or Socrates. -- Jeff
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/31/2008 11:40:36 AM
Dear Jeff,
most lovely and heartfelt tribute I was very moved. It is such a blessing that such people exist at all, more so when we are lucky enough to meet them. It leaves me with a pang of pain in the heart to remember from my own experience and from yours how some of the loveliest people and experiences on earth seem to be too lovely to stay with us long enough. I do not know why some of the loveliest people are taken away from us so early but such is the drama and the exquisite rhythm pain/joy of life and the transientness of all things as the Buddhists well know. You have made such a lovely contribution full of emotion and love. This wonderful poem calls for enactment with movement and music of sufficient beauty and serenity and intensity. Thinking of you and of your loss which moves me to live again in a poignant but positive way a parallel loss that I have experienced recently. The first days and weeks and months are very difficult one needs to live out and express all the grief and through the expressed grief find the joy of having been blessed with such wonderful people even for a short time. You are already doing that in your lovely poem.
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/28/2008 5:44:50 PM
You leave me speechless from the heart pouring tribute to a soul who passes through only once in a lifetime. The kind of love you describe is rare indeed and yet you were both blessed. Robert and I will keep you in our thoughts and prayers as we realize what a difficult time this is for you. God bless....
Be always safe,
Karen
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/28/2008 11:32:48 AM
Clearly, reviewer/author Alexander Dijas (forgive if the spelling is wrong) was reviewing this as a 'poem,' but in actuality this is a 'song' (already have the melody) - and songs follow different criteria, formats and methodologies from poems.
Additionally, he had implied that I 'borrowed from Byron' in my AD Bio quote when, in fact, I've never read anything by Byron. I certainly have heard of Byron and may one day read some of his works.
At any rate, I do appreciate criticism and critiques, but "tributes" also should be respected with sensitivity. They are tributes for a reason - sometimes they are 'rushed onto the page,' and are less than perfect - like Deanna - she was the first to admit she was far from perfect and she was happy to point out her own flaws.
'Nuff said.
I thank everyone for your reviews. -- Jeff
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/28/2008 9:02:36 AM
Jeff,
The Loving Sonnet of Your Heart Lives It's Bounty Through The Beatific Grace of Your Pen
Your Passion Embraces Me As I Further Read & Hear Your Soul Sing
My Deepest Empathy To You Poet Straight From My Heart
May You Find Peace Through The Love Shared & Mend Your Grief From This Huge Loss...
Much Love To You Poet
Embraced ~ Embrassé
Vickie
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/28/2008 7:32:56 AM
A beautifully felt tribute/song Jeff, and accept my condolences for the lose of a fine and cherished friend. May your heart glean what is necessary to make you stronger, and may you continue to persevere with the fine gifts that have been bestowed upon you.
Blessings ...
Richard
A Grain of Sand Among Ten Billion (Deanna [Batson] Love Tribute) (Poetry) - 8/28/2008 6:46:26 AM
Jeff,
I cry tears as I read this, your words are magical and very loving, we all lost this beautiful soul, wish you could get this on cd as a song tribute to her, Take care , Hugs Valerie
Beneath the Twilight Stars (Valerie Pearson collab) (Poetry) - 8/27/2008 8:20:24 AM
Jeff, You both have a penned an endearment of love
I am so sorry for your loss (Deanna Love) my sincerest empathy & also to her children.
Much Love & Continued Inspirations To You Poet
Embraced ~ Embrassé
Vickie
Beneath the Twilight Stars (Valerie Pearson collab) (Poetry) - 8/26/2008 3:35:41 PM
A very endearing piece that just reaches into one's soul to capture emotions long hidden from view. And so time does unfeelingly continue on its relentless march forward.....
Be always safe,
Karen
Beneath the Twilight Stars (Valerie Pearson collab) (Poetry) - 8/26/2008 5:37:46 AM
Jeff and Valerie,
This is the most beautiful tribute for the death of loved one. I cried and had a lump in my throat all the way through
Mary
razor's edge (toying with an idea for a song) (Poetry) - 8/17/2008 10:48:35 AM
Jeff,
This is a very intense song for certain.
The urgent melodic tones tear at passions throat &
then revive with breadth inhaled for love this sharp as your "razon's edge"...
very intense poem
Embraced ~ Embrassé
Vickie
a chord of vengeance (Poetry) - 8/8/2008 2:43:58 AM
Stunningly Powerful, so many emotions, and so passionately written, you put both heart and soul into this beautiful piece of art, Loved it, Thanks for sharing, Blessings to you Valerie
Dying... to see you Again (Poetry) - 8/5/2008 9:14:35 AM
Great lovely and loving write. Words that can become true once again. Hangin there will do you so much good.
razor's edge (toying with an idea for a song) (Poetry) - 8/3/2008 9:00:30 AM
You're the expert, Jeff. I'm quite sure you could make this into a fine song. As for the theme of this, I can indeed relate. Thanks for sharing. Love and peace to you,
Regis
In Memoriam - Brenda Melson - Compassion's Fount (Poetry) - 7/31/2008 5:17:37 PM
Jeff, what a beautiful loving tribut to Brenda, her love still soars thru your words, thanks for sharing this and God Bless, Valerie
paint of me a picture dark (Poetry) - 7/25/2008 5:06:58 PM
[Debra meant to say:
"Sometimes it takes TIME to build up the inner fortitude to traverse that darkness."
Risen Echo (Poetry) - 7/24/2008 1:53:19 PM
yes this is truly poetry, wonderful, thank you! Jasmin Horst
Risen Echo (Poetry) - 7/24/2008 12:07:36 PM
Gentle and soothing a spiritual piece for any soul....
Be always safe,
Karen
Risen Echo (Poetry) - 7/24/2008 11:22:05 AM
Wow this is magnificant.I enjoy reading this poem.take care
Edwin
Risen Echo (Poetry) - 7/24/2008 11:10:06 AM
I see the water spout out there. How cool. Pretty poem all together. ~ Jennifer
Risen Echo (Poetry) - 7/24/2008 10:28:01 AM
Thanks for the comments - forgot to mention - the picture is one I took about 2 weeks ago, while at Hilton Head Island. If you look between the words "elixir" and "ever," you will see the 'water spout' I was trying to capture in the shot. -- Jeff
Risen Echo (Poetry) - 7/24/2008 9:54:38 AM
Beautifully presented, oh again an ocean scene, which I relate to very well and love to see the rolling waves. Thanks for this risen echo write and the words mean so much to me. Beautiful**********
Letter to my Soul Mate (Poetry) - 7/23/2008 2:29:25 PM
Wonderful write, great read, Hope you shared this piece wih your special someone, take care Valerie
