Can't stop now! (Article) - 11/4/2014 7:25:31 AM
The teens in your story appear to be in a different time and place, but I can't discern much from the small amount you've offered here. I didn't find any errors and the conversation flowed well. I just didn't get enough of your 14,000 words to understand what this story is all about.
I suggest that you post a bit of action or adventure with some conclusion to it rather than just the wake-up conversation and anticipation of unknown consequences in your next teaser to sell your work.
I also note that this appears to be a story. I post whole stories and chapters of my book in the Stories section so as not to shortchange the reader here (all authors). Since this is the Articles section, I was expecting an article about why you can't stop writing thousands of words a day rather than an excerpt from one of your novels.
Ron
