Cheptaleel the Pure (Short Story) - 10/25/2016 4:12:20 AM
Your story is much too short to flesh out the dire circumstances surrounding this place you call Kalenjin. Except that she is pure, little is also known about Cheptalil. The story might be more intriguing had you described her journey to the lake. You leave too much up to the reader to fill in the blanks.
Also, elders is not possessive and mother's is possessive.
Ron
