Escape to Freedom (Book) - 4/8/2017 7:45:26 AM
Top Customer Reviews Carol White
5.0 out of 5 starsHistroy, Suspense, Adventure combined delightly!
Bycwhiteon April 7, 2017
Format: Kindle Edition
A book that both adults and young people will enjoy. The adventure begins with a very determined fifteen-year old named Adrian Morgan. Adrian becomes an indentured servant in order to reach a new life n America. A hurricane interferes with her plans, but she eventually reaches shore in this new country. Fearing for her life, she realizes that she needs a partner to balances the skills needed for success. She find a that in Daniel Dunn another young indentured servant. Together they make their way west despite the many obstacles thrown in their path.
The author, Frances Altman, does a superb job of combining historical facts with many suspenseful adventures. This was a delightful read.
Writer's Toolbox (Article) - 2/23/2017 7:32:36 AM
Excellent article. I am working on my dialogue. Originally when I wrote, I avoided dialogue because I found it rather difficult. Even today, I find that my speakers say too much before they stop talking. I'm always trying to use the dialogue to move my story along, rather than write it the way it might be in real life with all the sidetracks, arguments, and just plain chitchat that has nothing to do with the story.
Watching television drama moving very fast to get everything done in an hour time slot, the actors fire one or two word phrases with a lot of expletives… Usually arguments about what they are going to do next.
On the other hand, while listening to telephone conversations from my partner's iPhone speakerphone in Vietnamese. I find often that the conversations are very one-sided, with one person talking for a very long time before the other gets a word in edge wise. So, people in TV dramas don't really talk like real people. And, real people often try to do monologue rather than dialogue to make their points, especially when they don't have the benefit of face-to-face conversation with nonverbal cues (except when on Skype or FaceTime).
So, I find my story conversations to be more like real life conversations, even though they are only written to drive the story forward. I find TV dramas to be highly unrealistic, action oriented and unnecessarily violent.
Ron
