Antithesis: Lost Loved Found (Poetry) - 10/21/2008 6:09:28 AM
I like this line alot, "nothing overhead
an untruth that makes a feeling
truth stifled by a ceiling." Reminds me of how we break up with someone and be acting all rebellious like we don't give a damn about them anymore but in reality we're still digging them because that feeling keeps digging in us. I think the title is perfect because love always finds its way back to you even when you've think you've misplaced it with your keys. Nice Write Sista!
New Body (Parts) (Poetry) - 10/20/2008 11:48:02 PM
I don't quite understand point of this one. Do you mean that you are a person with a lot of flaws, but now you are using this to enter into the light to make yourself feel better?
Sandie Angel :o)
The Traveler (for Tiffany Liu on her Birthday) (Poetry) - 10/20/2008 11:37:48 PM
Hi Xian Hon:
Very nice of you to write a poem for your cousin's birthday. This is wonderful tribute!
One thing though...how can a snowy heart warms all like her skin? I don't understand this part.
A snowy heart is supposed to be cold, so how can it warm anything?
And to warm it like her skin is not a good comparison, which makes her skin seems as cold as the snowy heart.
Well...this is just my opinion. Thought I'd like to let you know.
Thank you for sharing your work with us!
Sandie Angel :o)
late bloomer (Poetry) - 11/5/2006 5:49:06 PM
i'm glad when your muse blossomed during this poem you weren't penless ... i like your unique style and perspective ...
Reading Poets (Poetry) - 11/1/2006 3:58:14 AM
Ah, the games people play, Xian. Plastic man was a put down in the Sxities. The Kinks even wrote a song about a plastic man. Cheesy would be another good term for this seemingly polite character in the poem. As Robert Burns wrote: Would some power the gift to give us/to see ourselves as others see us. Enjoyed! kenny
shades (Poetry) - 10/31/2006 4:34:52 PM
Wonderful poetry!!!!! I like the expression!!!!!
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
late bloomer (Poetry) - 10/31/2006 4:33:31 PM
A poem is always born during the odd hours. Good expression, Xion!!!
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
Reading Poets (Poetry) - 10/31/2006 11:16:27 AM
"when in private he has no lobes" - breathtaking. Thank you.
Reading Poets (Poetry) - 10/31/2006 9:23:46 AM
This prose reads like the opening page of a novel, written in the first person, many rapid fire thoughts
leaving the reader to make assumptons. Some reason reminds me of waitng for godott..
Reading Poets (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 8:57:04 PM
Quite interesting parade of thoughts...
Glad you are in the den!
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
Reading Poets (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 3:45:47 PM
Interesting read dear Xian!
'...Never assume that an eloquent person is necessarily well-adjusted or that the performance of gratitude makes a good person...'
Well said! Thanks for sharing..
Love, Suzie :-D
late bloomer (Poetry) - 10/16/2006 11:37:19 AM
"My mind makes divine speeches at odds hours" - I know just what you mean. Lovely. Thanks.
paperback aim (Poetry) - 10/12/2006 2:27:50 PM
I was a green and fragrant fir
before I fell for ink and paper....
I write on the screen
these days and save on paper.
You're poem resonates, Xian.
late bloomer (Poetry) - 10/12/2006 1:38:34 AM
you can't slur a blossom
when the sun is down
unless she’s penless <----- so often at night I go in search of a pen to penn to. Great metaphors here..
shades (Poetry) - 10/5/2006 7:56:56 AM
i really like this, the style and the form used are my favorite
now that I don't (Poetry) - 9/12/2006 2:20:38 PM
Selfishness cannot produce love. I hope I got your message right. Victor
words like love (Poetry) - 9/11/2006 4:49:46 AM
Expressed well.
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel
words like love (Poetry) - 9/11/2006 3:39:48 AM
Vivid words and images in these lines.
the fall (Poetry) - 9/10/2006 9:05:03 AM
Nicely done!
the fall (Poetry) - 9/10/2006 5:28:15 AM
Wonderful poetry! Welcome back Xian!
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
the fall (Poetry) - 9/10/2006 5:09:18 AM
Xian
Beautiful poetry..
Keep above those fears..
Peter
the fall (Poetry) - 9/10/2006 4:56:23 AM
wow! very good
void (Poetry) - 9/9/2006 12:57:58 PM
Yup keep it golden..
void (Poetry) - 9/9/2006 5:49:20 AM
Xian
Beautiful word play and interchanging of mood and feeling
Peter
void (Poetry) - 9/9/2006 2:19:43 AM
I found this very well penned and expressed many can relate.
"iris to iris, browns to browns
fade together
co-existent consolation
an adorned togetherness
never bright enough
to drown a life "
Demi-mortal (Poetry) - 7/16/2005 7:51:07 AM
Lololol ...
Demi-mortal (Poetry) - 3/22/2005 5:04:04 PM
Totally unique from the beginning to the clever end.
~ Mari
Demi-mortal (Poetry) - 3/20/2005 3:30:10 AM
this is funny and wise and sooo new york and really made me laugh. kenny
Demi-mortal (Poetry) - 3/19/2005 6:42:37 PM
This was very sweet and I liked the ending.
paperback aim (Poetry) - 2/24/2005 7:31:28 PM
a very thoughtful poem ...
paperback aim (Poetry) - 2/22/2005 4:29:34 AM
...and all these can go into paperbacks of your choice; but then again, in the authorsden, one only has to post it on the net, so no trees are involved here.
Good thought-provoking poem.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
paperback aim (Poetry) - 2/21/2005 4:02:30 PM
this is nicely written
paperback aim (Poetry) - 2/21/2005 3:22:35 PM
Well at least here on this site we do not kill any trees and it is a good site to write on. A lot of folks use the electronic and PC route these days.
cotton wishes or your decay (Poetry) - 2/18/2005 11:00:21 AM
this is different but so well written i feel like reading it again too
cotton wishes or your decay (Poetry) - 2/18/2005 10:54:06 AM
This is rather a unique poem and one that I must read again.
in complete heart (Poetry) - 2/16/2005 6:22:37 PM
in the illusion of a complete heart, truth is an art that mends our wounds and allows then to heal ...
well penned ...
in complete heart (Poetry) - 2/16/2005 6:03:15 AM
I find myself feeling this way too.
in complete heart (Poetry) - 2/16/2005 4:04:41 AM
The feelings of the incomplete heart is well-expressed.
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
New Ice (cracked again) (Poetry) - 2/6/2005 9:50:59 PM
your words brings clashes
visuals of mountains and men
(for some reason)
enjoyed the post...........
Robert Creeley (Poetry) - 2/4/2005 9:17:04 PM
Well-expressed piece. Enjoyed.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
New Ice (cracked again) (Poetry) - 2/4/2005 9:15:28 PM
Looks to me it's a rather interesting piece. I know you probably have said a lot in this piece, but I had failed to understand. Would appreciate it if you could e-mail me and let me know its meaning. Thank you.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
Recycled (Poetry) - 2/3/2005 3:06:59 PM
wow!!!
this is very differrent and i loved your
word play, really interesting
Recycled (Poetry) - 1/30/2005 9:03:22 AM
I found this piece hard to follow from the lack of punctuation and the overall choppiness, forcing me to stop and re-read several lines. I like where your going with this but think it needs some fine tuning.
Jim
Jim,
Recycled (Poetry) - 1/30/2005 8:59:54 AM
This is a great poem and I enjoyed it a lot.
Recycled (Poetry) - 1/30/2005 8:57:53 AM
Good poem and some truths to this.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
awkward saint (Poetry) - 1/27/2005 1:29:16 PM
In some ways you are right but then one has to figure out who the awkward saint is. The one that inspired Valentine's day I suppose.
awkward saint (Poetry) - 1/27/2005 1:23:10 PM
i found this puzzling but compelling
Professor Philoctetes (Poetry) - 1/26/2005 6:46:49 AM
This is a most unusual poem but one can grasp its meaning.
Passive Tongues (Poetry) - 1/10/2005 1:38:17 PM
I often call doubt and punctuation culprits. Much depth here ... much insight. A masterful poem.
Passive Tongues (Poetry) - 1/10/2005 11:03:15 AM
i agree with judy and sandie, this poem flows beautifully
Passive Tongues (Poetry) - 1/10/2005 5:29:50 AM
I agree with Sandie in that one can understand the flow of this poem.
Passive Tongues (Poetry) - 1/10/2005 4:52:25 AM
Hi Xian:
I love the flow of this poem. Exceedingly good craftmanship.
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Antithesis: Lost Loved Found (Poetry) - 1/7/2005 8:30:37 AM
I think that the one line that says the older I get the less Ihave a right to know. Well some believe this of me or rather that was several lines.
Antithesis: Lost Loved Found (Poetry) - 1/7/2005 4:27:13 AM
The poem of emotions
can only be viewed as truth;
The powerful sound of silence
speaks a thousand words.
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
awkward eulogy (Poetry) - 11/19/2004 9:57:14 AM
Impressive style and composition. Enjoyed contents and and VOICE.
keep posting, Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Missed Call (Poetry) - 10/29/2004 5:45:05 PM
well penned ... i would try using more vivid imagery ...
Cracked Ice (for Vera Schwarcz) (Poetry) - 10/23/2004 1:41:49 PM
Nice. I like the choice of words in this one.
Sandie May Angel :o)
Samson's Damsel (Poetry) - 10/11/2004 9:28:00 AM
Wonderful write!
Sandie May Angel :o)
Samson's Damsel (Poetry) - 10/11/2004 7:12:36 AM
Very creative and thought provoking! WEll done!
Imaginary Friend (Poetry) - 10/10/2004 8:16:55 PM
Interesting, Xian. Your title brought several scenerios to mind, I like where your piece took me. :)
Imaginary Friend (Poetry) - 10/10/2004 2:19:01 PM
If words can be found, the healing can begin. Nicely done!
Pauses (Poetry) - 5/21/2004 9:56:30 AM
Yeah sure feels that way sometimes...like "some guys have all the luck"...the rest of us get the pits in the bottom of the bowl. Well, maybe yes...maybe no...maybe it all depends on one's perspective. Loved the flow of this piece...your rhyme works very well. Good stuff!
Pauses (Poetry) - 5/18/2004 6:00:00 PM
Wow, I really enjoyed this cleverly crafted piece! Makes all the sense in the universe to me! :O)
~Nikki~
Pauses (Poetry) - 5/18/2004 2:22:19 PM
very cool........a poem to remember.
Pauses (Poetry) - 5/17/2004 8:46:18 PM
creative and clever
Pauses (Poetry) - 5/17/2004 5:24:06 PM
Hi Amelia~I agree. Not all pauses are follied. I think retrospective pauses are good but not fearful ones...there should be no fear in love.
Pauses (Poetry) - 5/17/2004 5:02:58 PM
There are many good possibilities to pauses, like sighs, or ahs, or renewal.
Atlas Shrugged (Poetry) - 5/17/2004 10:36:33 AM
Bill~ Thank you for sharing. Though my allsuion to heroin was figurative, I appreciate the support. Do no worry about tears, this was former romantic frustration from over a year ago. I have grown much since then. I commmend you for the courage to fight heroin and alcohol out of your life. Take care and keep in touch!
Atlas Shrugged (Poetry) - 5/17/2004 2:32:15 AM
Xian, you write with a pen dripping tears. I do understnd how one feels under the control of heroin after the thrill is gone. As an alcoholic, I didn't start to live until I finally stopped drinking. Now I am on the tailend of a wrecked life, and can only try to salvage a little of what my life should have been. Good luck and God bless you. Miracles do happen, but we have to believe in them.
Bill Murray
Muses wanted? (Poetry) - 5/13/2004 8:25:33 PM
Your thoughts intrigue me,especially
lines like the last one!Superb!
Cadence (Poetry) - 5/13/2004 4:34:05 AM
I like everything about it, the messg. the form. A pleasure to read and contemplate.
Cadence (Poetry) - 5/12/2004 11:13:43 PM
luv the last line to this introspective poetic assertation ...
Cadence (Poetry) - 5/12/2004 10:21:12 PM
I loved the flow of Cadence, it brought to me a warm flow of feelings and emotions that were interred somewhere along my memories.
I also like other's music soothe my soul's rhyhms much more than my own
Cheer
Alain
Cadence (Poetry) - 5/12/2004 10:03:27 PM
Thank you for sharing the creativity of your
beautiful thought process, in such superb
lyrical prose!A pleasure to read!
Vice Versus Love (Poetry) - 5/11/2004 4:23:18 PM
Creative thoughts. Enjoyed.
Vice Versus Love (Poetry) - 5/11/2004 4:09:51 PM
(((xian)))
welcome to author's den--you're among friends :)
loneliness we named love...profound statement.
in the line, "does the desperate hero say any heroin will do?", did you mean, "heroine"?
enjoyed your thought process and this write--well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
