Today's troops are tomorrow's veterans. (Short Story) - 7/27/2005 4:00:07 AM
well done. The Vietnam Vets wife sez : Just hope today's soldiers do not become the next group of tomorrow's vets to face the fact that what they were told when they enlisted is not what they will face or receive when they older, perhaps ill and need the promised medical or other help.
Prologue; The Age of Suffering (Short Story) - 7/25/2005 12:56:14 PM
Thank you so much for reading, Karen. Your review brings a smile.
Prologue; The Age of Suffering (Short Story) - 7/25/2005 12:52:34 PM
excellent fantasy write, heather; i really liked this! very well done! :)
To Touch Upon Scape Goats--Prologue (Short Story) - 7/19/2005 5:16:38 AM
Ugh. I can't think of a more horrible monster than a female vampire. Although I once experienced the vision of being eaten by a praying mantis! That was an interesting thought, after breaking up the word mantis into two parts. A praying man tis.
Today's troops are tomorrow's veterans. (Short Story) - 6/14/2005 9:08:10 AM
good story with a good message; very well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, your tx. friend, karen lynn. :D
Brief Prologue to: Tales of the Unruly Monk (Short Story) - 4/6/2005 3:59:31 AM
Heather, this is very interesting. You have set this story up very well. So well, in fact, I'm looking forward to reading it. Best wishes to you.
M.Rose
Chapter Six (Short Story) - 3/14/2005 5:27:48 PM
It would be interesting to see how you play this out. I really can not find anything wrong with it. Meaning that I am not going to tell you need to put a comma here or there but that it did hold my attention. If a story bores me and I fall asleep I don't keep reading it. So I did not fall asleep and the opening punch line about her taking a shit on the dead body does grab you.
Chapter Five (Short Story) - 3/11/2005 9:11:52 AM
excellent write; very well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, your tx. friend, karen lynn. :D
will have to read the other four so i can get caught up! LOL
Chapter One (Short Story) - 3/6/2005 10:39:59 PM
I applaude and commend the atmosphere and raw emotion embedded in the writing. Concepts are good. The setting is alien yet believable. Style flows well. Writer has a good voice. The only weakness lies in the first section: it reads more like a story synopsis than a story: too much is explained from the narrator's point of view. In fact, the narrator is too strong, too present in the writing. This keeps the reader from bonding with the female character as closely as possible. Readers follow her at a distance instead of being allowed intimate access to who she really is. Also, by overexplaining her...a lot of the mystery (the hook) is lost that you could have used to intrigue the reader. Sometimes less is more. Still, there's a lot of good material here to work with, a lot of potential. It will be interesting to see what you do with this in time.
The poison of your life (Poetry) - 3/15/2009 4:48:37 AM
Instead of putting one's faith in a solid object, let everyone put their faith in our Lord Jesus who will deliver us from the evils of eternal death. I rate this a 10 out of 10, and thank you so much for sharing.
May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love and who love you, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your little sister, Barbie
This cannot be sin (Poetry) - 2/17/2006 11:29:40 AM
brilliant write..you convinced me it is right!
This cannot be sin (Poetry) - 2/16/2006 5:51:23 AM
A wonderful write!
Birgit and Roger
This cannot be sin (Poetry) - 2/16/2006 4:04:22 AM
what others call sin is often not, enjoyed the poem.
Corrupted past lives (Poetry) - 2/2/2006 8:23:52 PM
Well said! The ones who think they are immortal to the truth will have no say when they receive their calling...
Best Wishes,
Roger and Birgit
Cascading light tricks (Poetry) - 8/26/2005 6:17:43 AM
They're both nice, but I personally like the second one better. Well-done Haiku's.
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Corrupted past lives (Poetry) - 8/20/2005 1:10:39 AM
Short simple, deep haiku.
blessin's Sis. Heather, this is very very good.
cynth'ya lewis reed
Corrupted past lives (Poetry) - 8/19/2005 3:30:34 PM
Heather,
Yeah....We should really all try to do what's right!
Not that I'm perfect , but I try and definitely not Corrupt.
Excellent!
Rich Criso Suarez
Radiers of the storm (Poetry) - 8/4/2005 4:45:07 AM
Powerfully sad, and a very haunting graphic, Heather.
Capture rare beauty (Poetry) - 8/3/2005 8:34:48 AM
Beautiful, beautiful haiku, Heather!
God bless,
Sandie.
Capture rare beauty (Poetry) - 8/3/2005 4:03:03 AM
Excellent Haiku poem!
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Striking in defeat (Poetry) - 8/2/2005 2:53:27 PM
Yes Heather, the Lion is majestic, no matter where they are; in captivity or in the wild; the lion sleeps tonight. Thnx for sharing Heather, I really enjoyed this a great deal. May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and be at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, stubborn to a fault, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your little terrified sister, Barbie
"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I may as well be."
Striking in defeat (Poetry) - 8/2/2005 12:50:29 PM
I love this because upon my visiting
the zoo on several past occasions
I always wondered how these awesome creatures
continued to radiate such majestic essense.
very concise .
Peace and joy'',
Rich Criso Suarez
Reflections of time (Poetry) - 7/27/2005 10:58:07 PM
wise messaage to this important haiku ...
Millennias past (Poetry) - 7/22/2005 4:31:04 AM
Amazing picture, and a wonderful poem to match!!!!!
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Serenity dawns (Poetry) - 7/21/2005 3:32:34 AM
This picture is simply gorgeous! Your words make it even more so.
