Lest We Forget (Short Story) - 4/14/2002 10:54:55 PM
Enjoyed reading a fellow Murphy's writing.
Just one question: What exactly is "Anzac history"? Just wondering (I'm American). I get the general idea but don't get the particulars.
Nice short story. Good plot but needs a little more life. Played the stress of Jenny nicely but the conflict was resolved much too quickly at the end. All the sudden everything is good and their marriage is saved and she's famous.
Some observations:
Good intro with leaving the reader hanging at the end of the first paragraph.
Glitch with instaneous instead of instantaneous in paragraph two.
Chris appears in the fifth paragraph wihout a prelude or explanation. Don't find out who he is until the third page. Who's Dave on the 10th paragraph of page three? Take it that's just a glitch for Chris.
There's a glitch on page 4, second paragraph and fourth with bought instead of brought. Also, a glitch in 6th para., 4th page with down instead of done.
Redundant "Charissa told her daughter" on the last page.
Suggest a colon or dash to seperate "Lest We Forget" at the end of the story. Needs some extra emphasis.
Are Children a Right or a Responsibility? (Article) - 11/7/2001 11:20:58 AM
As a mother of four children of my own, I agree that having children is not a decision to make lightly. I think that many young people today are having children simply because they can. My teenaged son is already a parent and has another child on the way. He is learning the hard way of the responsibilities of being a parent. Having children is a decision that should be thought out for as you stated, it is a lifetime commitment. Excellent article Nicole!
What the World Needs Now... (Article) - 11/7/2001 11:08:05 AM
This is so true, Nicole. You are so right. So many people tend to believe what they are told; if only more would question and learn to use their own minds rather than blindly follow. Excellent article!
Are Children a Right or a Responsibility? (Article) - 11/3/2001 6:54:00 PM
I had mixed feelings about this article. However upon reading it I agreed in many areas. I do agree that children are should be a high priority in our lives, as a mom of four I dedicate all my time to my children. I do not believe that people just have children to have them. I think some wind up pregnant on accident and others plan to have children. I don't think the decision is made lightly. I also believe in quantity time as well. I am always disappointed when I hear of a couple both working deciding to have a child and keep both their jobs. This means they have a child that will be raised in a day care environment and not at home with a parent that chose to have them.
However I don't believe that the government belongs in our decisions regarding children. Family is a sacred institution that should not be invaded by outside sources unless true child abuse and neglect is very evident.
It is difficult enough to get young pregnant girls to get prenatal care and to have the government require all pregnant women to go to governmental, politically motivated child preparation classes is going a bit far.
This is a diverse country. There are rich parents, middle class families, and poor ones. We all grow into adulthood with unique sets of problems to overcome and accomplishments to gain.
The part where you said children are our equal is wrong. As you stated later, we parents have to be willing to give 100% with knowing that our children will not be able to return that until adulthood. Parents should be in charge and provide loving homes with fair discipline that steers our youngsters into a positive productive adulthood. We have to be regarded respectfully as authority figures for children to learn these qualities by example and guidance.
Although I disagree with the politics of your article I very much appreciate your value of children and the respectfulness of good parenting.
