Starlight On Stone SOUTH (ebook) (Book) - 5/17/2016 9:59:14 AM
I would like to add to my review of Jan's series. I did a general account of the series, which I have read all of them. I realize that a good review must be of each book so readers can decide whether or not to purchase and read them.
The first one is "Starlight on Stone, South"
In this story, that takes place in the Middle East around the time the Old Testament was taking place for the Israelites. Many of the tribes and cities in this series are mentioned in the Bible, although it was not Jan's intent to portray these empires. It is a work of Science Fiction/Fantasy however knowing the geography of this region helps to understand the story line.
Shi Shi was a boy king of a kingdom called "Qemt", a very powerful but declining dynasty. Qemt had many enemies but also many allies. When Shi Shi begins to gather his armies and allies for war from enemies in the North called the Hitti, he first travels by ship to the Southern regions of the Nile River in Egypt. Joining his chariot army are infantry, archers, and even some giants along the way and all rally to his cause. There was a Nubian King, an army of giants, and even men from Ethiopia. Turning North again along the river, he stopped for supplies and others joined the fight. They passed through many lands ravaged by Phoenician and Liyfian Pirates. The people resisted but lost to the invaders and abandoned by their gods, scattered leaving their statues alone in the ruins.
Along they way north, Shi Shi encountered a scribe from one of the lower kingdoms who begins to tell him of the his ancestors and fallen kingdoms.His father had not told him of this and he was anxious to learn more as well as his adventures documented for history. The scribe and her associates spin these tales as the armies travel.
Empires rose and fell to other conquerors and their gods. This is a fascinating story filled with adventure about people that lived and died in this sometimes fertile and sometimes harsh lands.
I highly recommend this tale of fantasy with Kings, Emperors, Princes and Emirs all joined in survival. You will meet sorcerers, people who follow the stars and read the signs of nature relating to many gods that they believe hold the keys to their future.
The Author says the books can be read in any order, but saving "Crux" for last as it ties them all together. Jan has the great ability to spin tales such as these and I am now reading Crux to see how they all fit. Buy the books, in print or as ebooks, but buy them and enjoy as I have.
Starlight On Stone CRUX (Book) - 5/7/2016 4:03:34 AM
Posted by James Steffes-06May2016 - I began to read this series beginning with "Starlight on Stone-South. I continued with North,East, and West. Finally the book that ties them all together "Crux" What captured me even though I am a Sci/Fi/Fantasy Fan was the characters and location of the stories. Being a Christian and studied the Bible, there are mentions in there of Tribes like Hittites, Moabites, and many more. However, this series, although fiction, gives some insight to civilizations surrounding the Holy Land. These are real people trying to survive at a time when the world was in turmoil. The area is what is now Turkey and the Middle East. Dynasties and Kingdoms are crumbling and the people are lost. I highly recommend this series, from the first one you will be hooked. Well done, Jan Estrup, I plan to read more of your fascinating stories. What if? is a large part of fantasy stories and this is one of the best
Starlight On Stone CRUX (ebook) (Book) - 5/17/2014 11:26:41 AM
Intense Sci-fi. Enjoyable, bite-size excerpt makes you want to read more.
Just Pier
Starlight On Stone CRUX (Book) - 3/31/2014 1:39:36 PM
Congratulations on your latest book. From what I can see, you use great imagination and your work. That's something that I don't think that I am capable of.
Ron
Starlight On Stone WEST (Book) - 3/9/2014 10:30:16 AM
My Rate 5 Stars
Starlight On Stone West is a fast moving, yet wonderfully revealing tale upheaval, displacement and relationships. Not a standard story line, West is peopled with memorable heroes, believable events and factual magic. Joanie on e-library
Starlight On Stone SOUTH (Book) - 9/30/2013 5:15:12 AM
Starlight On Stone SOUTH is now available through Amazon on Kindle and as a free library book the world over.
Starlight On Stone EAST (ebook) (Book) - 2/4/2013 9:54:43 AM
This book is an essential part of the Starlight On Stone epic which includes, WEST, SOUTH and NORTH, all currently available. The climax, CRUX, will be published in the Winter of 2014. Characters of all four books focus their journeys, intentionally or involuntarily, upon the religious and trading center at Kadesh, where antiquity's greatest battle remains unresolved. Unforgettable personalities like Shargo the Strong, Shi-shi the boy-king, Twice-born Twi and Tyrana the Shadow Queen people this saga with real men and women. No angels or faeries, vampires or daemons mar this narrative, only the superstitions and hopes of those who find themselves overwhelmed by circumsance.
Starlight On Stone NORTH (ebook) (Book) - 2/1/2013 10:03:40 AM
Congratulations, Jansen, you're very productive these days, which gives this old man hope.
Starlight On Stone WEST (ebook) (Book) - 1/30/2013 10:13:03 AM
Best of luck with your new book, Jansen. I hope it brings you great fortune.
Starlight On Stone NORTH (Book) - 1/12/2013 10:13:03 AM
My best to you, Jansen, with your new book. May you sell a million. Terry
Starlight On Stone SOUTH (ebook) (Book) - 5/9/2012 1:57:22 PM
Good luck with your new book, Jansen. I hope you make the best sellers list. Terry
Starlight On Stone SOUTH (Book) - 4/21/2012 2:18:06 PM
I wish you all the best with your new book, Jansen. May the winds bring you bookoo readers.
New Year's Eve (Short Story) - 11/29/2018 7:22:00 PM
I enjoy your writing! you increase our understanding of the chaos our cousins, brothers, friends and husbands experienced and still dream about
never stop writing
m
New Year's Eve, the prequel (Short Story) - 11/29/2018 7:18:07 PM
you provide a treasure for your family with your writing
never stop writing
m
Puzzle - Knife - another piece (Short Story) - 11/29/2018 7:16:34 PM
as always you weave a spell binding tale, beginning to end!
never stop writing
m
Puzzle - the Chaser piece (Short Story) - 11/29/2018 7:13:10 PM
enjoyed this dandy read!! holds reader interest
never stop writing
m
Shargo the Strong (Short Story) - 11/29/2018 10:30:13 AM
spell binding, holds reader interest
never stop writing
m
Shargo the Strong (Short Story) - 11/21/2018 8:53:38 AM
"total paralysis' Yikes. Poor guy. And 'lasting friendships' in my experiences are rare anymore JE. Being unequally yoked with another can be a big problem. I wonder what kind of technology Midas used to turn things into gold. A fascinating character. You offer the reader much to chew on in 6 paragraphs. Enjoyed this. Best with your books. Regards... rlc
Shargo the Strong (Short Story) - 11/21/2018 8:46:27 AM
The first thing I thought of as you were describing Shargo was that the people you remember were little people like the family that my cousin married into here in Houston and the Houston girl at 16 who is now a finalist on The Voice. Little people (some of the names used for them have become politically incorrect because they were abusive) generally have a muscular anatomy that is normal but their shortened skeleton makes them look like they have pumped iron or as we used to say, musclebound.
I also immediately thought that they were members of a circus. Believe it or not, some circuses wintered in Baraboo, Wisconsin, infamous home of high schoolers giving Nazi salutes on the Internet. I can't imagine what their animals, like elephants and big cats, went through during those cold, snowy winters. I think that Florida was a much better venue.
Having two sets of abdominal muscles causing the paralysis, is really strange. I would think that epilepsy would be more in order but I haven't read in detail how you describe the symptom of paralysis. I recall that I had a girlfriend once that when we were out one time she suddenly went rigid and couldn't move or even say anything for a period of about two or three minutes. It scared the death out of me, because I didn't know what to do and was glad she came out of it. It could have been epilepsy as well. She left me shortly after that because she was in a hurry to get married and I did not ask her. So I never found out what it was that caused that short period of paralysis. She died, last year, and around 70. Too young for a woman these days.
Ron
Shargo the Strong (Short Story) - 11/20/2018 10:33:19 PM
Utterly fascinating. Never heard of this condition. Sounds like great potential for story-telling.
Beach Comber (Short Story) - 6/24/2018 5:02:08 PM
holds reader interest
Never Stop Writing!!
m
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, I (Short Story) - 5/20/2018 4:16:55 PM
POWERFUL compelling, holds reader interest
on to the next
NEVER STOP WRITING!
m
Crystal Fishes (Short Story) - 11/7/2017 4:54:52 AM
I always enjoy your writing
Beach Comber (Short Story) - 10/9/2016 8:57:08 AM
I love this story of yours, Jansen. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Puzzle - Knife - another piece (Short Story) - 8/31/2016 10:02:26 AM
Jansen... Excellent story with equally excellent details.
When you accidentally cut Pete I got scared. Thought it would be his demise!
I carry a little pocket knife. It is 30 years old. Stainless steel. The entire thing.
Made by Zippo. Blade about 2.5 inches. Perfect for picking steamed crabs.
At home I have an antique US Army Bolo knife 1918. My Dad used it in the US
Cavalry when he worked with a Mule-Skinner in Texas. He was only 17 at the
Time. Too young to join the army, so he ran away from Baltimore & lied about
His age.
Knives & all weapons must be respected. Peace. ✌🏻️ Tom.
Beach Comber (Short Story) - 8/29/2016 7:18:03 AM
A memorable, and somewhat bizarre, experience. Enjoyed r
Beach Comber (Short Story) - 8/28/2016 1:12:59 AM
Every once in a while we stumble across an incongruity and the memory lingers with us forever. Thank you for sharing your shark story which lives in perpetuity.
Beach Comber (Short Story) - 8/27/2016 12:06:01 PM
I'm not much of a Gulf Coast beach bum, but I have logged a few miles thereon. Today there are lots of fatso's, weirdo's, and traces of oil that washes up, apparently in perpetuity. I'll let you know if I stumble upon your shady shark, especially after downing a couple of margaritas.
Beach Comber (Short Story) - 8/27/2016 9:49:20 AM
Are you sure you saw it? Or was it just a dream?
Seriously, it may have been staged for a photo shoot. You didn't say if you saw many tracks around it. On the other hand, if that was a photo shoot, you would think that they would have taken the props away.
As for the chuckle, I would have had to have been there.
Ron
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, II (Short Story) - 8/16/2016 10:56:01 AM
A gripping story that captures the reader's attention from start to finish; stark, and real. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you, Jansen.
Regis
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, II (Short Story) - 8/5/2016 8:39:19 AM
Thanks to all of you for fighting your way through this piece. As you say, it is dark and has been both haunting and daunting for me all these years. Exactly as Ed says, most men, even those brave in the face of death, are not able to confront psychic pain – not even willing to acknowledge such places exist, yet the darkness finds us in dreams and demand to see light in other ways. Since ancient times banishment, exile or solitary confinement has been the most terrible of punishment. It is our minds that Bertrand Russell called our greatest fear and being alone with it a terrible fate. Such fears can become a national epidemic, everyone projecting that darkness upon countrymen, neighbors, families, children, the occult … anyone but themselves and their own shame.
But shame, Dr. Maté tells us, is not something we earned or deserved - it is something done to us that we feel as rejection, separation from those we love, rely upon – identify as the source of our existence. Often it happens as unavoidable circumstance, unintentional oversight or social legacy. And when it happens to us so young, before we have a firm sense of ourselves, we spend our whole lives on uncertain ground. Everything else becomes mere coping skill, mindless diversion or chemical flight. And as Eva has observed, it is our job as adults to unlearn those lessons, to sort it all out, to identify and resolve our pain. Healing, we might become truly free.
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, II (Short Story) - 8/5/2016 12:31:29 AM
Since each of us copes the best way we can when traumatized, you and your brother did so in different ways. It is overcoming the hurdles of the past that can become our undoing or triumph.
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, II (Short Story) - 8/4/2016 9:29:38 AM
Sorry, Jan, but this is too deep, too dark, and too wrapped in emotions for me to digest and to appreciate the crux of family dissension. It is well written, but it is beyond my poor powers to swim in the interpersonal giving and taking and wind my way through the psychological pathways of either harmony or discord.
Ed
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, II (Short Story) - 8/4/2016 6:40:16 AM
Apparently, you seem to have some PTSD over this situation partly brought on by the war and your mother having three children in short order. And, your father somehow thinking that a four-year-old should have responsibility, not only for his own well-being, but for his two-year-old brother. This whole incident(s) seems to have led to more dysfunction in your family that still haunts you today.
I recall little or nothing before I was four. I only recall that we were not allowed to play in the front yard because a state highway with cars that run over us ran past the house. If there were any incidents where my twin and I strayed out front, I don't know. We were five when our sister was born and my mother was probably sick when she had a miscarriage in between, but I don't remember when my sister was born.
As for being two, they don't call it the, "terrible twos," for nothing. I'm certainly glad I don't remember what my mother went through with the two of us when we were in our twos. It might bother me to this day as well.
Ron
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, I (Short Story) - 7/24/2016 1:24:25 AM
Excellent storytelling! In this segment, I'm more in tune to the Monitor, aka Al and the effect the war had on a young child who wasn't at liberty to be one even at the age of four.
Puzzle - So What Really Happened, I (Short Story) - 7/23/2016 10:17:41 AM
Wow! This puts one on the edge of one's seat. I'm beginning to think that Al, the monitor, may be either an imaginary friend or a psychiatrist. Beautifully written, as usual. And, I believe, autobiography. Interesting that you said caste-off instead of cast-off. It does seem like you were relegated to substandard status when you did not live up to being, "a man."
Ron
Dust (Article) - 11/29/2018 10:07:23 AM
I enjoyed reading your thought provoking review!
as always you provide much for thought
never stop writing
m
Dust (Article) - 11/24/2018 10:43:31 AM
My initial impression was that you were writing about Mars. But that was only from the title.
I didn't know that the famous Hanging Gardens of Babylon were actually in Nineveh. I learn something new every day.
The Owens Valley hijack truly was a mistake, like so many others is the West needed water for expansion. The latest mistake is the growing of almonds in such quantities that there is a surplus for all kinds of almond products like almond milk that I have tried and hate. Sucking up what little water there is still left in the dwindling aquifers providing water during California's growing droughts.
We obviously need to wake up to what the real problems are and begin to solve them one by one. But if we grow, either by immigration or continuing to have too many babies, nothing will stop the agony will get ourselves in. The recent fires, now reaching the rich in places like Malibu, are the canaries in the mine smelling the dust, and finding it foul.
Ron
Explosive language (Article) - 10/26/2018 3:27:18 PM
Agree entirely, Jan. The playbook of anti-intellectualism is riddled with assertions masquerading as facts, i.e., to not merely to deny climate change and the scientific community, but to install a climate change denier as the head of the EPA. Ditto for heading up NASA with a nonscientist; for installing a "for profit" advocate as head of the Dept. of Education; and one who is hellbent of destroying Social Security as its head; and, again, another destroyer to head up the Consumer Financial Protection Bureau with an advocate to tear it apart. BTW, the pipebomb builder was arrested alluded to below is in custody. He is a right wing nut with a long history of building them and with an IQ on a par with his idol, the prez.
Explosive language (Article) - 10/26/2018 12:01:57 PM
"There is a cult of ignorance in the United States. It's been there from the beginning. This virus of anti-intellectualism has been a constant thread winding its way through our political and cultural life, nurtured by the false notion that democracy means that my/your ignorance is just as good as your/my knowledge." Issac Asimov
Agree with your 4th paragraph, Jansen. There is something mighty suspicious though about this pipe bomb thing right before the elections. It reminds me in certain ways of Nazi Germanys agenda driven misinformation campaigns. Is it possible that Clinton, Biden, Obama, Booker, and whoever else was involved, conspired to have it done to themselves to try and sway the election? )-: They have someone in custody. Was he hired? Or did he act alone? Interesting thoughts. Peace... r
Explosive language (Article) - 10/26/2018 6:59:22 AM
point made, well said
never stop writing
m
Explosive language (Article) - 10/25/2018 9:44:58 AM
While I don't have any issue with apparent attack because none of the packages were anywhere near the intensity target when they were discovered, I agree with you about language. When President Trump says something nasty offhand, he usually flatly denies that he ever said it, or says something different, like turning Lying Ted into Lovely Ted to fit the occasion.
But spin doctors are different. Because they like to work with half-truths, they like to insinuate words that are appropriately confusing so that main point is [somewhat] diffused. Do you see what I mean?
Great article for those wordsmiths out there.
Ron
The Indispensable Man (Article) - 9/25/2018 12:12:37 PM
Great story, Jan. The best I could do was to turn down a Commendation Medal. Some of us just were never meant to be heroes.
The Indispensable Man (Article) - 9/13/2018 8:17:02 AM
I enjoyed reading your informative article
Never Stop Writing
m
The Indispensable Man (Article) - 9/10/2018 11:07:39 AM
It is often said that history repeats itself. I thank you for finding this biography that shows us what I suspected all along for the first part of the 20th century somewhat paralleling the first part of the 21st. I surely don't want us to come up with an excuse for another world war.
What you are revealing makes it all the more important that we dismantle the power of the very very rich to control and to stop fascism wherever it arises.
Ron
The Indispensable Man (Article) - 9/10/2018 2:58:15 AM
A fine tribute to a true patriot and hero in every sense of the word I'd never heard of until now.
The Indispensable Man (Article) - 9/9/2018 9:31:34 PM
Amazing what all went on as a closer scrutiny of history reveals. An interesting article about a person I never heard of, and timely as well.
The Indispensable Man (Article) - 9/9/2018 5:25:55 PM
Your article is a dire reminder that unless we return to the essence of patriotism, get rid of politicians who use the word as if they know, understand and are really not the bumpkin their rhetoric labels them with, we will find that whistle blowers may turn out to be the only remnant of patriotism left. That would be regrettable. But... the big but... where are the patriots of integrity today? Certainly not in the oval office.
Heroes and slaves (Article) - 9/6/2018 8:56:49 AM
Thank you for the corrections in public perception. I, for one, didn't know that the president is only commander-in-chief, during war. But I guess, under the First Amendment, we have the right of free speech to be able to salute the president, or not.
I just read that a survey has found that an annual income of $75,000 is considered the point of being happy. And, coincidentally, anything over $95,000 is the point of unhappiness starting to creep in. The more wealth one has, the more responsibility. Too much wealth can be much worse than too little.
The onerous we put on people who have served their time for crimes convicted, is almost unconscionable. We want them to be good citizens, but prevent them from working most jobs… Except those that are dangerous or have slave wages. How can they live in our society without an income? And, all because they are poor, colored, and sold a little marijuana because it was the only business available in the neighborhood.
Ron
Heroes and slaves (Article) - 9/5/2018 9:05:42 PM
Are you wrong? Far from it. I read your piece with great interest. Well said, Jansen. The list of "wrongs" actually goes on and on in this day and age!
Heroes and slaves (Article) - 9/5/2018 5:03:25 PM
Just wrong, it the right phrase. With so many egregious injustices, as you've pointed out, plaguing our country, those of us with even a modicum of consciousness have to reflect and take your words to heart. Our problem will probably remain, for the polarity between our constitution and the present day behavior of its ostensible caretakers, is an abysmal mess, including an executive branch disgrace (to use it appropriately, unlike that buffoon sitting in the oval office now on a witch hunt in the White House for the names who gave Woodward the fodder for his book, FEAR.) I'm beginning to give serious thought to what it would be like for all female ticket in 2020. The midterms will give us food for thought, for sure. This was a very informative and well organized piece of political thought. Thank you.
The Great War at 100-Honor v. Dignity (Article) - 5/7/2018 6:41:38 AM
The actual words of the original Mothers Day Proclamation, written in 1870 by Julia Ward Howell, after the Civil War
Arise then...women of this day!
Arise, all women who have hearts!
Whether your baptism be of water or of tears!
Say firmly: "We will not have questions answered by irrelevant agencies,
Our husbands will not come to us, reeking with carnage,
For caresses and applause.
Our sons shall not be taken from us to unlearn
All that we have been able to teach them of charity, mercy and patience.
We, the women of one country,
Will be too tender of those of another country
To allow our sons to be trained to injure theirs."
From the voice of a devastated Earth
a voice goes up with Our own.
It says: "Disarm! Disarm!
The sword of murder is not the balance of justice."
Blood does not wipe our dishonor,
Nor violence indicate possession.
As men have often forsaken the plough and the anvil
At the summons of war,
Let women now leave all that may be left of home
For a great and earnest day of counsel.
Let them meet first, as women, to bewail and commemorate the dead.
Let them solemnly take counsel with each other as to the means
Whereby the great human family can live in peace...
Each bearing after his own time the sacred impress,
not of Caesar, But of God
In the name of womanhood and humanity, I earnestly ask
That a general congress of women without limit of nationality,
May be appointed and held at someplace deemed most convenient
And the earliest period consistent with its objects,
To promote the alliance of the different nationalities,
The amicable settlement of international questions,
The great and general interests
of peace.
Flags and Other Symbolisms (Article) - 4/22/2018 3:15:52 AM
Congratulations to Colin Kaepernick for receiving the Amnesty International Ambassador of Conscience Award - AMSTERDAM (AP) Human rights organization Amnesty International has honored former NFL quarterback Colin Kaepernick with its Ambassador of Conscience Award for 2018, lauding his peaceful protests against racial inequality.
Trauma and Stress (Article) - 4/11/2018 5:39:49 PM
Tough subject to tackle, glad you're on the job.
I have just remodeled my blog site, I'd appreciate it if you could give me your thoughts. The address is https://dljohnson365.blogspot.com
Thanks and cheers,
Dan
Lights Out! by Ted Koppel (Article) - 3/21/2018 8:26:55 AM
This gives me an idea for a sy-fi movie script or novel where the U.S. and Russia "go to war" using such techniques. Finally, after much devastation, they realize that all people need to respect each other and declare an end to war. If anyone wants to steal this idea, before I get around to it, go ahead. I won't complain!
Lights Out! by Ted Koppel (Article) - 3/18/2018 9:44:12 AM
Ted Koppel always seemed to have a kind of whiny voice and a negative outlook, especially on Nightline. He is from my graduate school, Stanford, and I will give them that.
But Koppel and I differ in our outlook. I line up with Obama when he said that we could easily "absorb" another 9/11. Calamities and disasters are happening all the time. Cyber warfare is just a new twist to all the other man-made threats that have accumulated over 10,000 years of warfare and mayhem that we seem to enjoy and want to continue with huge "defense" forces and equipment. The facts show that individual danger is much less than it was 100 years ago and declining every year. We just reported it more and faster, like it's happening to us.
However, I love writing apocalyptic scenarios. I'm serializing The Last Wanderer here, showing that food would be harder to get after everything rotted in your refrigerators/freezers than worrying about wearing out your shoes.
A good review of a useful book. Thanks. Keep up the good work…
Ron
Lights Out! by Ted Koppel (Article) - 3/17/2018 11:21:59 AM
Sounds like a book to read. Koppel was one of my habitual watches back when. He had a way of reminding us journalism needn't be over-the-top-garishness and ego. Thanks for the review.
They Came Before Columbus-African presence in ancient America (Article) - 3/14/2018 6:28:12 AM
I wasn't familiar with this possibility, but I'm open to learning more about it. Lately there've been a lot of new information coming out of who was first to use and abuse the natural beauty and wonder of what was called, perhaps inappropriately, the New World.
I did know and is well documented that the Nubians conquered Egypt and ruled Egypt for quite some time. Later followed by Greek and Roman conquest of perhaps, the most advanced civilization of the ancient world.
Ron
A Feudal Overlord (Article) - 2/22/2018 6:56:13 AM
It has been a privilege for me to have read a number of works from this author and this essay is right at the top of the list. Succinct and right to the heart of this serious problem we face. This article should be picked up by the AP and UPI so the nation, the Congress and the world can learn some history as well as read something credible to combat the tabloid trivia that is brainwashing this country.
Thank you Mr. Estrup!
A Feudal Overlord (Article) - 2/21/2018 2:31:42 PM
Thanks for this article. To think the military is as corrupt as some of our politicians. It's true that war is made to make profits. Very sad, more people need to see through this.
Entry (Poetry) - 8/12/2018 8:53:43 AM
chuckle
Never stop writing
m
Your Own Nuclear Power (Poetry) - 8/12/2018 8:53:14 AM
something to consider for certain!
Never stop writing
m
Greeks and Other Baal-cains (Poetry) - 4/17/2018 10:42:47 AM
I don't remember Mythology being so crude and vicious. Many vile actions have been performed "in the name of God."
Hell (Poetry) - 2/18/2018 11:33:42 AM
An interesting "take" on storms, Jansen; and these words of yours are ever apt and timely. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Hell (Poetry) - 11/22/2017 1:45:22 PM
Interesting take on storms
never stop writing!
m
Cyber City Park (Poetry) - 5/10/2017 9:58:07 AM
Hi Jansen
Forgive me in criticizing your poem. You did a great job. Suggestion=
I would remove all 3rd lines of all your verses to give musical rhythm
to your verses and it does not take away from your structure
Have a Good Pilgrim Darryl Ehlers
Happy New Year (Poetry) - 12/22/2016 5:38:27 PM
Herlihy is yanking your chain. He's an old fogie just like you and me. I'm from the era that is identified by grapes, smiles, hugs, and sex. Maybe that leaves John out of the picture. Best wishes to you also, "old" friend. Ed
Happy New Year (Poetry) - 12/21/2016 7:37:48 PM
Words that have a deep meaning without generating discourse. Good read.
Happy New Year (Poetry) - 12/21/2016 4:58:36 PM
thought provoking read!!
don't stop writing
Happy New Year (Poetry) - 12/21/2016 10:19:39 AM
I try to keep my rituals to a minimum these days, but the ones I do partake in usually involve others I love. May you do the same.
Ron
Happy New Year (Poetry) - 12/21/2016 6:23:32 AM
Clean water. Yes! Common Era: a preferred title by some writers who are not Christians. Irrespective. Merry Christmas, and a blessed New Year, Jansen.
Happy New Year (Poetry) - 12/21/2016 5:10:40 AM
Not sure how "common" our era is, but all the same, very warm wishes to you and your family, Jansen. John
Helix or Vortex? That is the question ... (Poetry) - 10/2/2016 2:12:10 AM
I LOVED THE MUSIC AND THE VIDEO. HHMMMM? THERE COULD BE A MEDICAL PROBLEM; HIGH BLOOD PRESSURE, LOW BLOOD PRESSURE OR SOMETHING MORE SERIOUS... ETC. IN ANY CASE, THE BOTTOM LINE IS THIS; BECAUSE THERE'S SO MANY THEORIES THAT CAN BE ADOPTED AS TO WHY VERTIGO HAPPENS, WHICH EVER EXPLANATION ONE CAN LOGICALLY ACCEPT AND BE SATISFIED WITH...GO FOR IT, I GUESS. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS.
Entry (Poetry) - 11/28/2015 9:53:08 AM
I appreciate your wit and humor and the meaning behind it all, Jansen. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Entry (Poetry) - 11/17/2015 7:44:36 AM
It's a mug. Now that I have set that straight, it's good to see someone blatantly going right after a prize instead of writing a silly poem trying to get one.
Following Ed's sage advice, I think I will paint an "S" in front of my AD, to illustrate how far we have to go to advertise who and what we are. Without drawing in new blood through catchy contests, our membership will end up just being old codgers like us--sad.
I hate contests and don't like to enter. But in this case, I'm already trying to think up something perverse for the big Thanksgiving showdown and dredging up an old story for Christmas that most of the current readers haven't seen. Isn't Christmas a time for re-giving something old to someone new?
Let's just say that I really appreciate your humor and hope that this one will grab you one of those mugs as the merry goes round!
Ron
Entry (Poetry) - 11/17/2015 6:49:15 AM
Now just a minute there, sir. My daughter suggested a put an "M" in front of mine with "AD" on it. I did and now it gets third prize behind the one with "DAD" and the other with "Grandpa" on them. So there!
Entry (Poetry) - 11/17/2015 6:46:51 AM
As long as you can work the system with such alacrity and charm, why not. DoG knows there are far too many trying to do the same without any talent.
Hell (Poetry) - 11/2/2015 3:18:44 PM
Truly, Jansen, a most frightening, and peculiar, storm. The problems in the ocean, and atmosphere, now, must be far-reaching to generate such a beast, and the fact it diffused so quickly upon landfall is certainly curious. If I dwell too long on it I might see a 'spiritual metaphor' in it. Blessings... rlc
Hell (Poetry) - 10/26/2015 8:39:10 AM
Patricia was a monster storm but Christ Jesus the Lord still quits storms! Alleluia!!! Your poem should teach us how precious and fragile life it, thank you, peace!!!
Hell (Poetry) - 10/24/2015 7:45:39 AM
Perhaps the tired, the poor, the huddled masses yearning to breathe free,and the wretched refuse all gather along wind whipped shores, the parched lands, and flooded river valleys because they know Mother Nature’s treatment is kinder to them than is that of their human oppressors.
Hell (Poetry) - 10/23/2015 10:46:41 AM
Looks like the desert Southwest is in for some gloomy spooky nights of heavy rain and potential flash floods disrupting house and home too close to riverbeds.
Even us over here in subdued bayou land with haunted swamps turned to concrete ditches may be in for it this Hell o'ween with 1 to 2 feet of the watery grave.
Timely poem.
Ron
Hell (Poetry) - 10/23/2015 6:16:53 AM
You've reminded us with lyrical charm that even the most devilish of Nature's wrath deserves respect. Hopefully, any and all who'll not have this as a wake up call will pay attention along that coast.
Hell (Poetry) - 10/23/2015 6:13:54 AM
Yep, the old song applies -- the left is made of iron and the right is made of steel; if the left don't getcha then the right one weel. Hell to pay either way.
Community (Poetry) - 9/8/2015 10:07:53 PM
Very clever and true. Nicely put. Ashiff
Your Own Nuclear Power (Poetry) - 6/21/2015 5:54:53 AM
Is that Duke as in "Duke Energy"...... They got caught cheating their customers
Somewhere in florida....... Must be interesting to manufacture your own energy
Peace be with you
Willian
Helix or Vortex? That is the question ... (Poetry) - 6/17/2015 6:55:35 AM
Well worth the time to view this a couple of times. Interesting hypothesis you've come up with re: vertigo. Thanks for posting.
Helix or Vortex? That is the question ... (Poetry) - 6/8/2015 4:44:19 AM
There is a more complete view here - enjoy - poetry in motion - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C4V-ooITrws&feature=youtu.be
Your Own Nuclear Power (Poetry) - 5/13/2015 4:03:18 PM
Like little evles,
we taught ourselves.
From kerosene lamps,
to sunny amps.
Love your poem about our energy journey! C'
Your Own Nuclear Power (Poetry) - 5/13/2015 10:50:36 AM
That would look great on my south facing roof. Thomas Paine would be proud of your independence from the matrix of the grid. Bravo for your stewardship of the earth. Showing the way to freedom for all!
Come to think of it… I'd better get busy.
Ron
Your Own Nuclear Power (Poetry) - 5/13/2015 8:17:20 AM
No need to apologize as I am sure Tom Paine would approve of today's repackaged sunshine patriot. He might even approve of doggeral when done with your kind of skill. Congrats of your nuclear power plant. I wish I had the natural energy to construct on myself.
Your Own Nuclear Power (Poetry) - 5/13/2015 6:55:16 AM
You have the correct way of thinking, Jansen, and I will admit it has taken me some time to deal with replacing oil, etc. But I am leaning toward the light these days.
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 4/12/2015 8:06:22 AM
Uniquely creative, Jansen. Your rhythm fits the beat of the dance. Thank you for sharing. Love and peace to you,
Regis
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/20/2015 6:37:10 AM
Original thoughts. Love that fifth verse. As a brisk campfire; your creative mind is crackling warmly here. Enjoyed. rlc
Dog (Poetry) - 2/8/2015 8:24:39 AM
Sweet and charming poem that connects man to dog. Our dogs are amazing creatures. They are great companions. You have a lucky dog to be so celebrated and cherished.
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 2:54:51 PM
...appreciate your effort of..."Raise your arm again, make a fist, point your thumb down
and continue saying, I'm a bad boy while I push down on your wrist. Ready? Resist."...
and..."Come on Baby, Let's do the Twist".....
Great spin-poetry. Exquisite sense of humour...Have what she is having....
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 2:10:38 PM
I'm fascinated with your rhythms here Jansen, and creativity :)
Blessings,
Christine
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 1:24:06 PM
OK, you have quoted or written about too many different people, places, and things for me to comment about (or to search and read about) that I must limit myself to observing you have a mighty nice rhyme that resonates well around my prison yard
da dit, dit dit dit, dit dah etc.
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/6/2015 4:46:07 AM
We have become a self-centered world of 'Selfies' and I think so many miss so much all around them because of this. I prefer to take pics of what I see around me.
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/5/2015 1:18:50 PM
And I didn't see those typos… I must admit I was having trouble deciphering what you are driving at except perhaps the idea that from a simple binary tapping of Morse code to convey simple messages in time of danger, we now have wide bandwidth to text massive amounts of chatter, but little warning.
Extrapolating what's happening in the future is mind-boggling…
Ron
A Harmless Plot (Poetry) - 2/5/2015 7:44:49 AM
"Guy Fawkes" is the correct name. Also, you may have been looking for "stricken" vs. "striken?" And, you need a space in "eachother." (end of grammar cop mode) ;-)
I love the inter-weaving of the old (morse code) with the new (selfie and zettabyte) - nicely done. -- Jeff Mason
Cyber City Park (Poetry) - 10/29/2014 12:34:31 AM
you're absolutely right, we wonder the keyboards, we mesh, collate, some are dead, some are born, I like that verse says much meaningful too. A forest park teaches lots these days. Wondering in it is amaze. I thank you for this write, it's simply devine.
Helix or Vortex? That is the question ... (Poetry) - 10/29/2014 12:31:41 AM
Hoping you don't have vertigo, it's no fun I know. I know the universe is awesome and does dazzle me, but I don't get dizzy over it.
Cyber City Park (Poetry) - 9/15/2014 10:39:23 AM
I like your breadth and use of unusual diction in this piece, Jansen, and your seemingly classical treatment in rhyme of a very brassy, real-life topic. Quite a modern-day 'epic'.
each one has something mute to say.
- I found this quite a thought-provoking line. Thank you. Kate
Cyber City Park (Poetry) - 8/11/2014 8:22:24 AM
Thank you for sharing your "estrupian" wisdom and experience, Jansen. There is substance to think upon in your verses. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Cyber City Park (Poetry) - 8/11/2014 7:06:55 AM
That pome is quite a tome! ;-)
Seriously, I enjoy coming to this little Cyber Park every morning to see what serious writers like you have to say with your wisdom and experience. My only wish is that we actually could be under some beautiful virtual redwood trees dappled shade keep the sun out of our eyes as we drink a couple of java and enjoy swapping tales.
Ron
Cyber City Park (Poetry) - 8/10/2014 4:25:05 PM
This is a stylish salute to age and to wisdom
and it’s clear you’ve amassed enough of one
and lots more of the other.
Weeds (Poetry) - 2/25/2014 12:03:11 PM
Ah, c'est la vie! Nature always has its way and blessed are those who find blessing in that. A very perspicacious write, Carole, and I'm sure there are very real lessons for us all in it. Perhaps it all goes to show that 'friends to weeds grow friends indeed'. Original and wry. Thank you. KB x
Weeds (Poetry) - 2/20/2014 4:09:11 PM
Carole knows her "Weeds" ... well written ...
Weeds (Poetry) - 2/20/2014 10:47:39 AM
I love it! Splendid! Reminds me of a poem that I wrote, entitled "weeds."
Ron
Weeds (Poetry) - 2/20/2014 8:57:25 AM
Nicely crafted...
Loved the ironic ending and enjoyed reading.
Weeds (Poetry) - 2/20/2014 7:10:48 AM
Irony has a way. Well penned.
Weeds (Poetry) - 2/20/2014 6:32:12 AM
An excellent poem, Jansen. Good job.
One Of Us (Poetry) - 10/21/2013 7:45:30 PM
By its own actions the human race has been and will be shaped. We either adapt or die. M.True
Dog (Poetry) - 10/21/2013 7:41:12 PM
To the best of friends, this canine praise. A heart-felt write. M.True
Greeks and Other Baal-cains (Poetry) - 10/21/2013 7:38:15 PM
Ye Gods! I never knew as much and well told. M.True
Community (Poetry) - 10/21/2013 7:32:59 PM
Quite astute. This is the model for the suspension of belief. It is all about the audience allowing the performers to continue in their appointed roles. Such is theater. M.True
Community (Poetry) - 8/17/2013 7:39:21 AM
Sad but true; a wise commentary, Jansen. Thank you. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Community (Poetry) - 7/28/2013 5:17:41 PM
I must be the worst audience ever, in this case. But I haven't watched TV in more than twenty years. Of course, there are other ways to perform and if performance heals, it's for a good cause. Somehow, I prefer the shaman to the politicians we know. Interesting stuff!
Axilea
One Of Us (Poetry) - 7/28/2013 2:47:33 PM
What a beautiful find Jansen. The instrument that kills is part of the quarry. I need to look at the Gilgamesh chronicles which I haven't in several years. You have gleaned something that speaks of the impact of traitors in the process of war. A parallel that is not hard to find in this age. Well done my friend. Bob
Greeks and Other Baal-cains (Poetry) - 7/28/2013 2:41:07 PM
Ah the curse of free will and the perilous decisions we must make. While I myself am not sure that a benevolent God would promote killing in his name, nevertheless it still happens. You have couched the eternal question in well written lines my friend. The graven gods were only reflections of human nature, dark and otherwise, but still only human gods. I love a poem that makes me think and entertains me at the same time. You have done both. Bob
Community (Poetry) - 7/28/2013 2:30:18 PM
Kind of sad to think that content matters so little in any endeavor. You are probably right though Jansen. Trouble is that I myself am more heavily weighted toward the content side of the equation. That's where something like poetry has a distinct advantage over other mediums, in that the quality of the words can be judged and found wanting if the reader has a mind. In some things quality counts. Bob
Community (Poetry) - 7/28/2013 8:53:30 AM
Well said, Jansen. But once off the stage, those numbers should appear in reverse order. Unfortunately, therein lies life's problems...
Community (Poetry) - 7/28/2013 7:55:47 AM
Wise beyond your years… So far ;-)
Ron
In Praise of Ishara (Poetry) - 5/3/2013 8:17:10 AM
Ishara is a variant of Ishtar, Asheroth, Astarte, Isis, etal. They are not usually associated with the invention of language, although wisdom is usually attributed to all of them. The Greek mother goddess, Hera, is a European variant, 'Asian' or 'east' added to make As-hera. Usually the name means 'star' or some aspect. Teshub is also an Anatolian/Hurrian deity, a storm and lighting bolt predecessor of Teus/Zeus, Thor and others. The Lady Algol is a mystery to me, too, possibly one who greets the dead. It is remarkable how much of what we call 'classical' literature actually originated in Turkey right along with our alphabet (Hittites were inventors of vowels) and the concept of zero (zeriff-that which is above the other numbers) and such. Hope you both will continue research in this area. Poets not so long ago were well versed in the classics. American 'exceptionalism' attitudes forced us to abandon even the knowledge of other greatness. Thanks for the interest and encouragement.
In Praise of Ishara (Poetry) - 5/3/2013 8:06:21 AM
Religion seems to be born in every society whether they have a written language or not. On the other hand, you have stated that the poem was fiction.
Ron
In Praise of Ishara (Poetry) - 5/3/2013 7:25:00 AM
Like Regis, I have had my interest aroused and seek out further understanding of the subject. Thank you for posting.
In Praise of Ishara (Poetry) - 5/2/2013 12:56:35 PM
This a good lesson for me, Jansen. I am quite unfamiliar with these entities. Thank you for piquing my interest. Love and peace,
Regis
Dog (Poetry) - 4/16/2013 11:11:24 AM
If that is his picture, he is a beauty, and he looks so content!
I only want little dogs, but I can still admire the large breeds. I love the phrase, "joy runs with him" and the image of him running with ears flapping.
Connie
Dog (Poetry) - 3/24/2013 11:20:22 AM
The words of one who sees all of life worth paying attention to. Reminiscent of Mr. Ed's dedication, this was a rewarding and lyrical glimpse at the never ending magic a dog can impact a fellow creature who sees love as universal and without necessity of object, preferring to honor the state of love. Beautifully uttered.
One Of Us (Poetry) - 12/23/2012 10:39:08 AM
A most apt and timely sharing, Jansen. Thank you. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Dog (Poetry) - 12/14/2012 10:36:11 AM
A delightful ode to a special canine friend; thanks for sharing, Jansen. Love and peace to you,
Regis
One Of Us (Poetry) - 12/11/2012 10:15:21 AM
Wow, that last line is a doozy (sp)
Cheers,
Dan
Dog (Poetry) - 12/11/2012 10:12:46 AM
Isn't it great to have someone like that...that accepts you unconditionally? Great write.
Cheers,
Dan
Dog (Poetry) - 12/11/2012 8:22:44 AM
He sounds like a gem, wish I could get a dog, but I am having a hard enough time keeping myself going so it wouldn't be fair to a dog to subject him to it as well, good write...e
Dog (Poetry) - 12/11/2012 6:32:57 AM
Right, Terry - father was an Irish Setter, mother an Akita-Lab mix. He was a marvelous furry thing ...
Dog (Poetry) - 12/11/2012 6:26:30 AM
Sounds like a retriever of some sort.
One Of Us (Poetry) - 11/21/2012 12:52:35 PM
What a wonderfully unexpected leap of thought, compelling and even haunting ~
Christine
One Of Us (Poetry) - 11/21/2012 8:01:19 AM
I would see the handle as the betrayer. Very creative and apropos for our time.
Ron
One Of Us (Poetry) - 11/21/2012 6:04:52 AM
I like this a lot. Great poem, and lesson.
Greeks and Other Baal-cains (Poetry) - 10/27/2012 1:01:04 PM
Powerful stuff well crafted in expression, Jansen. Thank you for sharing. Love and peace to you,
Regis
Greeks and Other Baal-cains (Poetry) - 10/22/2012 2:03:46 PM
EXCELLENT Shroud into the darkled myrrh of expression
and too so very deep the psychological brain busting action here!!
And it reins true globally to this very day about murder and cannibalism
From Vaulted Darkness
They Never Said If She/He Tasted Like Chicken…(I know lol That’s badddd)
Candle Wax & Witches Brew
Greeks and Other Baal-cains (Poetry) - 8/28/2012 8:54:33 AM
sounds like the ancient gods were worse than men in some cases! well penned.
