Or Not To Be (Short Story) - 7/27/2008 1:01:25 PM
i think there are some universal messages here. She's elderly. She's lonely. She's unattractive. AND she's deserving of our attention. I like it.
-- Dave Lane
Starlight in the Mall (Short Story) - 7/27/2008 12:58:53 PM
Another day waiting on the wife at the mall. Tell the truth, Joe. Wouldn't you rather be home watching reruns of The Brady Bunch?
-- Dave Lane
The Child Bride (revision) (Short Story) - 6/16/2008 3:46:40 PM
I like it Joe, but I found myself wanting a little more at the end. It feels as if you cut it a bit short, as if you knew the start (excellent) and the middle, but were uncertain of the end. That's just my opinion, which, along with $2 will get you a cup of coffee. :)
Dave Lane
The Child Bride (revision) (Short Story) - 6/3/2008 7:06:23 AM
Great story, Joseph; bravo!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :)
My Muse (Short Story) - 3/8/2008 9:44:25 AM
Very good
A Piecemeal Kingdom (Short Story) - 3/5/2008 1:39:23 PM
Nicely done. You kept me wondering where the story was going, right to the end. Mission accomplished.
Noontime with Schizophrenia (Short Story) - 3/5/2008 1:32:38 PM
Terrific. Well-written and provocative. Good work.
The Prison Guard (Short Story) - 3/5/2008 1:26:49 PM
Pretty well written (literate, which is not so common as one might think), and with great potential, but I felt a bit flat at the end. It feels like a story without a climax. Also, you might consider less description and more tension-building, since it's primarily a psychological thriller, and since every single word counts in a short story.
Horlocher's Barn (Short Story) - 10/30/2007 9:13:47 AM
Superb work..wow!
Vesna
Horlocher's Barn (Short Story) - 10/6/2007 1:34:09 PM
O, Joseph, I like this one! Very well done; bravo!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
Letter to My Grandson (Short Story) - 9/28/2007 7:35:12 AM
Precious beyond compare, Joseph; very well done! BRAVO! He certainly is a lucky lad to have a loving grandpa like you!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
My Muse (Short Story) - 9/28/2007 7:34:10 AM
Cute write, Joseph; enjoyed much~ Thanks for sharing; very well done!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
A Piecemeal Kingdom (Short Story) - 9/28/2007 7:33:19 AM
Excellent story, Joseph; very well done! BRAVO!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :)
Mind if I track you?....
The Missed Funeral (Short Story) - 9/28/2007 5:57:25 AM
*tears* Your retelling put a lump in the throat and tears in the eyes: I felt your pain, your loss. I'm sorry. I missed my Gramma's funeral, too.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
A Piecemeal Kingdom (Short Story) - 9/28/2007 5:52:08 AM
WOW! I. Love. This. Write! You write of innocence, yet of horror: right up there with the masters. I will be reading more: well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
The Missed Funeral (Short Story) - 9/27/2007 7:59:43 AM
I missed my great grandmother's funeral because I was pregnant with my son. Superstition on the part of my mother's family kept me from saying my Maw Maw. I relate with tis piece. I cried for you Joseph. I know your grandmother understood and is waiting in heaven for you.
Heartwrenching write but a great pen.
Love,
Ann
Letter to My Grandson (Short Story) - 9/27/2007 7:46:27 AM
What a beautiful letter for a lucky little boy! I know he will always be surrrounded by love. Lucky little boy to have you for his Grandpa Joe.
Love,
Ann
A Piecemeal Kingdom (Short Story) - 9/27/2007 7:39:37 AM
Oh WOW! I can't think of another thing to say! Just Oh WOW!!
Great Write!!!
Love,
Ann
Haley's Story (Article) - 9/28/2007 5:55:26 AM
John,
No one knows until they've been there, or been educated through informative writes like this; thank you for writing this. I, myself, don't understand AD/HD, however, this tells me what children who have it go through. (My best friend has 3 children--out of 4--with AD/HD. Don't you know she's 'bout to pull her hair out!) Well done, and thank you for sharing Haley's story.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
