Fat Girls Should Stay Home (Short Story) - 10/15/2008 7:56:19 PM
Hi, my name is Ching-Chen, I am an international student in University of Oregon. This story is my writing class's reading material. I just wanna say I love it. I love the way you wrote and the story. Take care
Grandma (Short Story) - 9/27/2007 11:49:24 AM
oh, i loved it! great job!
The Story of Becky (Short Story) - 9/18/2007 10:06:26 PM
Oh man! You really sucked me in. Even having the same name as your antagonist, she was so rounded, that it didn't distract me at all. You have quite a talent.
Keep writing,
Char
The Sadness of the Sage (Short Story) - 9/18/2007 9:44:45 PM
I like your play with sage and sage, but like Karen, I thought at first this was going to be about a place with lots of sage brush.
There's a word in spanish--anceano--it means "the old one" but so much more than that. You've go a great character here.
Keep writing
Charlie
Grandma (Short Story) - 9/18/2007 9:38:58 PM
I really missed out on having grandparents like you. I felt like I was there on the farm with you--loved every bit of it.
Keep writing.
Char
Collecting Time (Short Story) - 9/17/2007 7:57:33 PM
So far, very good. Very crisp prose, with no unnecessary parts that I could see. It's hard for me to give criticism without seeing the whole of the work, but what I see here is a good start.
Brett
Wogging (Short Story) - 9/17/2007 6:54:50 PM
They say everyone has a double, Diana, and it sounds like I've found the female version of me. I think our DNA was polluted in the same nuclear accident.*laughing*
Great story. Thanks for sharing it.
Collecting Time (Short Story) - 9/16/2007 6:35:34 AM
Nice job, Diana. Good characterization and you've left your reader wondering... I would definitely read more. The only thing I might offer in the way of criticism is that I thought the story bogged down just a little bit in the paragraphs about the stamps. A lot of info there. But it might just be me. Overall I enjoyed the chapter very much.
Jean
Collecting Time (Short Story) - 9/16/2007 4:34:15 AM
Well written, intriguing storyline. And I happen to collect marbles (of course not with this kind of loot), so was very entertained. Great job. Would love to read more. Elizabeth
Deer Ann: (Short Story) - 9/9/2007 6:39:17 PM
Diana, excellent job on the first person narrative. The character comes off innocent yet she reveals so much inadvertently. Really good write.
Brett
Deer Ann: (Short Story) - 9/8/2007 11:52:51 AM
God, Diana, this gits ya right. Here. So sad, and reality for so many confused young girls: babies raisin' babies. Well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
The Sadness of the Sage (Short Story) - 9/8/2007 4:47:30 AM
Great story, Diana, but I thought it was about Sage Sweetwater! LOL Still, I am not disappointed; I enjoyed this! Very well done; brava!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
The Sadness of the Sage (Short Story) - 9/8/2007 4:42:18 AM
Well, Diana, this is quite different from what I've come to expect, but no less excellent. I love the literary style. I also found myself early in the story thinking how beautifully poetic the words are. You truly are a very gifted writer.
The Story of Becky (Short Story) - 9/6/2007 7:08:19 PM
Diana, you stories suck a person right in. I felt I personally knew these people. I've known a lot of women like Char...maybe that's why this seemed so true to me. Your writing is excellent. Some of the best I've seen.
The Story of Becky (Short Story) - 9/6/2007 4:38:42 PM
Wow, Diana -- another excellent story. This was so very well told, and again, I have to agree with Karla, this character was most compelling and endearing. Felt rather more like chatting with an old friend than reading a story.
Stop by my den sometime.
Jean
Wogging (Short Story) - 9/6/2007 4:26:28 PM
Witty and laugh out loud funny. I love the line "With bugs between her teeth because she'll be damned if she won't smile."
Brett
Fat Girls Should Stay Home (Short Story) - 9/6/2007 4:07:33 AM
Not sure if this is fact or fiction Diana, but enjoyed reading it immensely. It's true that some people can be so very cruel, as the stepfather is in this case, but we must always try to treat other people as we would like to be treated ourselves. Some of this brought tears to my eyes, some of it I could identify with (especially those potoato chips)but it's a wonderful read with a happy ending. Just great.
Take care
Sue
The Story of Becky (Short Story) - 9/5/2007 6:17:49 PM
Diana,
Your writing draws the reader into the story; makes them feel for the characters. Compellingly penned, powerfully, poignantly penned.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Fat Girls Should Stay Home (Short Story) - 9/3/2007 5:22:32 PM
WOW, WOW, WoW. Jean sent me here and I'm so glad she did. I LOVE this. You have written it beautifully and it reads as absolutely real...whether it is or not. It's certainly real for many. Excellent! Liza
Grandma (Short Story) - 9/3/2007 3:02:26 PM
Diana,
Delightful! You capture the bond between gramma and twin tornadoes (grandsons) perfectly. You had me smiling and missing my own...well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Fat Girls Should Stay Home (Short Story) - 9/3/2007 2:35:39 PM
I agree with the two reviewers below, that it takes attitude to lose weight; but it doesn't help when society keeps embracing the sickly, wafer-thin models or celebrities as the ideal body image. (I didn't look that bad when I was at my sickest, when I went down to 100 pounds!) They need to learn to sccept people of ALL sizes, and make provisions of making better fitting (or looking) clothes for heavy people, provide jobs for them that they are able to do without too much effort, or treat them like the human beings they are, not just keep shoving all this weight loss shit upon them or telling them to go away because thin (or normal-sized people) may find it disgusting. Shame! No wonder they are depressed; no wonder a lot of heavy set people want to stay home! You have written a powerful, eye opening account that is believable! Very well done! *applauding*
(((HUGS))) and love, Karen Lynn in Texas. :(
Fat Girls Should Stay Home (Short Story) - 9/3/2007 1:58:07 PM
Diana, I agree with Karla -- this story is absolutely wonderful! Though I see from your bio you are happily married, I know there must be some truth to this, or the weight and meanness are symbols for something else you have overcome -- it is just too real and too evocative to not have happened in some form. A very inspiring work. Makes me want to try to be a better person, if only a little at a time. I am really enjoying your stories. You have such a delightfully frank writing style. I am going to add you to my tracking list so as not to miss out on a word.
Jean
Fat Girls Should Stay Home (Short Story) - 9/3/2007 12:26:16 PM
Diane,
I was going to really rip you for the story, just by the title I was offended.
Was.
I read every word, and sit here, shaking my head: you captured my life...bad attitude and all. Maybe that's the secret behind weight loss, changing attitude.
I pray it is: will let you know if it helps. Everything else sure hasn't.
FTR (For the Record): 5'3, 200.
Reads like true life: if this is fictional, you convinced me it was real.
Well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Grandma (Short Story) - 9/3/2007 9:25:21 AM
Delightful story, Diana; very well done! :)
Grandma (Short Story) - 9/2/2007 3:27:47 PM
Diana, I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this write. I can tell you are a very interesting lady, completely in love with life and I look forward to reading more of your work.
(Love you bio, too!)
Jean
The Journey (Poetry) - 9/27/2007 6:57:01 PM
Beautiful. I've never been good with good-byes...I'll keep this in mind for the next one!
Regards...
Barb
Mr Politician (Poetry) - 9/19/2007 5:53:52 PM
DIANA...
First, thank you for comment on my site.
Secondly, while I agree with everything in your poem above, I think you were too KIND to them (politicians)... if you were truly angry with BUSH, you might consider adding a few well chosen SPLIT-EXPLETIVES! perhaps like: LYING RAT-BASTARD, or TYR-ANUS REX!
Also, while I have a great deal of respect for JERRY BOLTON, and LOVE his works, I disagree
with his comment below. Nikita Krushev said "we will bury you from within" and the Communists FAILED --- but BUSH, CHENEY, ROWE, RICE, THE PRIOR REPUBLICAN MAJORITY, HALIBURTON, THE OIL INDUSTRY, BLACKWATER, AND ALL THE REST OF THE WARMONGERS --- ARE THE ENEMY... THE ENEMY WITHIN !!!
THEIR AVARICE ... PLUS...
OUR TAX DOLLARS & AND OUR SONS AND DAUGHTERS LIVES...
EQUALS CROOKED WARMONGERS EXCESSIVE PROFITS !!!
DIANA this was a very good expression of both CONCERN and DIAPPOINTMENT, but next time, GET MAD AS HELL...
If anything is going to SAVE AMERICA, it will be the DEATH OF APATHY... INVOLVEMENT --
CHALLENGE BOTH THE 'ADMINISTRATION' as well as the "535 CIRCUS OF CHIMPANZEES"!
Peace, Tom.
Mr Politician (Poetry) - 9/11/2007 10:11:18 AM
"Mr. Politician" dares politicians to act ethically and honorably. Unfortunately, honest politician seems to be an oxymoron. You are a visionary. I really enjoyed this poem.
Mr Politician (Poetry) - 9/9/2007 7:10:40 PM
Diana, thank you for your kind comments about "No Pride in Prejudice". And your message brought an extra benefit, leading me to this page and your excellent (and biting) Mr Politician! It appears we have much in common.
The Journey (Poetry) - 9/3/2007 3:00:18 PM
Diana,
Ooooh. I love that picture! I have taken many like it. God paints pretty skies, especially in Texas sunsets. :)
And this is a powerfully inspiring journey of words: excellently penned.
(((HUGS))) and love, karla.
Mr Politician (Poetry) - 9/3/2007 2:58:47 PM
God help us all--agree with Jerry, below, but also think that politicians have forgotten whom they serve...well done, Diana, this thought provoking write.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Mr Politician (Poetry) - 8/31/2007 9:53:00 AM
I'm no politician, but I do know the enemy and it springs from places where women are not allowed to speak, or show their faces . . . Whatever our faults here in America, we are NOT the enemy as you tend to think . . .
The Journey (Poetry) - 8/30/2007 10:08:49 PM
A very inspirational piece describing the journey we all travel....
Be safe,
Karen
The Journey (Poetry) - 8/30/2007 7:56:33 PM
Oh my, so much like Bunyan.
A great trail blazing write, it is this kind off work that keeps me up at 04:14 lol...
Very deep, yet so inspiring to know others are on the same path....
BTW no tv...Kewl
