Whatever..... (Short Story) - 2/11/2004 1:03:41 AM
Greetings in Peace,
This story has all the nuts and bolts in place to become a really deep philosophical piece. To me it seems that if one has God-consciousness ("taqwa" in Urdu), then one knows the purpose of life, the power of free will, and that Fate is a false god of the Greeks.
The protagonist's lamentations are peculiarly familiar to me of many Americans who try to discern meaning from tampered texts without aid of lost scriptures thanks to the Romans at the Council of Nicaea. Yet, the protagonist and his fellow Indo-Pakistanis have the Last Testament in its original and pristine tongue, as well as fantastic translations and explanations of it meaning from such noted scholars as Maududi.
Is the protagonist not one of those who follow God's Guidance, which "on them shall be no fear nor shall they grieve"? (Last Testament 2: 38). I have read from that Revelation, which talks about the heavens, paradise and hell, the Awakening and the Resurrection of mankind, the gathering of souls for Judgment Day, the weighing of sins against good deeds, and the Straight Path. I do not understand those who are unwilling to countenance what our Creator has revealed.
It seems that too often their own appetites become their god ("Be not among those who join gods with God"; LT 30:31), because so many place their delight in those things that they possess ("I, the Sovereign, have granted them abudance of wealth and sons"; LT 23:55). They seem to be lost in gathering up the crumbs of this world. "The mutual rivalry for piling up the good things diverted"(LT 102:1,2) them from more serious things until they come to their graves.
Of course, the enemy of mankind is Satan who actively works to terminate every one of us humans. He was there in your story, whispering distractions to impede the protagonist's goal to do right by himself by trying to make hiim believe that he had no free will to choose what he will do in this life.
It was a good story, but the protagonist did not apprehend that he was probably holding a discussion with Shaytaan himself, who was hoping for another log in his fire. That realization, perhaps at the point when he looks to the rear of the bus to find that the antagonist has vanished into thin air, would make a profound ending.
Peace.
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 10/15/2003 10:52:11 AM
Great!! Not because of the idea of the story nor due to its melo-dramatic suspense. But it is the cool and simple narration of the
the two opposite facets of life: an old man who knows the futility
life as he spent and a young man who wants to believe that life is
worth the effort he is making at living it. Futility versus Hope.
Mr.QA,keep it up, and forget about poetry. Poetry of the verse is
what is your forte. And think about a few things in your life which you will not trade for a million dollars. How many??
A long drive..... (Short Story) - 3/7/2003 11:41:23 AM
I enjoyed this.
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 2/6/2003 4:48:00 PM
You know this story was absoluetly great !
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/31/2002 12:57:19 PM
I liked this very much.I liked to know about you keep your self strange and bee confidence not become nervous. GOD helps you
but it was GREAT
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/29/2002 12:13:00 AM
While interviewing, an employer never expects a young engineer to erect a building on his own, but he certainly looks for the potential in him, to do the job at later stage. So I believe U have the potential to communicate to mankind.
Lets all hope for the best... Ameen. (Short Story) - 8/15/2002 3:28:20 PM
yea hope things get better for you!!! its good that you're getting your own place. and God is always there to help the honest and hardworkers. take care and my prayers are with you always dhost!
loza luv,
deepa
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/15/2002 3:18:05 PM
very nice story. makes us think about life
in a different prespective!!! well written!
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/12/2002 10:55:08 AM
No doubt, this is an excellent write
I enjoyed a lot.
Your views about life are really strong and powerful.I wish you best of luck and a cheerful life.
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/12/2002 9:32:15 AM
Wow. I really enjoyed this story. Excellent flow.
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/9/2002 10:50:35 AM
enjoyed this very much, qamar! great write!! hope your new job is a success; i will keep you in my thoughts and prayers!! love from america, your new friend, karen lynn.
Whatever..... (Short Story) - 8/8/2002 9:09:58 AM
Hey QB,
I think there's a lot of depth in your story which you yourself haven't realized. Keep aside the spelling and grammatical errors, they can always be corrected..but your essence of the story is strong.
You've posed a lot of questions about life because of that one meeting with a stranger. And you're ending shows the fact that you didn't find the depth of this conversation, which you should. But of course, not to a point which will leave you confused.
Life has many faces. Some people are just lucky and some people are not. Life isn't a constant...it's a variable which changes with seasons, which changes with circumstances and which changes from people to people. Money isn't the only contributing factor...even relationships change lives. There's so much to say about life, from our own experiences. If you have a follow-up of this story where you ponder over these questions...or if you just want to write it for yourself...or something, that would be great. It's these things in life that makes us think about the bigger things ahead. If things went wrong with person, doesn't mean they'll go wrong with you.
You have my best wishes BOY...(lol) and hopefully, have a great job and life after your graduation. And you better not take this story off - I spent so much time typing this comment....LOL!!!
Good write!!
Lets all hope for the best... Ameen. (Short Story) - 8/2/2002 8:53:34 AM
hope things get better for you, qamar. great write about a awful situation. my prayers and thoughts are with you, qamar.
love, karen lynn.
Lets all hope for the best... Ameen. (Short Story) - 7/29/2002 2:32:08 AM
Oh jeez, this sounds bad. I know that life in US is always tough and it's of course quite different from the "parent-pampered" life that we live down here at home (more or less). Well this is the time, like you said - we just have to believe in Allah and wait for things to fall in place. Till then, don't fret and take it easy. Not everyone helps us during our times of need. So it's always good to be independant and be ready for a back-up -- just in case.
Keepin my fingers crossed for ya!
A long drive..... (Short Story) - 7/26/2002 10:47:24 AM
HUH? Oyeee...complete karo! looool...man now I won't sleep for the next three days ;)
And oh yes, welcome to AD!
Should Israel be next? (Article) - 11/29/2003 2:43:39 AM
Greetings in Peace,
The U.S. should not be invading anybody fullstop! The only proper role for the U.S. military is defence, that is, repelling and neutralizing any aggression against the U.S.
Why did America fight two wars against the Brits to turn around and do their Empire for them? Cheap oil and CIA drugs are not worth the shattered lives of our enlisted men and women nor the lives of innocent families in third world countries. Americans must remember our roots!
Our Founding Fathers believed that monarchy and dictatorship were wrong anytime and any place. They wanted "friendship and trade with all nations, entangling alliances with none". American voters must get our nation out of the dictator installation and maintenance business.
The British voter, too, should ditch constitutional monarchy and the monarch, and replace it with democracy and representative government.
Peace in our time,
www.fff.org
3 HOURS IN BITS & PIECES (Poetry) - 1/17/2005 2:35:49 AM
Very creative style and presentation
Masood
3 HOURS IN BITS & PIECES (Poetry) - 7/5/2004 10:35:58 AM
hahahaha i know it really isn't a laughing matter
but i can say i've been there *sorta
enjoy your rant!!!
3 HOURS IN BITS & PIECES (Poetry) - 7/2/2004 12:37:50 PM
qbbbbbbbbbb!!!! kaisa haiii :)
well i always knew u rocked. i'm glad u r now getting better at expressing ur feelings.
and i know u hate studying, but pay attn in class for once.. :D
3 HOURS IN BITS & PIECES (Poetry) - 7/1/2004 4:51:33 AM
Fantastic,I really enjoyed this one especially the last two lines,i had to smile.
Best wishes
from
kay
3 HOURS IN BITS & PIECES (Poetry) - 7/1/2004 4:19:48 AM
HAHAHA! LOL! This reminds me of one terrible experience with one of the teachers, who insisted on teaching everyone from the very basic. And when I say "Basic", it was really VERY BASIC!!!!!
She taught us what keys are supposed to do what on the keyboard!!!!!...like the keyboard didn't exist until she stepped into the class!!!!!
So consider yourself lucky already.
May Lu a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
It's dirty here. (Poetry) - 2/16/2004 9:35:39 PM
Now I'd love to see a poem that shows the good half of the world. We really do exist. Lots of power from way down, and the law of the jungle will not win.
Love, Qamar, is the cleanser that ALWAYS wins. Just hang in there and make a difference with your strengths.
blessin's,
cynth'ya lewis reed
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 6/11/2003 8:55:43 AM
Anything written on mother can only be an understatement. A very nice effort. Maybe you could look up Varanasi Rao(author)'s "The Mother"
It's dirty here. (Poetry) - 4/25/2003 8:35:25 AM
too fucking good.
It's dirty here. (Poetry) - 4/25/2003 7:48:25 AM
well buddy looks like somebody is pissed :). But a very good way of expressing ur most inner thoughts ;) KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
It's dirty here. (Poetry) - 4/24/2003 6:26:31 PM
Albeit there are many colorful metaphors used here, but what a great summation this is!
~Nikki~
It's dirty here. (Poetry) - 4/24/2003 2:00:34 PM
That about sums it up :( ... well penned thou some may coment on the language .. J & J
It's dirty here. (Poetry) - 4/24/2003 1:50:05 PM
I am with you on this.... Great expresion... Let it out.. many are living this EVERYDAY! A+
Erica
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 4/19/2003 12:58:42 PM
What a very moving write.
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 4/11/2003 1:09:37 AM
Very sad, and beautiful and haunting...
~Shezz
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 10:14:33 PM
Nice flow and very visional
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/17/2003 7:58:23 PM
Lulllllllu that was sooooo sweet. if u were here right now i would give you ah big huggy. and may you ami jaan get the best in the here-after inshallah
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 9:20:40 AM
It is interesting to notice that all of your poems represent your feelings and love for your mother. This is a great tribute to any mother. Your love for your mother is outstanding. Well done.
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/3/2003 9:04:12 AM
qamar, this is outstanding! well done! love, your friend, karen lynn in texas. (((HUGS))) to you, qamar! :)
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/3/2003 2:30:38 AM
Qamar,
This is excellent.
Peg
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/2/2003 11:22:03 PM
Sometimes we must have faith. Excellent.
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/2/2003 10:02:18 PM
you project into a land few wander... well done!
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/2/2003 9:59:00 PM
doggy thats hot as shit, but i didnt love u i would say ur GAY!!, ahahah, joking. Its off the hook nigga...
A dieing wish! (Poetry) - 3/2/2003 9:51:56 PM
Woh qamar! This is deep...sad... wow i dunno what to say...I hope things just get easier for you...Inshallah everything will be fine
Ma... (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 3:02:08 PM
A lovely poem full of longing. Your mother must have been very special.
Chrissie
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 12/5/2002 2:22:55 PM
this is an excellent first poem Qamar, your friend Masarat Daud seems to have said it all very eloquently, thank you for sharing this...
steve.
Divine Love For MOM (Poetry) - 9/11/2002 5:11:43 AM
What a marvelous write.
Afrika
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/29/2002 12:36:24 AM
(((((((((((((((((HUGS)))))))))))))))
JC xoxoxoxo PS. Masarat is a sweetie :)
Divine Love For MOM (Poetry) - 8/29/2002 12:34:48 AM
This is so beautiful. I lost my Mother too and sometimes think that she's just waiting for me to come to her. I wish you all the best. JC xoxoxo
Divine Love For MOM (Poetry) - 8/28/2002 10:12:54 AM
Hey, Qamar! What a beautiful tribute to your mother! Super write, my friend!!
Love, and ((HUGS)), your friend, Karen Lynn.
Divine Love For MOM (Poetry) - 8/28/2002 8:11:08 AM
Now I feel that poetry is the best way to show one’s emotions, sentiments and feelings.
You are perfect in this field.
This poem is very impressible and sensitive.
After reading this poem I am feeling, as I will cry…
No doubt mother is the valuable and precious gift from god.
God Bless You.
Divine Love For MOM (Poetry) - 8/28/2002 6:41:41 AM
Beautiful...my heart goes out to you. There is not a day that goes by in which I do not miss my mother.
Divine Love For MOM (Poetry) - 8/28/2002 1:16:48 AM
This was very beautiful and touching Qb. You need to tap on your feelings and continue writing. Excellent write!
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/26/2002 12:14:05 PM
Excellent writing. What a beautiful tribute to your Mom.
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/17/2002 9:16:35 PM
awwwwwwwwwwwwwww sooooooo sweet!!! luvely poem Qamar!!! that is soo sweet and keep on writing mr. poet! u have a talent in all these story writing/poetry stuff, good luck in all that you do... n God Blesssss.........
luvz,
deepa
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/17/2002 1:32:04 PM
Superb...I must say this is an excellent tribute to (OUR) MOTHER.
Your poem shows great love, passion and attachment with your mother.
I am proud of you and I appreciate Masrat Daud too, both of done great Job.
WELL DONE!!!
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/14/2002 10:16:39 AM
wow
this is wonderful
true heart stuff enjoyed
josie
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/14/2002 9:30:53 AM
excellent...your mother would have been so proud. :) (((HUGS))) and love, karla. :) i look forward to more of your work, including poetry. :)
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/14/2002 9:20:58 AM
bravo, qamar!! you did absolutely super for your first attempt at writing poetry!! this is absolutely beautiful!! love, your friend, karen lynn. ((HUGS))
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/14/2002 4:07:09 AM
This was poignant...what a beautiful tribute to a mother. I have a son too and this touches me a lot. You have a lot of talent Qamar and you should tap it. I am glad your friends are helping you to do it. Excellent.
A Little Thank You To MOM (Poetry) - 8/14/2002 1:09:59 AM
Qb, this is brilliant. Yes I mean it. I want you to believe in yourself and understand that poetry is only an art of expression. As a first attempt (or maybe second lolll)...this is much better than what many of us write. At least, it's much better than what I wrote! Keep it going. Just remember that...your poetry will be worth reading only if it's honest and honesty comes from your heart.
Looking forward to more of your written work - especially poems! Take care and oh yes - Excellent write.
