Life in a village that doesn't have the latest high-tech gadgets.
Raven Rocksong lulls in repose till sunlight tickles her face. Eyelashes open; the glare overloads her retinas. She bolts upright, kicks blankets aside and touches cold cedar floorboards. Goose bumps appear on bare skin... READ ON, OPEN PDF.
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The vivid details of your story encapsulate your knowledge of Native Americans of the Northwest. You use this to your advantage through believable characters and the dilemmas the younger generation face straddling the line of honoring their culture and the lure of the modern world.
Your writing is fascinating and your knowledge of Northwest Pacific Indian lore is very instructional. I did catch some strange anomalies like the computers in 2076 being very similar to computers in 2015 as well as some other so-called technology that seems to be very similar to our time rather than that future time. For example, the game that Edgar and Raven plays seems to be more of the 20th century rather than the 21st.
I didn't know that the Pacific Northwest had such a rich fauna and flora for hunting and gathering as you describe. It reads like a Garden of Eden. And I would agree that the old ways, practiced for thousands of years, will probably outlive the new that are constantly changing.
Finally, this didn't appear to be a short story, but rather a chapter from a book.
A novel about a family during World War II, set on the homefront in Springield, Mass., and in the South Pacific. The book focuses on four characters and how their lives were affected and changed during the war years.
Shanghai Escapist grabs the faint-of-heart right from the get-go and serves up an ultimatum: What would you do if caught in the same circumstances? From the opening scene, the reader is tossed into the maze of daily intrigue as it existed in 1960s-70
