I have to go with C. Lee McKenzie on this one when I say this, you got a strong write here. You should make this one at least about three pages longer. Expand the paragraphs, it is very descriptive but you need to make them a little longer. It is a very human story, and that is the kind I seem to relate to in the sense of the way it is written. Very relatable characters with this one.
Well, I like it. It's a piece of the bigger story--a slice out of a day on duty. Have you considered putting it into a larger context? Say a novella with a diary entry format. It is most assuredly true that when you write about what you know or love, the writing is strong.
The Confliction - Dragoneer Saga III, is the thrilling conclusion to the "Full Confliction"
cycle of Dragoneer Saga books. In this episode, The Dragoneers face the Sarax that were loosed
in Book II - Cold Hearted Son of a Witch, as well as
Is Justice Finally Overcoming the Ford Valley Corruption?
Judge Sherman Ford, the patriarch of the Ford family is continuing to control and corrupt Ford County. The newly elected sheriff, Todd Mercer, and friends are slowly taking control
