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Talkin' to the Smoke
By Odin odin@aflx.com
Last edited: Saturday, June 15, 2019
This short story is rated "G" by the Author.
       
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A simple country-allegory look at relationships with some flashfiction. (Image by Patricia Overmayer)

 

Talkin’ to the Smoke

 

The three of them sat around the camp fire.  It was shaman time, and well...Ma and Pa were dead tired, y'know, so the kid threw on another log, gazed at the smoke rising and started to grin.

 

"What y'all got wigglin' there, boy?"

The boy let his grin wiggle some more, then, "Sometimes, relationships are more about how long you can stay tired, than about feeling anything akin to being energized, you know?"

 

"What you talkin' ‘bout, boy?" Ma said softly.

 

"Just, that whether you're the guy or the gal, it's kinda like talkin' to smoke...tryin' to make it work, that is."  He watched the smoke disappear up in the bows of the pines.

 

"That ain't no story, boy," Pa grunted.

 

"Ever think about what keeps a mule goin', Pa?  He don't like to plow, but he likes carrots.  So you hang a carrot out there in front of him, you know, big stick roped round its neck, pokin' out there between his ears."

 

"That's sweet, dear," Ma said with a proud smile. 

 

"So, anyway, the mule gets exhausted without the carrot.  Mule with a carrot...now right there, y'all got yourself a relationship, ‘cause with a carrot, mule spends a long time bein' tired, right?"

 

Pa looked over at Ma.  "Boy's turnin' into some kind of weird, eh?"

 

The boy continued to watch the curling gray rising from the fire.  "Relationships...like talkin' to smoke."

 


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Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on June 15, 2019
The futile life that so many, probably Pa and Ma, live without ever knowing it. Chasing that carrot all their lives would never realizing much from it except aching bones. I was always told the best way to prolong your life was to work smart and not hard. So many do it the other way around.

A very good story with a profound lesson.

Ron

Reviewed by Ruan Mills
Reviewed on June 15, 2019
"with a carrot, mule spends a long time bein' tired, right?"
Oh my goodness ...I hear that!
R x