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The Final Count
By Odin odin@aflx.com
Last edited: Monday, April 12, 2021
This short story is rated "G" by the Author.
       
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Pugilists live a make-or-break life. Few fulfill their dreams. I often wonder, “Where are they now?” A flash fiction story. (Image by pinterest)


 

The Final Count

As a pugilist, he thought he knew corners.
After all,
He’d stumbled into,
Been backed into,
More than his share of corners.

This was different.

He lay in bed
Fingering his glasses.
Should he wear them?
Leave them?
Did it matter?

His eyes dropped from the ceiling
To the backlit corner window.
Green and red neon rolled its pattern outside.

From beneath a flapping window shade,
Sticky air carried the sound of his only friend,
A gimpy-legged pigeon always awkwardly prancing and cooing
From the 10th floor ledge.

Eyes back to the ceiling.

So many fights.

So many bells now only in the distance.

In all his memories,
He’d never had to consider a corner this ominous,

But tonight...

Tonight he was up against a real contender,
A massive force never faced before,
And there was nowhere to run.

He stood and stepped forward to the ledge—the center ring.

The mammoth shadow of his past,
The one his fists could never hit,
The one who would force him into the ropes someday
And deliver the blow a long time coming.
Some people called it
“The forever-darkness-without-light knockout.”

He was okay with his decision.
He was ready

Until...

Until that beat up warrior,
Like an ever faithful sparring partner,
Had to stand there on its gimpy leg,
Stare at him with its only good eye,
And coo his encouragement again.

He leaned down for a final touch of its feathers.
"Tough love doesn’t come cheap I guess, eh?"
“Care to join me…just for a couple of seconds?”

As the concrete-mat rushed up at him, all the bells faded behind,
but not the simple cooing echo of his friend.

 

 

 

 


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Reviewed by Diana Legun
Reviewed on October 15, 2021
First off I had to look up pugilist. This was a hefty, succinct story. It had me guessing why he hedged on glasses or no glasses. So there was suspense right there. Then the idea of a two-fer, his avian friend, equally ready to be done. Your use of unique ways to flavor the scene is always intriguing. . . one of your poems from way back was about a rusty sign hanging from some New York shop, and your description of the sound of that sign wagging in the wind was so effective. Here it is the traffic lights rolling their pattern outside the window. And I really like “The mammoth shadow of his past,/ the one his fists could never hit,…”. ~~ djl

Reviewed by E Phillips
Reviewed on April 28, 2021
I had two fights in the ring. I did not want either of them.
The first was with a powerful guy who was in training for the Olympic try-outs. He knocked me silly, until he started to razz me. I broke his jaw with one punch. The second was against a smaller person who acted more like a girl. He nailed me between the eyes. I woke up about 5 minutes later. He was long gone.

Reviewed by Stephen Pollard
Reviewed on April 23, 2021
In boxing, every opponent is tough and the punishment of being hit upon with might blows especially to the head pile up and eventually take their toll, no matter how many victories one has in the boxing ring, no matter whether it was Dick Tiger, Sugar Ray Leonard, Sweet Pea Whitaker, Joe Louis, Joe Frazier or George Foreman.

Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on April 13, 2021
A really poignant review of so many pugilists that ended their life in nothing but injuries suffered along the way, including Mohammed Ali.

You reminded me of The Boxer by Paul Simon. One of the most poignant songs out there that stands in the shadow of Simon and Garfunkel's many hits.

My father was in the Golden Gloves in the late 30s. He was small as a teenager so probably fought in the featherweight category until he grew, perhaps because of the regimen, unlike his older brother who didn't, but died a short man last week 15 days short of 102 still only 5' 2", to 5'11" and 180 pounds. He loved watching boxing but never talked about his own. He had hearing loss that may have been caused by his cauliflower ears. He said he had ruptured eardrums that kept him out of service in World War II. Thank goodness.

Ron