Category:  Action/Thriller Publisher: KEITH PUBLICATIONS Type: Fiction Can an unborn baby, ripped from its mother’s womb, live to seek its mother and would that mother be aware that her baby is alive? Joe Galitti was just a cop on the streets of Chicago when he suddenly finds himself a detective reporting to the Cook County sheriff’s office. His task is to stop a five year rash of brutal murders of young, pregnant girls whose unborn babies were ripped from them before they were killed. As a result of Joe’s efforts, Marie Spencer, the seventh girl attacked, survives even though her unborn baby is taken. After recovering from her brutal attack, Marie becomes aware, she senses, she knows that somewhere, somehow, in some thing, in some laboratory, her baby, whose name would have been Jamie, is alive and calling to her. Marie Spencer is determined to find her baby. She is determined to get her Jamie. Excerpt Can an unborn baby, ripped from its mother’s womb, live to seek its mother and would that mother be aware that her baby is alive? Six young pregnant girls are murdered when their unborn baby is brutally ripped from their womb. But the seventh young girl lives. As a result of detective Joe Galetti efforts, Marie Spencer, the seventh girl attacked, survives even though her unborn baby is taken. While recovering from her attack, Galetti and Marie fall in love. The strength of their love completely overcomes the physical and psychological damage done to Marie. After recovering from her brutal attack, with the help of psychologist Stephen LeBeau, who is ultimately murdered because of his involvement, Marie becomes aware, she senses, she knows that somewhere, somehow, in some thing, in some laboratory, her baby, whose name would have been Jamie, is alive and calling to her. Marie Spencer is determined to find her baby. She is determined to get her Jamie. Confronting her attacker face to face she does find her Jamie 7. SOON TO BE PUBLISHED AS AN ebook BY KEITH PUBLICATIONS

FROM FELLOW AUTHOR
A chilling book and very well written. My wife is also asharing the read and it is her suggestion that I back you and help support your book. So, backed you are!! At times I also backed your other books - I hope my backing was of some help to you. I just had 3 days where I was static at 203 until someone backed me and I moved again. If you have a moment would you please glance at a few pages of BLINDFOLD. Jack Stirling

FROM FELLOW AUTHOR
Dear Joe -

I'm supporting your book for several reasons, the first of which is that you are one more pro-life voice, crying in the wilderness. For this same reason, however, I would appreciate it if our discussion of this topic be confined to messages and not put in the commentary. I don't want to discourage anyone from reading our books.

I'm also supporting your work because it conveys immense passion in chilling, graphic, heart-rending detail.

Having said that, I'm going to add something that others have already alluded to in their comments. I would put it this way:

If you can harness your passion, the potential for the success of this book will increase exponentially.

Specifically in light of your great passion, I believe you would be especially well-advised to learn from the example of James Patterson, who has sold more books than "Carter has liver pills," as my mother used to say.

The Patterson approach is simple: short sentences. short paragraphs. short chapters. Tighter, tighter, tighter. Quicker, quicker, quicker.

This advice can help everyone to one degree or another, including me, but I think it would be especially helpful to you.

May the peace of Christ forever reign in your heart.

Sincerely,

Patrick

FROM FELLOW AUTHOR
Hello there Joe. Finally had some time to read your story. I read your chapter 1 and chapter 20 and will leave a couple comments here.

I liked the characters and I think the scenario is one that will be macabre enough and yet simple enough to engage the reader. I noticed a couple of things - in chapter 1 you have a string of "he"s that start paragraphs. Give your chapters a quick scan and see if you have repetitive sentence structure like that - it could cause the reader to scan rather than read. I look at paragraph starts to see if I have unconscious patterns.

In chapter 20 - beware the exclaimation point. Yes the dialogue is tense, but don't overuse. The chapter itself felt very loud to me - that could be offputting. Also you have a couple of body language repeats (he looked confused, Steven looked confused). One technique I use is to read the chapter backwards one paragraph at a time - that way I look at how the words flow, rather than getting caught up in the plot.

Good luck with this.