I love your style-however, the scansion could be tickled up a little. If you 'count the beats' as you read the lines, it can help alot.
This is in no way a stick to beat your poem with, no! The story, the sentiment and the flow of thoughts going into this piece are very nice indeed. And another poet is born.
Enchanted Desire, published by The Wild Rose Press, tells the story of a beautiful young college student, Shanna, who is looking for a fresh start and a way out of a bad relationship. She meets and falls in love with Kenny, a sexy 6 foot 8 Native Ame
This is in no way a stick to beat your poem with, no! The story, the sentiment and the flow of thoughts going into this piece are very nice indeed. And another poet is born.