. . .and softly, you kiss me.
Hold me closer,
tell me that everything will be alright,
and that life
will go on.
You whisper comfort to me,
as I fight to believe
that dreams really can come true .
But Im losing you. . .
And soon I'll wake up.
And I wont find you beside me.
And it will take me a moment to die
as I begin to understand,
that none of it was real.
And that I never had you.
And i'll just have to keep telling myself
that it will get better.
That i'll just have to breathe,
let the pain settle in,
and try to keep on living
until theres nothing left to give
inside me.
The punctuation is correct, but I appreciate your concern. The line says "you whisper comfort to me", and that is correct, although your suggestion is grammatically feasible as well (if I were to lose the "to"). thanks again, and please keep reviewing. J-
S1 L6: You[r] whisper comfort[s] me (suggestion). Just a few capitolisation errors and basic grammar just to let ya know ;)
The title was highly appealing and straight away I wanted to read your piece as soon as possible. The poetry is just as fitting to the title. Great work Jason!
Warm Love and Happy New Year,
*- Brittany -*
(My suggestions and grammatical analysis are only suggestions and not at all to be taken as rude.)
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The punctuation is correct, but I appreciate your concern. The line says "you whisper comfort to me", and that is correct, although your suggestion is grammatically feasible as well (if I were to lose the "to"). thanks again, and please keep reviewing. J-
The title was highly appealing and straight away I wanted to read your piece as soon as possible. The poetry is just as fitting to the title. Great work Jason!
Warm Love and Happy New Year,
*- Brittany -*
(My suggestions and grammatical analysis are only suggestions and not at all to be taken as rude.)
Nikki