As the moment of desire comes upon us,
the touch of you lips sends chills all over.
I feel your desire as I touch your skin,
knowing you feel the same as I do.
As the passion grows I ask one thing,
Do you love me as I do you?
He came closer and whisperd to me,
more than all the water in the sea..
Under the candle light we made love,
passionatly we feel the love between us,
He whispers I love you in my ear,
thats the only sound I could here.
Now we lay in loves glowing light,
we look at each other with gleem,.
Now that we discovered love,
lets go have breakfast my turtle dove.
Nice write, but why the different tenses? Sorry, I couldn't help but noticing there were both present and past tense in this poem, I was just wondering whether there was a special reason for using different tenses in one poem.
Sandie Angel :o)
Reviewed by Muhammad Ali Panhwar (Reader)
Reviewed on January 4, 2003
These words not just describe your inner feelings rather they took me in my Past. Great Write...
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Now we lay in loves glowing light,
we look at each other with gleem,.
Now that we discovered love,
lets go have breakfast my turtle dove.
A little humor never hurt any one"
So true good write.
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Sandie Angel :o)