On Sunday, she educated my lips On how to give her the perfect kiss
On Monday, she granted me the honor Of calling her my sweetie boo
On Tuesday, she introduced Her love to my heart
On Wednesday, she sit atop my heart And admired how beautiful It looked while robed in her love
On Thursday, she injected me With a potent dose Of her climatic passion And refused to help me As I overdosed on her ecstasy
On Friday, peacefully she slept As I tied my penny loafers With the ribbons of her sorrows Then turned and walked away With her sadness
On Saturday, barefooted She chased me down On the leafy fields of October And wrote I love you Across my eyes Using her teardrops And the depth of her love I felt in her tears As slowly they walked down my eyes And splashed forever in my soul
You continue to amaze me, my friend!! You just keep getting better and better. This is not just stunning work but touches that tender side within that wishes they had that kind of love. Your an amazing man and your wife a very lucky lady!
Aaaaay, karumba! You sure do know how to melt a woman's heart, don't 'cha? Loved this:
"As I tied my penny loafers
With the ribbons of her sorrows
Then turned and walked away
With her sadness"
"And the deepness of her love"
(Might this read a bit better? [And in the depth of her love] Just a thought.)
Lovely write, Handsum Hart; love the form and style of such! Enjoyed~ (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on January 20, 2004
Hey Handsum...sounds like a wonderful week to me..I just cannot get over how you write...it is unique and creative and so YOU.....How about a book....have you thought of it....Lovely work again...Love your lines...tears wrote I love you across my eyes....WOW...love this..and where ever do you find these gorgeous gals....LOL....floria
Psychic wiccan Deja Hamilton pulls shapeshifter Lincoln McCabe from the lake, and the two form an alliance against the covetous older brother who wants Lincoln dead.
Once again, you have delved into the essence of love and come up with a winner!
~Rose~
~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~
Ves *smile*
(((((hugs to you both)))))
♫ Jackie
Very unique conception, and curious reading.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
so beautiful
~Chrissie
"As I tied my penny loafers
With the ribbons of her sorrows
Then turned and walked away
With her sadness"
"And the deepness of her love"
(Might this read a bit better? [And in the depth of her love] Just a thought.)
Wonderful, as always, Handsum! Thank you.
Jenni
Reindeer
Very romantic! Keep going!
Thanks for your reviews!
Taylor
Gina
Love Tinka
sparkly-eyed charmer. I would like to meet
the woman who inspired such verse...