I tried to catch a falling raindrop.
Instead a black bird landed on my tongue.
I knew that he was bad luck.
Stammering, his voice was changing,
when he asked me to come along
Where, is it that you wish to take me
I inquired uncomfortably.
Just over to the lush meadow near the trees.
Ah, the meadow, yes,
yes ,I’d like to go.
Just as quickly as he landed
he flew right off my tongue.
Trying to keep up was tricky.
He became a very small black dot in the sky.
Follow, I must. Summoning to me, I ran because
curiosity is my name.
Arriving was sweet
Butterflies and fairies,
were dancing through the trees.
A scent of flowers wafted universally.
There were toads on lily pads lazily
adrift. Ribbit, ribbit, ribbit
they did sing, a
most sacred lullaby.
Approaching my view was a tiny man
a crooked three cornered hat, atop his head,
with brown knee length pants.
A snug vest at his waist, pointy shoes and
decorative digits covered in gems.
He clutched a bag with an emerald drawstring.
Treasures and pleasures were sure to be within.
He asked, surely you know what’s inside?
I couldn’t help but notice how his sparkles
blinded and lured at the same time.
Of course I do, let’s unwrap your goodie-bag.
Fingers shaking, animation, domination
and a feeling of dread as I pulled
the cord; the container fell, revealing all.
I glanced at the man and saw the sneer on
his distorted face.
Fixed canary eyes looked at me
as the goblins flew passed my face.
I hadn’t noticed the pointed teeth,
due to his blinding light. Or the
smell of sulfur that reeked from every pore.
The black bird had cleverly placed
A spell on my senses,
the day that he landed on my tongue.
I reviewed this a long time ago - I will avoid doing the same joke by not doing a joke. Actually I have to review your book for PLT - to go with the interview, so you are getting lots of attention this week.
OOOH my a bit scary and well, shivery!! good write with Halloween just around the corner. Will listen to your advice and avoid Black Birds!!! love ya Sandi
Bedazzled and bedouzould!
Just the poem to see through the mist and dark evenings.
I must watch out.
Love
Miller
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on October 7, 2007
Oh yes, I know these black birds in the human form now.
I stay clear of such humans.
An E.A. Poe is among us....
Thanks for your review Janny.
With love,
Ron
Tis been awhile since I last heard you but so well worth the wait."trickery thy name is evil", a great and intriguing write.PLB&G for caring and sharing. Luvit, Mikii
This is good work, you write an interesting view of the trickery and evil of the world...whether within fantasy or within reality the blackness of spells and deceit can ...Bedazzle...the mind...
An Alice in Wonderland kind of tale, but with cautionary message: you kept me enthralled from the beginning (eww, gotta watch those blackbirds landing on the tongue) to the ending stanza's warning--well done! Really enjoyed this one, so much so, I'm saving it! A keeper.
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This is soooo good. Wonderful imageries and well-described. I enjoyed this!!!
Sandie May Angel :o)
Bedazzled and bedouzould!
Just the poem to see through the mist and dark evenings.
I must watch out.
Love
Miller
I stay clear of such humans.
An E.A. Poe is among us....
Thanks for your review Janny.
With love,
Ron
nice work.....
Art Sun...
An Alice in Wonderland kind of tale, but with cautionary message: you kept me enthralled from the beginning (eww, gotta watch those blackbirds landing on the tongue) to the ending stanza's warning--well done! Really enjoyed this one, so much so, I'm saving it! A keeper.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
CJ
(((HUGS))) and much love from Burleson, your Tx. "neighbor", Karen Lynn. :)