by Gracie C. McKeever (c) 12/96
It begins as an urge
a notion of pleasure
that sends you sprinting
desperate for your lover
Your dry spell will end
Ideas germinate, nature gestates
In the dark a dance of creation is begun
The premise is your foreplay
it caresses and fondles
and teases your sleep
with maybes and possibles
Is consummation on the horizon?
With a burst of devotion
you flex muscles
limp from disuse
fondle flesh
feel qualities
you forgot you once knew
Inside out upside down
you drive, push, juggle
and titillate yourself
visions of a climax muddled
Your dance with creation is in full swing
and soon the labor will truly begin
Pressing shoving thrusting for release
your baby makes its way into the world
a raw breathing beast
For better or worse
you have just given birth
Now begins the hard part
making life's decisions
You go back to your lover
and begin your revisions
Gracie McKeever
I find it very interesting, one of its particularities being the physical aspect of love and giving birth. Biological clocks, instincts, emotions, all are expressed together in the form of a choreography, which explains the title. To this effect, your vocabulary is well chosen.
And you show this as having a continuity, being made of cycles, but also of changes and evolution, at least this is the impression I get from the end.
Thanks for a good poem,
Axilea
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