I vividly remember a song from long ago
composed by the sweat of heaving bodies
in the dim light of a blowing March wind
and yet the forgotten day was like night
and the night was an impotent forest
that mumbled something in its shadows
You peeled my skin with saddened eyes
and touched me with a foreign accent
while I sat trembling at the end of the bed
where you blindfolded me with promises
The vivid corners of your lust collected me
leaving my soul in a half-bleached vacuum
The morning is Tang in lead crystal chalice
each facet cut like a prism out of the box
diffusing dreams in a three dimensional ray
that unfolded upon the deep blue sheets
and saturated us in those unworldly colors
and permeated us despite our fatigued souls
Those vivid corners continue to gather dust
and cobwebs from the consistent neglect
and I begin to choke as I dwell in the memory
of something that we once shared long ago
for time has made me forget the evil in you
Yet I can still remember the axis of your smile
This magnificent poem, "Vivid Corners" brings a consistent imagery and rhythm.
I have enjoyed reading a true poem filled with live feelings of memories depicted with an excellent lexicon. "Vivid Corners" is an enriching poetical WRITING.
I thank You, Inspired Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Reviewed by Andre Bendavi Benyehu (Reader)
Reviewed on September 6, 2003
This magnificent poem, "Vivid Corners" brings a consistent imagery and rhythm.
I have enjoyed reading a true poem filled with live feelings of memories depicted with an excellent lexicon. "Vivid Corners" is an enriching poetical WRITING.
Oooooo Amor such a romantic piece with a touch of sad vulnerability at the end the so expertisely haunts...
"Those vivid corners continue to gather dust
and cobwebs from the consistent neglect
and I begin to choke as I dwell in the memory
of something that we once shared long ago
for time has made me forget the evil in you
Yet I can still remember the axis of your smile"
AWESOME, PASSIONATE AND HAUNTING...NOW THIS IS POETRY!!!!
~Nikki~
A wonderful romantic poem, all the more romantic for disclosing the poet's own vulnerability in love, being at the mercy of a predatory lover. This poem is brave as well as eloquent... thanks for sharing it with us here, Amor.
"...The morning is Tang in lead crystal chalice
each facet cut like a prism out of the box
diffusing dreams in a three dimensional ray
that unfolded upon the deep blue sheets..."
THAT is indeed poetry!
Reviewed by T. Emilie Dybevik (Reader)
Reviewed on September 3, 2003
NOW THIS is POETRY!!!!!!!! WOOOOO HOOO! I MISSED reading stuff like this! I love your tender mind! Very sultry, tactful and it was appreciated for all of the good poetry that it is!!! YOU KNOW what you were doing when you wrote this! Bleeding human emotions...you tap into place Amor! And YOOOOOOOu know it!
Vivid corners was vivid indeed.
I concur with those lines, you peeled my skin
with saddened eyes and touched me with a
foreign accent..., blew my mind. Excellent
write.
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on September 2, 2003
I love the imagery you use in your writes. Great write!
Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
Reviewed on September 2, 2003
You peeled my skin with saddened eyes <-----Ohhhhh Lordy......that is beauty personified.....You are amazing......ty, Dani
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This magnificent poem, "Vivid Corners" brings a consistent imagery and rhythm.
I have enjoyed reading a true poem filled with live feelings of memories depicted with an excellent lexicon. "Vivid Corners" is an enriching poetical WRITING.
I thank You, Inspired Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
I have enjoyed reading a true poem filled with live feelings of memories depicted with an excellent lexicon. "Vivid Corners" is an enriching poetical WRITING.
I thank You, Inspired Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Jenni
"Those vivid corners continue to gather dust
and cobwebs from the consistent neglect
and I begin to choke as I dwell in the memory
of something that we once shared long ago
for time has made me forget the evil in you
Yet I can still remember the axis of your smile"
AWESOME, PASSIONATE AND HAUNTING...NOW THIS IS POETRY!!!!
~Nikki~
Sara.
each facet cut like a prism out of the box
diffusing dreams in a three dimensional ray
that unfolded upon the deep blue sheets..."
THAT is indeed poetry!
Thank you... to my library this goes!
Emilie
leaving my soul in a half-bleached vacuum"
Great imagery, Amor. Excellent!
--Karissa
~Chrissie
missed you!!
Love Tinka
enjoyed the read
"diffusing dreams in a three dimensional ray
that unfolded upon the deep blue sheets"
The twist at the end caught me off guard.
~Jackie~
Reindeer
I concur with those lines, you peeled my skin
with saddened eyes and touched me with a
foreign accent..., blew my mind. Excellent
write.
May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
this is really good.
LM