Between the gaps of the palm fronds,
I took your measure.
Estimated the hands-length
from shoulder-to-shoulder,
lingered over the knot of muscle,
trailed your spine with a phantom fingernail,
and hungrily traced your lips with my tongue.
I took your measure,
liking what I saw.
Behind the screen of blue smoke,
by the flicker of potted torches,
I listened as you spoke,
inserting an accent
because I wanted you to have one;
you should have one.
The depth in your eyes,
so very dark,
calls to my soul in island patois
and drums pound rhythms
to match my heady exhalations.
Beyond the shadows of black tie dancers,
I gauged your motions.
Every languid movement
lionesque—a promise
of sleep-inducing climax.
You never stumbled,
never faltered,
never once
hesitated
and I heard the roar
you would bring
to the dark
after the last notes had played.
Liking what I saw,
I walked away, leaving you nameless ...
until now.
Pat this poem would make anyone roar, lion, man, mouse or flea. Anyone looking to the sky for his soul. And please tell all these other guys to lay off. I spotted you first. Your magnificence always shines through. Hugs Bill
p.s. Happy Easter Lady Patricia
Pat this is one of your best...remarkable
writing....powerful ... just superb....
you always knock me over with your writing..
But this one is special...floria
Damn Ted! Sorry so-and-so. Stole MY thunder. Said what I wanted to say. Well, let me just opine with, You, dear, are in a class all alone. Uh, huh. You are atop the literary mountain. You are Wonder Woman of wordly pursuits. Damn Ted!
Reviewed by Ted Sheridan (Reader)
Reviewed on April 7, 2004
I nearly missed this because of your name change. P., Eileen is right when she says you should rule. Reading one of your poems is one of the most pleasurable things I could do in life. Each and every time I am inspired as well as awed by your creations.
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Reviewed on April 6, 2004
This is excellent..... Love the last stanza perfection.
Reviewed by ***** ********* (Reader)
Reviewed on April 6, 2004
Patricia, this is FANTASTIC! This write has so many great descriptions, so many outstanding metaphors, and possesses such a wry and self-assured voice... you can actually "hear" these thoughts flow through the protagonist's mind!
Love this bit:
"Beyond the shadows of black tie dancers,
I gauged your motions.
Every languid movement
lionesque—a promise
of sleep-inducing climax."
Love is universal and not limited to the most perfect among us. In this collection of romantic short stories and poetry, love comes to those who are decidedly imperfect, who possess very real human flaws, scars, and challenges. Awaiting us as we are.
"traced your lips with my tongue."
Wow, very hot...
p.s. Happy Easter Lady Patricia
Well done!
john+
this is and outstanding
and profound piece
Excellent write
William
Reindeer
writing....powerful ... just superb....
you always knock me over with your writing..
But this one is special...floria
Love this bit:
"Beyond the shadows of black tie dancers,
I gauged your motions.
Every languid movement
lionesque—a promise
of sleep-inducing climax."
Yas...oh yas. A superb write!
With such command you should rule the oceans!;-)