I like this. It has a lot of minor problems with tenses, etc., but I like the idea. You need an "ed" here:
The consecrate knight of burnished bronze
on mighty steed off he rides
no longer searching for his maiden fair
and a "d" here:
He froths in tears of destined dismay
There are some awkward lines here, but they really don't detract from the poem that much. I think you have a talent for writing, but need to brush up on a few things. Good job over all.
Five years have passed. The sequel to the award-winning Chapel of Eternal Love, this book revisits the same couples in the first book, and where the lives have taken them since they left the altar at The Chapel of Eternal Love
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The consecrate knight of burnished bronze
on mighty steed off he rides
no longer searching for his maiden fair
and a "d" here:
He froths in tears of destined dismay
There are some awkward lines here, but they really don't detract from the poem that much. I think you have a talent for writing, but need to brush up on a few things. Good job over all.
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