Life beigns with love, And ceases when the soul attains apathetic wonder. It is at this point that we become Spiritually dead. Instead we just mill around and about In a state of catatonia. Throughout our lives We fight struggle and strive To triumph in the battle of the psyche. However what is sacrificed? What is the risk? The reward? Some ask the timeless question Is it truly worth it? Is it worth risking our lives, Our loves Our lusts? If one must risk everything With the potential of gaining absolute true love Then I dare say it is worth risking Everything! For true love posseses more utility Than all the material wealth in the galaxy. And it can be said True love is the most prized treasure In the multiverse. As it is the richest commodity in the realm. Becoming even more rare Than a lovely rose standing unfaltered Amidst a battleground of despair. Thus I say this Should you ever find Or even stumble upon love, Grab on tight with both hands And never allow it to slip away. Or else you may lose it Forever..
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Reviews of "The Struggle of Life"
Reviewed by Dan Summerfield (Reader)
Reviewed on January 13, 2004
Chris;
Please understand these reviews of mine are not picking on you. I just happened to stumble upon one of your works and liked some of what I saw. These are merely analyses of words you have placed here for public consumption and comment. I invite you to look at some of mine and be as critical as you please. Critical dialogue is necessary to the writing process.
The last six lines are a self contained poem that tells me everything I need to know of you as a writer. The rest is poetic hyperbole.
For instance, "Life begins with love," is a lovely thought, but not necessarily true. If life, as implied, begins at the moment of conception, many lives have begun with mere lust, not love.
"True love is the most treasured prize in the multiverse"? Tell that to the ghost of Hermann Goering who looted most of Europe to gain the art he so loved. Tell that to the corporate executives of Enron, all married to women they presumably love deeply.
Think through what you write before posting it on AD. Tell me in clear, precise verse or prose exactly who you are and what your place is in this universe.
Finally, I do love your word "multiverse." I have never seen it before and may, in fact, steal it some day...but only with your permission.
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Please understand these reviews of mine are not picking on you. I just happened to stumble upon one of your works and liked some of what I saw. These are merely analyses of words you have placed here for public consumption and comment. I invite you to look at some of mine and be as critical as you please. Critical dialogue is necessary to the writing process.
The last six lines are a self contained poem that tells me everything I need to know of you as a writer. The rest is poetic hyperbole.
For instance, "Life begins with love," is a lovely thought, but not necessarily true. If life, as implied, begins at the moment of conception, many lives have begun with mere lust, not love.
"True love is the most treasured prize in the multiverse"? Tell that to the ghost of Hermann Goering who looted most of Europe to gain the art he so loved. Tell that to the corporate executives of Enron, all married to women they presumably love deeply.
Think through what you write before posting it on AD. Tell me in clear, precise verse or prose exactly who you are and what your place is in this universe.
Finally, I do love your word "multiverse." I have never seen it before and may, in fact, steal it some day...but only with your permission.
Dan S.