he was trying to look gangster.
1940's.
the suit.
the gun.
the hat.
my heart was trying to do the charleston.
1920's.
the beat.
the feather.
the smile.
seems i was always out of time[s].
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Reviewed by Irina Karstein (Reader)
Reviewed on September 10, 2007
I like this. It's austere in its brevity, and the contrasting is good. I like the parallels and differences between the gangster imagery and the flapper.
Your write is good, you have talent. I appreciate that. Time is a relative thing, a fleeting moment lost. If from your heart it comes, then welcome here it be.
Welcome to Authors Den!
Some of the young chickens around here wouldn't have a clue, but to us, the oldies, your poem take us on a trip backward to the world of the wise-men and dolls, speakeasys and prohibition, and what is liked to be called today...the good-old-days.
With few words you have give us a literary pearl in a box of wisdom.
Very well done
Georg
Reviewed by twinklewrites at her desk (Reader)
Reviewed on August 2, 2007
Welcome to the Den Cedric...a beautiful poem, great flow of words...hugs, Peggy
Fine poem! Yes it's me from thoughtcafe;-) Good to see you...Did you know Jonathan has it back up? http;//www.thoughtcafe.com
Welcome to the den family,Cedric!;-)
I think something we all experience - from time to time.
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on August 2, 2007
Vivid pictures, like the way this goes.
easy to visulist the 20's dance, dah da dah dah, and the mob look.
Out of time dancing and out of the times (decades)
Stick to the beat, guess you finally found a feather from Icarus, keep smiling....
This is Kewl!
Love the theme. I often feel outa place these days, came up through the baby boomers, wild child of the 70's in the teens LOL, wouldn't want to be out there if you know what I mean now!!
Stick with the smile, beats the gun
Welcome to the den
:):) Warm smiles
Ch'erie
Synopsis
Zeke Milligan is stuck between a rock and a hard place. He is desperately in love with Lynn, but a dark secret from his past continues to rear its ugly head. Worse yet, he persistently punishes the love of his life for events that took p
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Fee
very nice.....
Art Sun...
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Love & Peace
William
(p.s. stop being so good!)
.ness.
Enjoyed your interesting review.
I would probaby try out the glass toilet,
but lock the door?
Nice .
Welcome to AD!!
Love and Hugs,
Patricia
Welcome,
Ann Scarborough
Welcome to our family!!
Love Tinka
Some of the young chickens around here wouldn't have a clue, but to us, the oldies, your poem take us on a trip backward to the world of the wise-men and dolls, speakeasys and prohibition, and what is liked to be called today...the good-old-days.
With few words you have give us a literary pearl in a box of wisdom.
Very well done
Georg
Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber "V" Moonstone
Be safe,
Karen
Very bright write. Well done...JDM
Welcome to the den family,Cedric!;-)
Eileen
easy to visulist the 20's dance, dah da dah dah, and the mob look.
Out of time dancing and out of the times (decades)
Stick to the beat, guess you finally found a feather from Icarus, keep smiling....
Nice one...
Love the theme. I often feel outa place these days, came up through the baby boomers, wild child of the 70's in the teens LOL, wouldn't want to be out there if you know what I mean now!!
Stick with the smile, beats the gun
Welcome to the den
:):) Warm smiles
Ch'erie