A Browning Perspective (Poetry) - 2/15/2009 3:30:09 PM
Pure genius Patrice; this is not retreat but superb offense; to be elemental is to be the earth herself.
Miss you,
Darmok
A Browning Perspective (Poetry) - 3/4/2007 11:45:37 AM
Your poetry gives on so m uch meaning that you have to recieve positive feedback from all that review. Thanks for sharing with me and many others here on the lovely Den.
the way of light (Poetry) - 6/9/2006 5:42:31 PM
"A blind man
cupped my face
in his hands"
Oh Patrice ... how I love that line!
A wonderful poem full of light!
"day from day
light from light" Brilliant!
Love, Suzie :-D
the way of light (Poetry) - 6/9/2006 9:13:15 AM
This is a deeply spirit filled write that speaks to the soul...
Xxxx dove
A Browning Perspective (Poetry) - 6/8/2006 9:11:38 AM
This construct is filled with the mysteries of suffering.
To resupinate as a bauble to adorn the ear of another must be humiliating, especially when you see it for what it is.
"Tasting stones to conjure your return" is certainly true to your thought-provoking style - so obvious, yet so utterly mysterious.
"sheathe of water cascading" leaves the head scratching reader with the feeling that, through it all, you are growing in ways never dreamed, flowing down and away into another season where suffering becomes beauty.
Hats off to you Pataliyah
Richard
On The Field Which They Reap (Poetry) - 6/7/2006 6:16:31 PM
"In perifery of far flung shadow" Periphery!
Cerulean! Beautiful word to describe a deep blue color! Excellent!
"The grip of bramble" very mysterious and open to many interpretations!
Beautifully resolved in the last line. Oh that life would accomodate in such beauty!
Excellent!
Richard
On The Field Which They Reap (Poetry) - 6/7/2006 5:28:58 PM
Has a beautiful metaphysical feel to it...
You weave your words with consummate care...:0
Peter
A Browning Perspective (Poetry) - 6/7/2006 4:49:06 PM
Browning as in dying
like the life of a leaf in the fall
what once was verdent and full of promise falls to the ground???
Amazing words
well done
pax
A
A Browning Perspective (Poetry) - 6/7/2006 4:26:37 PM
Patrice
It's good to see you standing up for yourself...
No woman should be a doormat for a man...
Powerful write...
Peter
If You Seek Me (Poetry) - 6/5/2006 10:26:11 AM
The beautiful imagery enhances the powerful sentiments and meaning of this poem. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you,
Regis
If You Seek Me (Poetry) - 6/5/2006 8:09:47 AM
A very poignant tribute Payaliyah, and what a heartrending story Terri's was!
The imagery is beautiful, especially the lines following: "I am a child that sees with her hands."
I am glad to read you again!
Blessings
Richard
al dente (Poetry) - 5/24/2006 8:42:29 AM
I'm curious . . . what was it you were cooking here?
You Patiliyah, as always, astound me with your insights and your ability to enchant amd mesmerize. Turning the mundane into art, and suffering into light flowing eastward in washes of inspiration.
Keep Writing
Respectfully
Richard
power beamed in bantam lines (Poetry) - 5/24/2006 8:34:47 AM
What powerful imagery here Payiliyah.
"small man's bravado stands akimbo." Love this image!
Hands on hips, elbows outward, snotty disposition, totally self-absorbed. (-:
I see also in the poem a kind of suffering for the poet. Trying to understand certainly has its limitations, but thank God for the colors that spew hopelessly from the heart to enrich others in their own struggles to understand.
Keep Writing!
Respectfully
Richard
Southern City Daughter (Poetry) - 5/24/2006 8:27:05 AM
I believe that you don't fit into too many situations, especially in public, not professional. You, dear Patiliyah, are an astute observer that sees more than most.
A lovely Poem!
Richard
Eve's Remembrance of Cain (Poetry) - 5/21/2006 5:21:32 PM
An extraordinary expression of a rare perception, and very, very true.
The Language of Leaves (Poetry) - 5/18/2006 1:33:47 PM
Deep rivers flow here Pataliyah.
"Of a hard-bitten silence caught in my throat" is a superbly colored poetic brushstroke. Ahh, the depths that loving can take one to. I wonder how many times the waves of hope have crashed on the shores of apathy for all those deep souls that share on Authors Den? What sorrow, and suffering, and emotional emptiness the human heart is capable of. Keep writing! I feel nourished after reading.
Richard
Eve's Remembrance of Cain (Poetry) - 5/18/2006 1:19:45 PM
I am amazed at the utter uniqueness of your perceptiveness. I have found in my many adventures that there are, occasionally, those rare wildflowers that defy categorization. Irrespective of the plethora of weeds surrounding them, these wildflowers inevitably develop into artists with eyes that see well beyond primary colors.
There is nothing prosaic about how your visions play upon the artistic psyche. I find a sense of liberation, or if you will, a freedom from poetic prejudice as I dive into the deep waters.
BRAVO!
Richard L Cederberg
The Language of Leaves (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 10:06:42 PM
deeply motivated and powerfully perceptive imagery ...
The Language of Leaves (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 5:51:49 PM
Powerfully emotive and meaningful; soul-reaching offering. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace,
Regis
Eve's Remembrance of Cain (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 5:50:18 PM
This is superbly compelling poetry, Pataliyah; worthy of much more than a single reading. Thank you for sharing your gift. Love and peace to you,
Regis
The Language of Leaves (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 5:11:53 PM
Patrice
Quite a gut wrenching and poignant write...
You can feel the intensity of your emotions
Peter
The Way of Water (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 1:06:28 PM
Powerful spiritual imagery here Pataliyah. You write with a penchant towards surrealism, and what you are conveying is not readily understood without meditation. Whether it was intended or not, "and the caved lips of sleep" is as good a description of death as I've ever read. You are gifted!
Be blessed
Richard
The Way of Water (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 9:26:43 AM
The Light always brightens up all corners and recesses !
Peter
power beamed in bantam lines (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 9:22:45 AM
Patrice
Has a sweet , metaphysical feel about this lovely poem
Peter
al dente (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 7:02:19 AM
Thank you for introducing me to the word 'Fundus' whatever it is lol. It does not detract from this excellent piece love the use of assonance and your style.
Paul;-)
The Reconstruction (Poetry) - 5/17/2006 6:54:55 AM
A stunning collection of imagery and meaning is held within 'Reconstruction', enjoyed the read...a belated welcome to the Den by the way.
Paul;-)
The Reconstruction (Poetry) - 5/16/2006 7:50:36 PM
I am dazzled. The depth, the detail, the flow. All, all remarkable. I am happy to have found you.
la musica (Poetry) - 5/16/2006 10:48:56 AM
A beautiful gift for your child; thank you for sharing it. Welcome to AD. Love and peace,
Regis
la musica (Poetry) - 5/16/2006 10:43:04 AM
Superb poetry! Welcome to the den!
eT
