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Maimuna is a bad girl. Concerning the suggestion of missing conflict resolution, this is only because Mrs. Wasdsworth has too high an opinion of Maimuna but there is, of course, no doubt where Maimuna got her money from and that the reason for being angry is the exposure if this. I'd say that this becomes quite clear from the context of the story.
Your protagonist being ignorant about all this is to be pitied for his affection for a person who is not worth it but often the first stirrings of love in a person't life are lost on persons who don't merit the preciousness of the innocence sacrificed on the altar of love. Very realistically portrayed.
01.08.
I have allowed myself some inappropriate comment on the subject of Maimuna which might be harmful with view to a true appreciation of the point you are raising in this story. Of course, Maimuna is a girl born at point zero with no perspective and no choice but comply with the underlying standards of a society she has neither designed nor choosen. The boy in stirring up what is understood to be a secret, unknowingly has threatened the basis of her economic survival and must therefore attract her distrust.
Certainly it is assumed that a s a result the balance of the house is bound to be irrevocably disturbed which leaves no way open but disintegration and the boy, once again, will find himself abandoned. It will, no doubt, be Maimuna who has to supply him with some money and assist him in surviving whereby she will not fail to effect in him an understanding of these particular traits of the society of whuich she is a creature (like himself) and presently -willingly or unwillingly- a conspirator. (Nobody does things entirely willingly nor entirely unwillingly). Pointing this out, your literature and perspective shall in the true sense be superior.
(Nobody can at the present stage afford condemning Apuskeleke girls per se).
Vividly described. some conflict resolution is missing. I mean the reader is never sure why the woman is mad at the boy in regard to the night visitor. It was never clear to me that the night visitor was a threat. I think I've noticed this in the other captures but didn't quite know how to say it.
These are still good vignettes and gives a nice prespective of the African culture. There is some suspense and mystery but I don't feel it gets fully developed.
Glad you came out of your writer's block!
Write on.
Excellent story, Sandie; always a joy to read you! Very well done; brava!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D
Reviewed by Sulubu Tuva
7/27/2006
Teenage girl worker a libidinous boss whose wife's role is to procreate. Mmmmh. I'd tell albino boy to look out for unfulfilled urges from mama. Sandie again you are rocking.
Reviewed by Ingrid Khola
7/26/2006
Ha! Maimuna is doing the Master? What's new. Excellent turn of events and suspense! U go gal!
Ingrid
Maimuna sounds a real nasty piece of work !
Quite a spell binding chapter full of rising and escalating tensions between the boy, Maimuna and Baba..
You had me hooked from start to finish !
Peter
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton
7/26/2006
You have written so well of confusion and despair in the young one as being totally rejected by Maimuna and then Baba. Not experienced enought to catch on the th goings-on, he is actually beginning to feel threatened. You wrote about this confusion and fear because of Maimuna's animosity well enough that I was feeling sorry for him, when you can get the reader involved, you have done your job.
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