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Walking feet with blisters,
moving,
don’t know the meaning of stop,
panic,
panic taking over all ten toes,
trying,
to run faster and away,
nobody,
can escape “that” warden,
thoughts.
Man in motion going nowhere,
exhaustion,
he weeps tears of utter absentia,
alone,
remembering passing by so many,
loves,
couldn’t tell if any of them for him,
was,
blisters covering a heart that never,
loved.
The mountain gave with painful birth
a rock,
and in that desolate silence the man
will stop,
since he had no heard that sad crying
before,
man suffering solitude…the only one
is not,
if you listen, you will hear “that” crying
from a rock.
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in motion,
he weeps tears of utter absentia,
alone,
remembering passing by so many,
loves,
couldn’t tell if any of them for him,
was,
blisters covering a heart that never,
loved."
IT SEEMS THAT THE ABOVE REVISION SETTLES THE MATTER.
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I like this composition... "The Rock that Cried" makes me think on the indifference of our society.
In admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
My pointing out of a line I presumed to be "borrowed" is far from me "reviewing my knowledge of music".
I do not understand why you would try to ridicule me in such a way.
You clearly do not know the band, and what I saw as plagiarism turned out to be an accidental one.
I hope you understand that I did not mean to offend you, although I have to admit that my initial reaction was very crude.
Since you so kindly asked me to review your poem, I will write a word or two.
I had, of course, not even bothered to read the poem before writing my first comment.
I think the poem is very cold. It evokes very well the loneliness that we may feel in this world, and shows the loneliness we feel is quite omnipresent and somewhat unfounded. A great poem.
By the way, the commas used in my poem came from Skakespeare's Hamlet and the word "stone" from a Bob Dylan song (brother Jersey knows it)
Hope next time dear Rumen review the poem not his knowledge of music(?)
Georg Whatyoutalkingabout
CarolHawks
outstanding poem ...
Be always safe,
Karen
Love Always,
Chanti Lace xoxo
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Fee
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D