Recollections of a sad parting of two lovers after a final tryst on the banks of a river in the south of China.
Memories of the Long Jiang River flow gently through my mind like the graceful, rolling pace of Long Jiang's journey to the sea.
Images of you fall free like a waterfall from the edge of my knowing to the reservoir containing all important symbols of my life.
There you are, standing by a boulder on the banks of the Long Jiang River; in the background locals do the family wash, the river swirls reluctant suds away.
My mind’s eye zooms in on you: Beautiful, fragile, wondrously bathed in mystic smiles that make the waters glitter with frenzy of sparkling beams.
We slowly cross the river in a ferry powered by two women with oars. We share the backdrop of surreal limestone peaks with fisherfolk on Chinese river boats.
Something else we share: flooding emotions, desperate realization that soon we must part at the Long Jiang River, and even worse, you must stay with your river; I must go to mine.
Beautiful and sad - as parting must be. Exquisite in its visual appeal, Patrick.
with thanks,
Gina
Reviewed by Mark Mahoney (Reader)
Reviewed on July 27, 2003
What a brilliant read, it flows just as well as its subject, and reads majestic, well done Patrick, you done this so very well indeed...take care...Mark...
Perhaps they will join at the ocean.
Excellent poem.
Best wishes always.
from
Kay.
Reviewed by Birdie Houston (Reader)
Reviewed on June 13, 2003
Written with Excellence this was so touching and beautiful loved the entirety
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on May 9, 2003
Inside each human heart is an image of this, though locations may differ.. I add yours to my own because you took me there in words too beautiful, too fragile to be reinvented by mere comments in a box. This touched that secret place.. oh, the heart of a romantic man. Lovely, Patrick. katy.
Your words paints a nice picture. There are so much goodness in this one, Patrick! It is so beautiful the way you have described this. You words have added much wonders visual effect in my mind.
Wonderful work indeed!
Sandie Angel :o) a.k.a. May Lu $*_*$
Reviewed by C. Gourlay (Reader)
Reviewed on April 22, 2003
a beautiful, poignant piece Patrick.
(also congrats of the win for a Kind of Death - deserved indeed)
This is my personal inspirational book of poetry. It contains many poems written for family, friends, and relevant life situations. Hopefully you will find some that will encourage and inpsire you in whatever arena you are found in your circle of l
Vesna
with thanks,
Gina
Images here were indeed something else.
Teresa
Excellent poem.
Best wishes always.
from
Kay.
Wonderful work indeed!
Sandie Angel :o) a.k.a. May Lu $*_*$
(also congrats of the win for a Kind of Death - deserved indeed)
Hugs,
Victoria
Sally Odgers.