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Suds Gone Flat

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Life’s pollution comes in all forms, some custom made for minds and hearts longing.

Tuesday, May 12, 2015


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Suds Gone Flat
by Odin Roark

The safety of trusted acquaintances is endangered
as friendship-obsessions seems pandemic,
many buddying-up without thought or caution,
and like a cooler of drained beer cans
thrown into a mountain stream,
the whirlpool of social marketing
lures such buddy-doctrine through rocky challenges,
proselytizing friends in number as reward.

These care-free uninitiated,
oblivious to the hidden currents
and rapids downstream,
knock about in party-time oblivion,
giving fellow indulgence afloat a wide berth,
while crashing head-on into others.

And…

Comparable to empties from a 12-pack,
followers swirl about in their self-punishing maze,
like carnival rides with no purpose,
save the “woe is me” distaste of unwanted surprises,
the noxious surge of life’s inevitable jetsam.

Holding fate strangely in limbo,
other boundless mistaken-identities cascade by,
as they too think themselves innocent,
unaware a stream’s trickling playfulness,
is but gravity’s willingness to eventually
multiply into tributaries.

Sadly…

Foreign waters merge with the river-roar,
a chorusing “BFF” rising into the mist,
as the conjoined naïve plunge over the falls,
aloneness waiting below in mockery’s isolation.
 


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Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on May 13, 2015
Psychologists have determined that we can have only four or five real friends over the course of a lifetime. All the rest are just "acquaintances."

Your poem is so telling because it highlights the fallacy with a very good analogy (pollution) for what happens when people, particularly young people, flock to friendship that leads, like you so eloquently have written, downriver to nowhere… Perhaps in a swirling mass of confusion in the middle of the North Pacific, poisoning everything it comes in touch with.

That's why I don't consider anyone here, "friends." They are fellow "authors" like you unless they don't have anything worthwhile to write about, and then, they are not even that.

Ron

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK
Reviewed on May 12, 2015
5-13-2015

Geeeezzz You Just Described

State (Mexifornia) California..

TRASK...

Reviewed by Isabella Koldras
Reviewed on May 12, 2015
....take the Best Friends Forever's BFF...leaving
the other BFF meaning to your own private home
..."mockery's isolation".......

Reviewed by Kate Burnside
Reviewed on May 12, 2015
as the conjoined naïve plunge over the falls,
aloneness waiting below in mockery’s isolation.

This is such a well-thought out and provoking piece, commenting on the dynamics of what passes for modern relationships. I find it refreshing, Odin, as you have whittled down to the core here, investigating both the needs and drives that fuel our pursuit of so-called popularity or social-inclusion. In the light of all this, your well-crafted final line is chilling. Cool metaphor. xx


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