I really love this one and the thought process behind it, should use spell check if you can for there are a number of spelling mistakes that take away from the beauty of your work...example your should be you're, im should be I'm and thught should be thought. Hope you don't mind the tips....
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I LIKE THE PHRASES, IMAGERY AND RHYME SCHEME. YOUR WORDS REMIND ME OF HOW JESUS FELT ABOUT ME...WHEN HE WAS CAJOLING AND TRYING TO GET ME TO BECOME 'HIS'...AND I REMEMBER...I WAS HESITANT AND 'CONFUSED' BUT...ALL HE WANTED WAS ME...NOW, I AM GLAD THAT HE WAS PATIENT AND WAITED FOR ME. WANT AND NEED...WELL WRITTEN AND ENJOYED. BLESSINGS. JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS
A young technician mourns his lover until he meets another man - a man with a secret. But there are other secrets as a jealous ghost returns to protect his turf.
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